Your Arms
a ghazal62 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a romantic ghazal I liked.
I enjoyed the couplets so balanced, meaningfully and thematically worded.
The romantic appreciation is appreciable.
DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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This is a romantic ghazal I liked.
I enjoyed the couplets so balanced, meaningfully and thematically worded.
The romantic appreciation is appreciable.
DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, DR ALCREATOR, for your generous review. I am glad you found my poem romantic and balanced.
Comment from Bill Schott
This ghazal, Your Arms, is set up correctly, repeating 'your arms' in the second line of each couplet. The theme of separation and lingering feelings comes through for me.
"When we spooned together, you in back, me in front"
Spooning?
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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This ghazal, Your Arms, is set up correctly, repeating 'your arms' in the second line of each couplet. The theme of separation and lingering feelings comes through for me.
"When we spooned together, you in back, me in front"
Spooning?
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Ha, Bill, I thought everyone knew what spooning was. I added this definition to my author's notes:
Spooning=when a couple lie down front to back, fitting together like spoons.
Thank you for your generous review of my poem about separation.
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Well, I actually know what spooning is, but never heard of the actual 'like spoons' analogy. It has always meant, to me, to simply be making out. I questioned the term spooning with your description, as it seemed for like a 'backdoor' scenario, if ya know what I mean.
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Ha! Clever. That's another interpretation.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Sis Cat I found your ghazal format a bit different from what I have seen,but it has a way to draw a reader in with its first couplet with an end rhyme (radif) on both lines that is repeated without change on the second line of the following couplets.
sounds tricky you have indeed talent
Thank you for sharing
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Hello Sis Cat I found your ghazal format a bit different from what I have seen,but it has a way to draw a reader in with its first couplet with an end rhyme (radif) on both lines that is repeated without change on the second line of the following couplets.
sounds tricky you have indeed talent
Thank you for sharing
Gert
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Gert, for your review. I perfected the form to the extent of my knowledge in my next ghazal on chocolate. Now I plan to check out a book on English ghazals to make sure I am writing them properly. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
The theme is introduced in the first part and I had to compare the notes to the piece to follow what you are doing. The end rhymes are as supposed to be. I see the name in the last and done in an interesting way. No I don't think I am brave enough to try
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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The theme is introduced in the first part and I had to compare the notes to the piece to follow what you are doing. The end rhymes are as supposed to be. I see the name in the last and done in an interesting way. No I don't think I am brave enough to try
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Go ahead, Barb, try. It took me two ghazals to finally nail the form on my third. Now I want to check out a book of ghazals in English to make sure I am writing them properly. Thank you for your review.
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Nope.lol
Comment from kathleenspalding
Aw. Lovely and passionate Ghazal poem certainly meets the criteria described in the much appreciated author's notes. Hmm. Not sure how mentally healthy it is (mantra reinforcement of unrequited love), LOL - but, yeah, if someone's suffering, it makes sense. I don't see anything to correct. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Aw. Lovely and passionate Ghazal poem certainly meets the criteria described in the much appreciated author's notes. Hmm. Not sure how mentally healthy it is (mantra reinforcement of unrequited love), LOL - but, yeah, if someone's suffering, it makes sense. I don't see anything to correct. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Oh, thank you, Kathleen, for your generous review. I am glad you found my ghazal to be lovely and passionate. Thanks again.
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You're welcome
Comment from Lucian Carter
You've used an interesting and uncommon form here. I could see the form going wrong horribly; you, however, nailed it here.
A deep romance gone wrong poem that is melancholy from the start but still rejoices a little in what was. Nostalgia, heartache and loss all shine off the screen. A great piece.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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You've used an interesting and uncommon form here. I could see the form going wrong horribly; you, however, nailed it here.
A deep romance gone wrong poem that is melancholy from the start but still rejoices a little in what was. Nostalgia, heartache and loss all shine off the screen. A great piece.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Lucian, for your kind review of this ancient form of Arabic poetry which only became common in 1996 with the publication of the world's first anthology of English ghazals. I just picked up the book tonight.
Thank you for noting the bittersweet quality of my nostalgic, melancholy poem.
Comment from lyenochka
Love this intimate poem described through the memories of a missing loved one's arms. I like that it is the arms and not other body parts because the arms is what we use to embrace and holds the strength of our expression of our loving hugs. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Love this intimate poem described through the memories of a missing loved one's arms. I like that it is the arms and not other body parts because the arms is what we use to embrace and holds the strength of our expression of our loving hugs. Well done!
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Yes, lyenochka, not only do arms hold us, but they hold so much memory and emotions. Thank you for your generous review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Andre;
Such longing and sorrow in these words. To think someone would get your name tattooed and then not be with you forever. Arms are one of the 'things' that attract me to a person. So, I could relate to this piece very well. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Hi, Andre;
Such longing and sorrow in these words. To think someone would get your name tattooed and then not be with you forever. Arms are one of the 'things' that attract me to a person. So, I could relate to this piece very well. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Yes, Patty, I love that detail of an ex removing the tattoos of a lover's name. It is sad but true. I'm glad you could relate to my poem. Thank you for your review.
Comment from ronnie k
I enjoyed the mystery of the lines, forced to read them again and again, with each read i found a fondness in that mystery, not to understand i found give power to the poetry for i searched and searched and no longer enjoyed but loved and respected this gem.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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I enjoyed the mystery of the lines, forced to read them again and again, with each read i found a fondness in that mystery, not to understand i found give power to the poetry for i searched and searched and no longer enjoyed but loved and respected this gem.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Ronnie, for reading and respecting this gem that contained a lot of mystery.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not heard of this form before and I enjoyed your yearning poem for your lovers arms and the memory of being touched and held, something we all need in life, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Not heard of this form before and I enjoyed your yearning poem for your lovers arms and the memory of being touched and held, something we all need in life, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017
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Thank you, Dolly, for your kind, generous review. Until the 1996 publication for the world's first anthology of English ghazals, many people had not heard of this ancient form of Arabic poetry, and many Americans who knew about it wrote them poorly.
Yes, we all need a hug in life.
