Reindeer Rules
My Christmas offering11 total reviews
Comment from nartoonla
And the verdict of the story was...? No doubt Santa kept the reindeers, as I have not seen him yet on so-called motorbikes.
Phew, as that would be sad as tradition faded away.
Orignal story and yet pleased to let you know as I teach preschoolers that they still draw Santa on his sleigh with his magical reindeers.
Great long gone bikes but a few. Sigh.
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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And the verdict of the story was...? No doubt Santa kept the reindeers, as I have not seen him yet on so-called motorbikes.
Phew, as that would be sad as tradition faded away.
Orignal story and yet pleased to let you know as I teach preschoolers that they still draw Santa on his sleigh with his magical reindeers.
Great long gone bikes but a few. Sigh.
Comment Written 11-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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. Thank you nartoonia for reading and reviewing my nonsense. You can ensure your pre-schoolers the reindeers are safe. They kept their job. Thanks again
Comment from jenintorre
A very cute poem. I like the comparisons of sleigh riders and motor bike accidents. How about the last line reading, "We live by reindeer rules, we have all we need and just don't need no more". Just a suggestion?
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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A very cute poem. I like the comparisons of sleigh riders and motor bike accidents. How about the last line reading, "We live by reindeer rules, we have all we need and just don't need no more". Just a suggestion?
Comment Written 21-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and a special thank you for the suggestion. It sure does work. Hope Santa calls at your place and you have a wonderful Christmas
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written poem, with some marvellous advice on safety to the round fat guy. Bob, well done, Merry Christmas and a happy, healthy new year to you and yours, from me and mine. Blessings. Roy.
Writing rhythmic, rhyming poetry requires a metronomic beat in one's head, lots of practice, arranging strong and weak syllables, like. "the REAson FOR the EXerCISE, is TRYing to RE adVERtise. Two lines of eight syllables (iambic tetrameter) joined together to make a sixteen syllable line
Suggestion "one don't need no more" just to help a little Bob. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Beautifully written poem, with some marvellous advice on safety to the round fat guy. Bob, well done, Merry Christmas and a happy, healthy new year to you and yours, from me and mine. Blessings. Roy.
Writing rhythmic, rhyming poetry requires a metronomic beat in one's head, lots of practice, arranging strong and weak syllables, like. "the REAson FOR the EXerCISE, is TRYing to RE adVERtise. Two lines of eight syllables (iambic tetrameter) joined together to make a sixteen syllable line
Suggestion "one don't need no more" just to help a little Bob. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Firstly Roy, I hope Christmas brings you everything you need and some of the things you want. And may 2018 see you again atop the list of poets.
Thank you for the lovely review. I really appreciate it
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Well done Bob, just trying to help
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL, I nearly choked on my apple when I read the last line of the first stanza, that was so funny. I love this poem, it's seasonal and jolly and I have to agree with Rudolph, it wouldn't be the same with Santa on a Harley bike! LOL. Well done, loved it. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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LOL, I nearly choked on my apple when I read the last line of the first stanza, that was so funny. I love this poem, it's seasonal and jolly and I have to agree with Rudolph, it wouldn't be the same with Santa on a Harley bike! LOL. Well done, loved it. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 20-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Thank you Sandra. Glad you enjoyed the irreverence. Hope you have a happy and joyful Christmas
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt and fun poem about the striking reindeer. Santa must be out of his jolly mind to think a Harley bike will bring him as much pleasure as Rudolph and the rest of the reindeer.
Merry Christmas to you and your family.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt and fun poem about the striking reindeer. Santa must be out of his jolly mind to think a Harley bike will bring him as much pleasure as Rudolph and the rest of the reindeer.
Merry Christmas to you and your family.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Sandra, I really appreciate your kind words. So glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
Just love your poem. Just fun to read puts one in a great mood. Rhyming is good and I wouldn't worry to much about the last line being a bit long. (poet's license)
Happy Christmas Chhers Gaye
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Just love your poem. Just fun to read puts one in a great mood. Rhyming is good and I wouldn't worry to much about the last line being a bit long. (poet's license)
Happy Christmas Chhers Gaye
Comment Written 20-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Thank you Gaye for your kind words. It was intended as fun and I'm glad it came across that way
Comment from Neonewman
Well this was a wonderfully crafted, humorous Christmas piece you have delivered my friend. I enjoyed the funs and puns throughout its entirety. Merry Christmas.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Well this was a wonderfully crafted, humorous Christmas piece you have delivered my friend. I enjoyed the funs and puns throughout its entirety. Merry Christmas.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 20-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Thank you Steve, your comments are very much appreciated. It was intended as a fun piece and I'm delighted you enjoyed it.
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My pleasure!
Comment from Geeps
I liked this story, and found it original and entertaining on having the idea of Santa upgrading and the reindeer go on strike. However, I had difficulty keeping with the flow because of your punctuation. Some commas seemed out of place. At times I wasn't sure if someone was speaking or not.
For example "Rudolph won't negotiate, says December's" it almost comes off as someone named December says rudolph won't negotiate.
Any reason you keep spacing out "reindeer"?
The last line "We live by reindeer rules: When you have all you need, you don't need anymore"
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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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I liked this story, and found it original and entertaining on having the idea of Santa upgrading and the reindeer go on strike. However, I had difficulty keeping with the flow because of your punctuation. Some commas seemed out of place. At times I wasn't sure if someone was speaking or not.
For example "Rudolph won't negotiate, says December's" it almost comes off as someone named December says rudolph won't negotiate.
Any reason you keep spacing out "reindeer"?
The last line "We live by reindeer rules: When you have all you need, you don't need anymore"
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Thank you for stopping by and reviewing my poem. I'll take another look at it and consider changing to make it clearer. Appreciate your comments
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written somewhat comical Christmas poem about the reindeer. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2017
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This is a very well written somewhat comical Christmas poem about the reindeer. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2017
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Teri 7, thank you for taking the time to review my work. After just reading your poem, I am envious at your talent to sum up so correctly the true meaning of this weekend. All the best to you and your family.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks for this year Christmas celebration, no feeding rein deer, Santa would come by bike that needs no feeding like rein deer; no wealth required, enough; I like. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2017
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This speaks for this year Christmas celebration, no feeding rein deer, Santa would come by bike that needs no feeding like rein deer; no wealth required, enough; I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2017
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Thank you for stopping by and reviewing. I appreciate your comments. Hope your Christmas brings you everything you need.
