Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Ulla,
It's nice to read a story with a positive ending, and a surprise ending, too.
Good riddance to the paper addiction.
Papers are getting smaller and smaller these days.
I think they may be on the endangered species list,
soon to be extinct, which will be just fine with Mary.
I liked your slow build up to the final resolution.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Wow, RS, thank you so much for this wonderful acknowledgement. I'm over the moon. Thanks so very much. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Pam (respa)

Exceptional

-Excellent story, Ulla, that kept my
attention from beginning to end.
-I like how you characterize Harry;
he is so absorbed in his papers
that he seems oblivious to Mary.
-But, you show us that Harry actually
became afraid of this tapping when
he went to investigate.
-The ending is priceless when
he brought in the new replacement for his paper!
-Good luck in the contest.
-One small thing to look at:
"dialled" [dialed]


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 Comment Written 12-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Awe, Pam, what can I say. Thank you so much. How pleased I am. I'm over the moon. You've made my day. All the best. Ulla:)))

reply by Pam (respa) on 13-Dec-2017

You are very welcome and deserving, Ulla. Make sure you come back from the moon,
though🙂

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Very good.A story with a happy ending. We have a Bengal cat who knocks on the bedroom door. When she wants to come in she bangs her head three times against the door. It sounds just like a person knocking.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Hi Thomas, thank you so much. I'm so gladyou liked it. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Hi,Ulla. First of all, I do like the story, but there is a problems - you change POV when you start describing "a shiver ran down..." etc. The POV was his wife's at the beginning.

What a delightful conclusion though - I enjoyed it very much. :)

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Hi Dawn. Thanks so much. I see what you're saying, and I'll have a look into it. I have to say, nobody else have had a problem. All best. Ulla:)))

reply by Dawn Munro on 13-Dec-2017

You're welcome. Point of view is important, but I guess some reviewers either don't know or don't mention it, for whatever reason. Personally, Ulla, it's your piece - I don't "have a problem" with anything you do, but I wouldn't be giving you a fair review if I didn't point it out.

reply by the author on 14-Dec-2017

I appreciate what you're saying, Dawn. I will have a look at it again. :)))

Comment from LeRoy Bertsch

Excellent

I loved the story very cute and imaginative. I did catch a couple of typos
1. he'd reluctantly ambled over Should be amble over
2. peering out onto the dark. I think you meant into the dark.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it and I've corrected. Thanks for catching that. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

a nice story and contest entry. You built tension from the required opening sentence, involved your characters' personalities, and finished with a "whew!" - a happy ending. My only problem is I keep looking at the picture and I don't get the connection. Could you enlighten me? I'd appreciate it. Thanks.
pome lover

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Thank you so much for your lovely review. Well the picture is to reflect all the different thought and imagery that went through their heads when they heard the unwanted noise. I hope that males sense. All the best. Ulla:)))

reply by pome lover on 13-Dec-2017

thanks. will look at it again

Comment from D.F. Wood

Excellent

What a cute story. I love the ending too. I did notice one particular error.
You wrote: "Later on, he'd reluctantly ambled over to the dining table . . . " Since you used the word "he'd" (for he would) the word "ambled" should not end with 'ed'.
Very good story.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Hello Daniel, thank you so much. I've made the correction. Thanks for pointing it out. I'm so glad you liked my wee story. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written story. When we hear strange noises at night we immediately fear the worst scenario. When we investigate we usually find our fears was for nothing at all, luckily.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Thanks a lot, Sandra. So glad you liked it. All best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely by beginning with the appropriate opening line. The story moves along well and is structurally sound. How lovely that it had a happy ending by giving the puppy a new home and the hubby a new purpose in life. All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2017

Comment from antonieta

Excellent

Nice short story. I enjoyed reading it. You build suspense very well. We think it's an intruder while it turns out to be a wee darling puppy.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2017