Faith
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Comment from robyn corum
Easy,
Though I feel most of your poem and its questions are rhetorical, I love to discuss Biblical matters. It took me a while, but I have honestly and truly found the right path. If you're ever interested in a dialogue about it, I'd love to talk with you more. *smile*
My favorite verse, by far:
But when the question is of God
Or His existence at the core,
I must admit that I am awed,
Because each question raises more.
Thanks!
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Easy,
Though I feel most of your poem and its questions are rhetorical, I love to discuss Biblical matters. It took me a while, but I have honestly and truly found the right path. If you're ever interested in a dialogue about it, I'd love to talk with you more. *smile*
My favorite verse, by far:
But when the question is of God
Or His existence at the core,
I must admit that I am awed,
Because each question raises more.
Thanks!
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, Tom, you've been busy posting and is ending 2017 with a bang!
This is a fine poem of faith, or, rather, a series of questions about faith. You write:
The greatest minds have spoken out,
Regarding God's reality;
The essence of what God's about
In grandiose soliloquy.
I sense your struggle for answers as man has struggled with this for ages:
Belief conflicted, often brings
Out hate and blatant bigotry;
This is the faith the zealot sings,
Redundant throughout history.
I have read so many rhymed poems today, that I focus on your solid message while your rhymes fade in the background as supports. In your closing lines you wonder:
. . . do the lessons learned soon fade
As man repeats mistakes he makes?
Finally, you plead:
Please tell me what belief contains
And which belief I should believe?
I feel your angst and search for answers. This adds an intensity and energy to your poem.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you much success in the contest and in the coming year.
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Wow, Tom, you've been busy posting and is ending 2017 with a bang!
This is a fine poem of faith, or, rather, a series of questions about faith. You write:
The greatest minds have spoken out,
Regarding God's reality;
The essence of what God's about
In grandiose soliloquy.
I sense your struggle for answers as man has struggled with this for ages:
Belief conflicted, often brings
Out hate and blatant bigotry;
This is the faith the zealot sings,
Redundant throughout history.
I have read so many rhymed poems today, that I focus on your solid message while your rhymes fade in the background as supports. In your closing lines you wonder:
. . . do the lessons learned soon fade
As man repeats mistakes he makes?
Finally, you plead:
Please tell me what belief contains
And which belief I should believe?
I feel your angst and search for answers. This adds an intensity and energy to your poem.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you much success in the contest and in the coming year.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
Comment from Just2Write
This is my second six of the day, and my last one of the week. Another splendid offering, Easy. Man, it's good to see you posting here again. You always approach your poems and themes with wisdom and offer a complexity of thought and poetic skill not often seen. This is a poem of quatrains and and simple ABAB rhyme scheme in iambic tetrameter, (my comfort zone meter) and yet, there is something very deep in your words that makes the poem feel like so much more.
Nice alleteration in: Complex concerns to contemplate / frolic in fruition's feast / blatant bigotry / Though tempting theories, and many more.
and good quick rhyme with: I yearn to learn.
Exceptional writing, my friend. Again - Welcome back.
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This is my second six of the day, and my last one of the week. Another splendid offering, Easy. Man, it's good to see you posting here again. You always approach your poems and themes with wisdom and offer a complexity of thought and poetic skill not often seen. This is a poem of quatrains and and simple ABAB rhyme scheme in iambic tetrameter, (my comfort zone meter) and yet, there is something very deep in your words that makes the poem feel like so much more.
Nice alleteration in: Complex concerns to contemplate / frolic in fruition's feast / blatant bigotry / Though tempting theories, and many more.
and good quick rhyme with: I yearn to learn.
Exceptional writing, my friend. Again - Welcome back.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
Comment from John A Catania
Very great piece, Very artistic, Yet seemingly confused. You must first find yourself and what you believe as it flows better from the heart and almost always bleeds true.
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Very great piece, Very artistic, Yet seemingly confused. You must first find yourself and what you believe as it flows better from the heart and almost always bleeds true.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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I don't pay much attention to stars John. But you haven't told me how to improve the post to satisfy your deduction of a star. To just say I haven't found myself is, in the first place, not quite true. I just haven't bought in to mythology yet and probably never will. But, did the poem's structure and form have problems? Did I maintain the iambic meter without a bump or slip or break in rhythm? Did I misuse any poetic devices you can detect? There are a lot of people in this world who have not found faith, religious faith at any rate, but that does not mean they have not found themselves. It means that they question belief in abstractions born out of countless and I mean countless mythological, man-made creations. So, I wrote a poem, a structured metered poem utilizing poetics to explain my search for a belief system or individual belief that I can have 'faith' in, but I have not found that illusive magic as of yet. I would only suggest, in the future, try and review the versification and components of the poem and not your take on the writer's "confusion" or the writer's lack of cognizant understanding of his/her self. My understanding of 'self' is very well grounded and one of the greatest mistakes would be poets make is to think that putting heart and emotion into a disciplined construct like good poetry is all that is needed are woefully mistaken. Writing legitimate, professional grade poetry involves one's emotional attachment to his/her subject only before the writing begins. Heart and emotion should only be involved as part of the inspiration for a poem and not influence the complex task of constructing the poem. Writing a decent poetic is 99% intellect and 1% heart.
Thank you for the review and comments John. Happy New Year.
easyeverett
Comment from kiwigirl2821
You make me think that you still have youth on your side as there is hope in your writing. Keep that open mind - it works for you. Your work is a pleasure to read and this particular one made me wanna leave you with one thought; what should you believe? It doesn't matter. Mistakes don't happen. People don't just happen to run into each other and our creator whoever that may actually turn out to be, will show up at exactly the right time. Happy New Year. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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You make me think that you still have youth on your side as there is hope in your writing. Keep that open mind - it works for you. Your work is a pleasure to read and this particular one made me wanna leave you with one thought; what should you believe? It doesn't matter. Mistakes don't happen. People don't just happen to run into each other and our creator whoever that may actually turn out to be, will show up at exactly the right time. Happy New Year. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Hi Kiwi. Happy New Year to you and yours. Have a wonderful 2018 my friend. Thank you very much for the helpful review and though I do not have youth on my side, I believe in the old adage, that it is the journey not the destination achieved that gives the human spirit the greatest joy so I am happy that I still have enough mental acuity to continue the journey of joy while not losing sleep over the likelihood of not reaching the final destination. The search has enlivened my mind for 74 years. By searching the great literature written on theology, philosophy, history, mathematics, creativity and many more subjects of interest, I am blessed to have kept my interest in all the myriad magic man has made. Thanks again Kiwi, have a wonderful 2018 my friend. tom
Comment from smudge
As a poem I rate this highly. I cannot fault the rhthem and the rhymn. The doubts it expresses form the need for faith which is unconditional belief. Great alliteration as well.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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As a poem I rate this highly. I cannot fault the rhthem and the rhymn. The doubts it expresses form the need for faith which is unconditional belief. Great alliteration as well.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Wow smudge. What a great year end gift to old easy. I am honored you found this rather atypical entry to the Faith contest worthy enough for the gift of six. I enjoyed writing it and tried to reflect the issues on faith I have had and still have. You honor me friend. Happy New Year to you and those you love and who love you. Have a great and creative 2018 smudge and I'll see you around the corner. tom
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A thought provoking poem about faith. You examine beliefs and wonder at your own. The last line is the most telling.
And which belief I should believe? ~ This is the question of all ages. It's one I would certainly like to know.
Take care, and good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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A thought provoking poem about faith. You examine beliefs and wonder at your own. The last line is the most telling.
And which belief I should believe? ~ This is the question of all ages. It's one I would certainly like to know.
Take care, and good luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Well Rhonda let us make a pact. I you find the answer, you let me know and if I find the answer I will let you know. Two searching minds are always better than one, don't you think? I appreciate this fine review and I wish you and yours a Happy New Year. Take care, stay healthy, safe and creative my friend. Thanks again. tom
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I completely agree!! It is our pact!
Comment from Sugarray77
Very well-written with supportive statements. I like the way you ended with .... Please tell me what belief contains and which belief I should believe. Good job.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Very well-written with supportive statements. I like the way you ended with .... Please tell me what belief contains and which belief I should believe. Good job.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Thanks a million Sugarray. I am most honored friend. Happy New Year and stay safe, healthy, and creative in 2018. tom
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how keenly you have been searching faith, you wish to learn the truths, even your mind is open to receive everything what contains beliefs and which belief you should believe; I liked. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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This speaks how keenly you have been searching faith, you wish to learn the truths, even your mind is open to receive everything what contains beliefs and which belief you should believe; I liked. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Thank you ALD. Glad you liked it and I wish you a Happy and Creative New Year my friend. Thank you very much.
Comment from patcelaw
may the last verse of your delight poem be the heart's cry of all who believe. I know it is my heart's cry.
Patricia
The need to learn great truth remains,
My mind is open to receive;
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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may the last verse of your delight poem be the heart's cry of all who believe. I know it is my heart's cry.
Patricia
The need to learn great truth remains,
My mind is open to receive;
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Thank you patcelaw for this very nice review. I am most honored. Have a Happy and safe New Year my friend. tom
