Ode To Rimbaud: Precocious Boy
A tribute to this extraordinary life.7 total reviews
Comment from Lucian Carter
I'm afraid Rimbauld is unknown to me; or at least was until now. I get hints of his life from your poem. It's enough to make me think he deserved a poem in his honor.
From what little I do know, I think you did well here.
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I'm afraid Rimbauld is unknown to me; or at least was until now. I get hints of his life from your poem. It's enough to make me think he deserved a poem in his honor.
From what little I do know, I think you did well here.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
Comment from rama devi
Love the intensity in tone and passionate tribute, my friend. Potent and creative as ever. I especially love the phonetics in all the poetic devices, and especially the abundance of internal rhymes.
Love this phrasing:
You
breathed rare air of angel-fire while
mortal men were left to wander lost
in tepid texture's broken mediocrity
all through their helpless life and death.
Suggestion:
You rowed your 'Drunken Boat' and spoke
to Seraphim and watched the swollen
corpses' of antiquity float slowly past
your boat as you still sang the songs ***
of disparate minuets - with glee!
*** suggest trimming our YOUR BOAT, as it is implied without being stated and repeating it does not sound as good read aloud (IMHO)
You rowed your 'Drunken Boat' and spoke
to Seraphim and watched the swollen
corpses' of antiquity float slowly past
as you still sang the songs
of disparate minuets - with glee!
*
arrogant contempt for society's credulity, yet, for
three years(,) he would create transcendent, prophetic
Fine work! Enjoyed. No sixes left, alas.
Warmly, rd
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Love the intensity in tone and passionate tribute, my friend. Potent and creative as ever. I especially love the phonetics in all the poetic devices, and especially the abundance of internal rhymes.
Love this phrasing:
You
breathed rare air of angel-fire while
mortal men were left to wander lost
in tepid texture's broken mediocrity
all through their helpless life and death.
Suggestion:
You rowed your 'Drunken Boat' and spoke
to Seraphim and watched the swollen
corpses' of antiquity float slowly past
your boat as you still sang the songs ***
of disparate minuets - with glee!
*** suggest trimming our YOUR BOAT, as it is implied without being stated and repeating it does not sound as good read aloud (IMHO)
You rowed your 'Drunken Boat' and spoke
to Seraphim and watched the swollen
corpses' of antiquity float slowly past
as you still sang the songs
of disparate minuets - with glee!
*
arrogant contempt for society's credulity, yet, for
three years(,) he would create transcendent, prophetic
Fine work! Enjoyed. No sixes left, alas.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Tom I like how you wrote you Ode in free verse
( to me it makes it easier to read and understand
Not knowing who Rimbaud, I wanted to read about the Drunken Boat so I searched, found what meant from the viewpoint of a sunk sad ship thats led a exciting life. His poem is so visionary. It has gorgeous imagery such as "the northern lights rising like a kiss to the sea" and "swells that batter like terrified cattle".
Rimbaud a child prodigy ran away from ...
Thank you for sharing, I learned something new
today
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Hello Tom I like how you wrote you Ode in free verse
( to me it makes it easier to read and understand
Not knowing who Rimbaud, I wanted to read about the Drunken Boat so I searched, found what meant from the viewpoint of a sunk sad ship thats led a exciting life. His poem is so visionary. It has gorgeous imagery such as "the northern lights rising like a kiss to the sea" and "swells that batter like terrified cattle".
Rimbaud a child prodigy ran away from ...
Thank you for sharing, I learned something new
today
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
A contemporary of A.E.Housman, a favourite of mine but about as far removed in style as it would be possible to get. The last stanza of this effectively serves as an explanatory note. An interesting piece about a poet with whome i was not familiar until your poem had me rushing to look him up. Precocious seems to be the best possible descriptive term for one who really only wrote in adolescence.
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A contemporary of A.E.Housman, a favourite of mine but about as far removed in style as it would be possible to get. The last stanza of this effectively serves as an explanatory note. An interesting piece about a poet with whome i was not familiar until your poem had me rushing to look him up. Precocious seems to be the best possible descriptive term for one who really only wrote in adolescence.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Another extremely well penned example of true poetic art. This one made me cry a little as it called to mind so many of the great poets who died needlessly suffering from the burden of depression and despair. It is said one must experience great pain in order to write greatly - that might be some what true when you look at the lives of the icons of the past. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
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Another extremely well penned example of true poetic art. This one made me cry a little as it called to mind so many of the great poets who died needlessly suffering from the burden of depression and despair. It is said one must experience great pain in order to write greatly - that might be some what true when you look at the lives of the icons of the past. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about tribute to the genius Rimbaud, and this fine ode to the precocious boy named Rimbaud for his extraordinary nature of life, a great praise of him; I like. DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks about tribute to the genius Rimbaud, and this fine ode to the precocious boy named Rimbaud for his extraordinary nature of life, a great praise of him; I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A great tribute to the french poet who stopped writing in his twenties. I have read some of his work but I think that as the originals were written in french, much of the meaning gets lost in translation. I loved your in depth search for the real man and his thoughts, another great poem here, love Dolly x
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A great tribute to the french poet who stopped writing in his twenties. I have read some of his work but I think that as the originals were written in french, much of the meaning gets lost in translation. I loved your in depth search for the real man and his thoughts, another great poem here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
