The Power of Three
A superstition come true31 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Super story. You use the starting sentence well. Great use of dialogue to note the conflict between Fred and his wife.
My favorite part:
"I'm not your enemy; I love birds. Look, see the birdfeeder in the yard. I'm a member of the Audubon society too."
A smooth skillful ending too.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Super story. You use the starting sentence well. Great use of dialogue to note the conflict between Fred and his wife.
My favorite part:
"I'm not your enemy; I love birds. Look, see the birdfeeder in the yard. I'm a member of the Audubon society too."
A smooth skillful ending too.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and your kind comments. I appreciate the six stars too. So glad you enjoyed the story.
Comment from Lucian Carter
A good use of the prompt. I like Bob's growing obsession and fear. That comes across well.
My chief concern is how poorly Jessica comes across. She sounds like a horrible nag. Maybe try to rewrite a few of her lines to show a little more concern?
Ignoring that, it's a good piece of work. The stuff that truly matters is right.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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A good use of the prompt. I like Bob's growing obsession and fear. That comes across well.
My chief concern is how poorly Jessica comes across. She sounds like a horrible nag. Maybe try to rewrite a few of her lines to show a little more concern?
Ignoring that, it's a good piece of work. The stuff that truly matters is right.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting. Hey, wouldn't you be bitchy if your spouse kept obsessing over a dumb owl? LOL
Comment from jenintorre
Wow an excellent short story. I really enjoyed reading it. I found it a little Steven Kingish
Which is not a bad thing as it was bordering on horror. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Wow an excellent short story. I really enjoyed reading it. I found it a little Steven Kingish
Which is not a bad thing as it was bordering on horror. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed the story.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a fantastic work about superstition.
Faith that superstition still works is the hub of this story.
I liked and it was an interesting read.
DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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This is a fantastic work about superstition.
Faith that superstition still works is the hub of this story.
I liked and it was an interesting read.
DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. Gald you enjoyed the story.
Comment from apky
Sometimes a lot depends on faithf and belief.
As we know, they can move mountains, right?
Thanks for a very enjoyable and entertaining story, Prettybluebirds. I didn't detect any spags. The story is suspenseful and well-written.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Sometimes a lot depends on faithf and belief.
As we know, they can move mountains, right?
Thanks for a very enjoyable and entertaining story, Prettybluebirds. I didn't detect any spags. The story is suspenseful and well-written.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thnks again for reading and reviewing my story.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
If a hoot owl calls outside your window for three nights in a row, it's supposed to mean someone is going to die soon. Ancient scholars believe the number three has mystical powers." Oh dear. I have had an owl hooting by my window for about a year. I guess this means I am safe? lol. But one more thing to worry about. I loved your story anyway good luck in the competition this was very imaginative. Kind regards Meia.x
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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If a hoot owl calls outside your window for three nights in a row, it's supposed to mean someone is going to die soon. Ancient scholars believe the number three has mystical powers." Oh dear. I have had an owl hooting by my window for about a year. I guess this means I am safe? lol. But one more thing to worry about. I loved your story anyway good luck in the competition this was very imaginative. Kind regards Meia.x
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. Just remember not to make the owl mad at you like Fred did.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely by starting with the appropriate opening line. The same folklore revolves around a Raven perching at your window three times and the crow's caw. Bad things in general coming in waves of three is common throughout all folklore and mysticism so there's got to be some measure of truth there as it would be too much coincidence. This is well penned and while the end is no surprise it was an enjoyable read. All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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This meets the contest requirements nicely by starting with the appropriate opening line. The same folklore revolves around a Raven perching at your window three times and the crow's caw. Bad things in general coming in waves of three is common throughout all folklore and mysticism so there's got to be some measure of truth there as it would be too much coincidence. This is well penned and while the end is no surprise it was an enjoyable read. All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thank you. Yep, I have noticed several times that events happen three times in a row.
Comment from Mel Keyz
What an intriguing take on an old wives tale haha! I love it. Goddammit, Fred. He obviously did something wrong. Well done on the short story. It flowed really nicelly and kept me going. Props.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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What an intriguing take on an old wives tale haha! I love it. Goddammit, Fred. He obviously did something wrong. Well done on the short story. It flowed really nicelly and kept me going. Props.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thank you. Yeah, he did do something wrong, he pissed the owl off. LOL
Comment from MelB
This is a good story. It seems Fred did believe the superstition and it made him go a little batty by taking down all the trees around the house. Poor Fred!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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This is a good story. It seems Fred did believe the superstition and it made him go a little batty by taking down all the trees around the house. Poor Fred!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review. All comments are appreciated.
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You're most welcome:)
Comment from zekeziemann
A good story with enough drama to keep the reader wondering. Good timing and well chosen words that only give a small hint of the end.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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A good story with enough drama to keep the reader wondering. Good timing and well chosen words that only give a small hint of the end.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed the story.
