Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'Marriage Proposal' writing prompt.
A story well told about a failing relationship and the reasons.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018

Thank you very much.

Comment from Mabaker

Excellent

Well written if a tad long-winded. You took so much time telling their back story the title got about ten words.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018

Thank you for your review.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

M-m-m a proper lovers' tiff ...saying what needed for so long to be said ..honesty and frankness and openess of sentiment..hard to do but the only thing that works in the end ...well conveyed here between these two weary lovers

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018

Thank you for your review

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

I like the way you approached this -
so down-to-earth, the dialogue
flowing naturally, which
made it enjoyable to read.

Good luck with the contest.


Blessings,
Margaret

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018

Thank you. I appreciate the review.

Comment from beizanten

Excellent

I am here to checkout my competition and may I say that this story is well written especially with a nice twist in the end. And do you mind me asking how did this story suit the contest title marriage proposal when no one propose

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018

Thanks for your comment. The rules of the contest said it didn't have to be about a marriage proposal per se, so I thought two lovers deciding to continue their relationship was like an unspoken marriage proposal.

Comment from frierajac

Excellent

Very good discussion in the ongoing dialogue. Not a dull moment. I imagine that
one of the people could have mentioned boredom. This struck me as the tacit theme of this piece.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018

Yep, indeed. Thank you for your review.

Comment from Bliss A

Excellent

This was a nice read for me. I liked that they were able to resolve their issues eventually by being open and honest when it mattered most. The only thing I could not relate to the story was the title and its significance to the story

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018

Thank you for your review. The title had no special significance other than tying the end to the beginning. What would you suggest for a title?