Your Arms
a ghazal62 total reviews
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A truly beautiful poem I remember thinking and writing the same years back-if I had known our time together would be our last- what I would have done- would be to never let you go. Something like that. This is beautifully written and very engaging well done well worth a six kind regards Meia x
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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A truly beautiful poem I remember thinking and writing the same years back-if I had known our time together would be our last- what I would have done- would be to never let you go. Something like that. This is beautifully written and very engaging well done well worth a six kind regards Meia x
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Meia, for your generous, six star review and for noting the line that resonated with you. I am glad you found my poem beautifully written.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Andre, a very unusual form. I've read the poem form being mentioned in novels that was written by authors from India whose novels also took place in India. I never paid much attention to it back then. Now you've brought it to the fore with your wonderful but unusual poem. I also thank you for the extensive notes. Very informative. I especially liked 'strange how your absence tightens its grip around me.'
I love the contradiction in this line, which provided me with a great imagery. I hope you will write more ghazal poems soon. Fascinating. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Hi Andre, a very unusual form. I've read the poem form being mentioned in novels that was written by authors from India whose novels also took place in India. I never paid much attention to it back then. Now you've brought it to the fore with your wonderful but unusual poem. I also thank you for the extensive notes. Very informative. I especially liked 'strange how your absence tightens its grip around me.'
I love the contradiction in this line, which provided me with a great imagery. I hope you will write more ghazal poems soon. Fascinating. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Ulla, for your review. I enjoy exploring poetry outside of Western traditions. I am glad my poem and extensive notes helped fill a gap in your knowledge of Indian culture.
Comment from nbonner
Intense. I like the repeat word of 'arms' at the end of each stanza. The poem itself captures you from beginning to end, great write. Thank you for sharing, NB
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Intense. I like the repeat word of 'arms' at the end of each stanza. The poem itself captures you from beginning to end, great write. Thank you for sharing, NB
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, NB, for your review and compliments on my intense poem. I appreciate them.
Comment from c_lucas
Love needs all of one's body and emotions. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a a very good read. There is very good imagery. Good job.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Love needs all of one's body and emotions. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a a very good read. There is very good imagery. Good job.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Thank you, C_Lucas, for your generous review of my poem about love and for noting its flow and imagery.
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You're welcome, Hitch. Charlie
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Ghazal. It is a very interesting format of poetry. I had wrote a few myself and find it quite challenging to write a poem that makes perfect sense and to keep within the requirements.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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A very well-written Ghazal. It is a very interesting format of poetry. I had wrote a few myself and find it quite challenging to write a poem that makes perfect sense and to keep within the requirements.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Yes, Sandra, I am still learning to write these. I had barely posted this ghazal before I started writing another one to nail the form. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Pantygynt
These are the most informative notes on the subject of the ghazal that I have ever come across. Thank you so much for that. I was not aware of the need for all that repetition. I am sure i have seen poems purporting to be ghazals that did not follow that rule. I look forward to the next one because I am not entirely understanding what you mean in the qaafiyaa. How can that happen if you have also to maintain the repeat?
If I can be said to have a favourite line here it is this:
"Strange how your absence tightens its grip around me"
The lovely contradiction in this particular oxymoron really appealed to me.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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These are the most informative notes on the subject of the ghazal that I have ever come across. Thank you so much for that. I was not aware of the need for all that repetition. I am sure i have seen poems purporting to be ghazals that did not follow that rule. I look forward to the next one because I am not entirely understanding what you mean in the qaafiyaa. How can that happen if you have also to maintain the repeat?
If I can be said to have a favourite line here it is this:
"Strange how your absence tightens its grip around me"
The lovely contradiction in this particular oxymoron really appealed to me.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Oh, Jim, just you wait. I am writing another ghazal now that focuses on the qaafiyaa. I've nailed it.
Thank you for your review, compliments on my notes, and for pointing out your favorite line. It's true that absences tightens a missing lover's grip.
Comment from bookishfabler
What a lovely poem about missing your significant other. It is lonely when you don't have their arms wrapped around you, however it is way easier to sleep without the snoring and and some room to move around.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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What a lovely poem about missing your significant other. It is lonely when you don't have their arms wrapped around you, however it is way easier to sleep without the snoring and and some room to move around.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Heidi, for your cheerful review and hugs.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a most interesting form, it's quite different from anything I have ever read.
I have enjoyed reading your poem and the author's notes.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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This is a most interesting form, it's quite different from anything I have ever read.
I have enjoyed reading your poem and the author's notes.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Maria, for your generous, six star review. I am having a lot of fun writing and sharing these.
Comment from robina1978
I have never heard of this poem form. But it is very nice. You fulfilled all the requirements and more here. It is about your love in your arms, Are you going to make another one. Brave. I liked it a lot.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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I have never heard of this poem form. But it is very nice. You fulfilled all the requirements and more here. It is about your love in your arms, Are you going to make another one. Brave. I liked it a lot.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Ha, Robina, I have just written my next ghazal and may post as early as today. I pushed the form further to meet a requirement I missed in this poem. Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from dragonpoet
This almost sounds like grief over a lost spouse more than unrequited love. The image of the arms show the tenderness of love, the strength of protection and the warmth of comfort in the knowledge of the one you love.
Keep writing
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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This almost sounds like grief over a lost spouse more than unrequited love. The image of the arms show the tenderness of love, the strength of protection and the warmth of comfort in the knowledge of the one you love.
Keep writing
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Yes, Joan, this is grief. Thanks for your insight and review.
Happy Holidays!
I've written my next ghazal.
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You're welcome. I've written a couple myself.
Joan
