The Wind Remembers
Just a poem that came to me-not biographical17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Although this thought came to you from nowhere, there are many people who feel this kind of loneliness in the world and carry this meloncholy with them, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Although this thought came to you from nowhere, there are many people who feel this kind of loneliness in the world and carry this meloncholy with them, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thanks much!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem from great inspiration from the muse. It is a fact that when a line is stuck in our head, it is time to go sit down and start writing.
Merry Christmas to you and your family.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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A very well-written poem from great inspiration from the muse. It is a fact that when a line is stuck in our head, it is time to go sit down and start writing.
Merry Christmas to you and your family.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thanks, and the Happiest Holidays to you also.
Comment from lyenochka
It's a marvelous first line. But I am thinking about what that wind symbolizes. The poem speaks of regret. In the third stanza, the wind had a "warning song" like a conscience trying to keep the narrator/persona from acting upon the "cruelty." But by the "end of the day," the persona isn't free to accept forgiveness through prayer because the "wind," the guilty conscience, blows his "words away." So sad. It's a well constructed poem in rhymes, internal rhymes, assonance and alliteration!
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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It's a marvelous first line. But I am thinking about what that wind symbolizes. The poem speaks of regret. In the third stanza, the wind had a "warning song" like a conscience trying to keep the narrator/persona from acting upon the "cruelty." But by the "end of the day," the persona isn't free to accept forgiveness through prayer because the "wind," the guilty conscience, blows his "words away." So sad. It's a well constructed poem in rhymes, internal rhymes, assonance and alliteration!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful review.
Comment from cflorian8
You told your dreadful story quite well. I felt the misery oozing from each verse. The rhyme scheme is easy to follow too. The gloomy picture also agrees with the somber mood of the poem Congratulations on a job well done.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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You told your dreadful story quite well. I felt the misery oozing from each verse. The rhyme scheme is easy to follow too. The gloomy picture also agrees with the somber mood of the poem Congratulations on a job well done.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thanks so much especially for that beautiful green star!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
You may not know where the poem came from but it came together beautifully. It does justice to your excellent first line.
Well written and well rhymed.
Well done. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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You may not know where the poem came from but it came together beautifully. It does justice to your excellent first line.
Well written and well rhymed.
Well done. Thank you for sharing this lovely piece with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thanks much, Sharon.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a fine, emotional poem about wind that reminds the memories and sings the songs I liked the feeling and togetherness and joy and excitement and reminders; DR ALCREATOR
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This is a fine, emotional poem about wind that reminds the memories and sings the songs I liked the feeling and togetherness and joy and excitement and reminders; DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 15-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thanks much for the reading.
Comment from Neonewman
Thoroughly enjoyed this well crafted piece you have delivered my friend. This thought in particular captured my attention. "I ignored the ancient wind's warning song."
God bless!
Steve
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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thoroughly enjoyed this well crafted piece you have delivered my friend. This thought in particular captured my attention. "I ignored the ancient wind's warning song."
God bless!
Steve
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Comment Written 15-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
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Thanks much, Steve.
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My pleasure
