Unleashed Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Whispers in the Night/Part Two"A Novel of the Breedline Series
8 total reviews
Comment from Natali Holden
"The aching awareness that her mother loved her after all these years was the revelation she needed to survive no matter the circumstances she would face."
Tessa is amazing. It just worries me about what she's gonna do when she finds out her mom is the circumstance. Awesome chapter!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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"The aching awareness that her mother loved her after all these years was the revelation she needed to survive no matter the circumstances she would face."
Tessa is amazing. It just worries me about what she's gonna do when she finds out her mom is the circumstance. Awesome chapter!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Natali :)
So glad you liked the part about Tessa when she found out her mother wanted her after all these years. I enjoyed writing that part. Don't worry too much about Tessa... she is the Breedline queen and has the courage of ten men and the heart of gold.
Thanks so much!
Shana :)
Comment from rwilliam
WOW! What a great picture. I just want to stare at it. I love how real the wings look.
I absolutely LOVE the way you wrote this very visual line!!: After he had put in his password, he listened carefully as a prickle of unease snaked down his spine.
OH WOW what an ending to this chapter. I know I"ve missed so much of your story. SOMEDAY, I hope to go back and get caught up. Until then, I"m back. I look forward to reading more.
Have a wonderful Christmas id I don't see you at the gym. :-)
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2017
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WOW! What a great picture. I just want to stare at it. I love how real the wings look.
I absolutely LOVE the way you wrote this very visual line!!: After he had put in his password, he listened carefully as a prickle of unease snaked down his spine.
OH WOW what an ending to this chapter. I know I"ve missed so much of your story. SOMEDAY, I hope to go back and get caught up. Until then, I"m back. I look forward to reading more.
Have a wonderful Christmas id I don't see you at the gym. :-)
Comment Written 14-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much! :)
It's good to hear from you! This was a awesome surprise! You've been missed, girl. I loved the photo of the Angel too! He is very beautiful and I thought it was fitting for the chapter. Thanks for all the compliments.
I know you've been busy traveling with Todd, and I hope you two are doing fine. Don't wear yourselves out. I know traveling can do that to a person. How's your daughter?
I've been busy working, writing, and missing Carl. Hopefully we can catch up and chat. Love to see ya! Thanks again, and I hope you and your family have a wonderful Christmas.
Always your friend,
Shana :)
Comment from ngage
Another captivating chapter, Shana! Looks like Jace might get out of hand if his temper rises. Wouldn't be good for Steven. Hopefully his brother can calm him down before that happens.
I see now that the puzzle is starting to come together for Tessa. Lilith is her mother and Steven is her brother. Looking forward to seeing where this goes. Excellent writing!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2017
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Another captivating chapter, Shana! Looks like Jace might get out of hand if his temper rises. Wouldn't be good for Steven. Hopefully his brother can calm him down before that happens.
I see now that the puzzle is starting to come together for Tessa. Lilith is her mother and Steven is her brother. Looking forward to seeing where this goes. Excellent writing!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2017
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Thank you, dear ngage :)
Your dedication to my story brings inspiration to my writing. As always... thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from royowen
My elder child Rebecca, has an extraordinary gift of compassion for others, she has always been a sea of refuge for friends and relative strangers. She lives two thousand kilometres away in another state, but even she needs her mummy. My girls have always been extremely close to their mother, (and each other) watching them talk on the phone last night, I could see that delightful attachment to each, they talked incessantly of circumstance and our grandsons (Rebecca's boys). That lovely experience was revealed in your very beautifully scribed and perceptively written experience with Tessa, discovering her mother's journal, and her connection to her twin brother Steven, well done Shana, excellent job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2017
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My elder child Rebecca, has an extraordinary gift of compassion for others, she has always been a sea of refuge for friends and relative strangers. She lives two thousand kilometres away in another state, but even she needs her mummy. My girls have always been extremely close to their mother, (and each other) watching them talk on the phone last night, I could see that delightful attachment to each, they talked incessantly of circumstance and our grandsons (Rebecca's boys). That lovely experience was revealed in your very beautifully scribed and perceptively written experience with Tessa, discovering her mother's journal, and her connection to her twin brother Steven, well done Shana, excellent job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2017
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Awww... that is so sweet :)
Thank you for sharing that with me. It means a lot to hear that. Reading that gave me goose bumps. :)
I do love a good, loving story with family. Since Tessa was raised by her aunt and uncle, never knowing why her mother left her when she was a baby, I wanted to give her this. She has always longed to know why she was abandoned or if she was loved. I think everyone deserves to be loved. And so, you will learn about Tessa's life.
Thanks again my dear friend.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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Dear friend you and me share that love of a strong bond of family. We can all create that, if we remember love above all is important. Christmas time reveals the sort of love God has for us, merry Christmas to you, your young man, and family, from...usXXX
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Thank you, Roy! I hope you enjoy the holidays and have a blessed Christmas.
I will miss my Carl, but he will be home in March. It can't get here soon enough! :)
Thanks my friend,
Shana :)
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Well done Shana
Comment from apky
Exciting! My hopes surge now for Tessa and hers. Reading the passages about her, I kept my fingers crossed that neither Sebastian nor his brother would come in and discover her reading the journal and put her through more drugs. Or worse.
Brilliant!
Though Jem sounded frustrated, his words tinged with worry. ~ You can write this two ways, darling:
Though Jem sounded frustrated, his words (were)tinged with worry.
OR you leave out the "Though", and nothing more added. I'd suggest the second version, because the addition of "were" makes the sentence passive.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Exciting! My hopes surge now for Tessa and hers. Reading the passages about her, I kept my fingers crossed that neither Sebastian nor his brother would come in and discover her reading the journal and put her through more drugs. Or worse.
Brilliant!
Though Jem sounded frustrated, his words tinged with worry. ~ You can write this two ways, darling:
Though Jem sounded frustrated, his words (were)tinged with worry.
OR you leave out the "Though", and nothing more added. I'd suggest the second version, because the addition of "were" makes the sentence passive.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Thank my talented friend :)
Yes, poor Tessa. If only she could shift into her wolf... they wouldn't stand a chance. Sebastian and his brother, Thomas are up to no good. Stay tuned. Hopefully Steven can connect with her again, and find out where she is.
Sincerely & always your fan,
Shana :)
Comment from Ricky1024
Chapter in the red line series was very well written I was interested in at the entire length it flowed very well with no grammar issues in the ejective content described it perfectly objective content gave it purpose and descriptive measures were aligned to Perfection thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Chapter in the red line series was very well written I was interested in at the entire length it flowed very well with no grammar issues in the ejective content described it perfectly objective content gave it purpose and descriptive measures were aligned to Perfection thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 12-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Ricky :)
Glad to see you stopped in again for another chapter. I enjoy your feedback. Hope to see you back for more!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
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Your very welcome Shauna!
Ricky...
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Another good part of your story. So much being revealed. All very interesting.
This is a rather emotional piece. It got to me.
Thank you so much for sharing your story with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Another good part of your story. So much being revealed. All very interesting.
This is a rather emotional piece. It got to me.
Thank you so much for sharing your story with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 11-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Sharon :)
Thanks for letting me know this chapter brought out some emotions for you. That is exactly why I love to write. If I can give the reader this reaction, I'm so happy. Your feedback is wonderful to hear.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I continue to like and follow the progression of this novel.
Nothing remains strange after decoding the message.
I enjoyed whispers in the night, the catch in the introduction, fine plot development, realistic dialogues and characters; mysteries are being unfolded by degree with a curious ending.
DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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I continue to like and follow the progression of this novel.
Nothing remains strange after decoding the message.
I enjoyed whispers in the night, the catch in the introduction, fine plot development, realistic dialogues and characters; mysteries are being unfolded by degree with a curious ending.
DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 11-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Thank you so kindly, dear DR ALCREATOR :)
So happy you are enjoying the novel. It's a pleasure to hear your kind feedback. Looking forward to seeing you stop in again.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
