Freedom
Acrostic-Loop / just having ago34 total reviews
Comment from artemis53
Well done, Kahpot. I'm a 'Military Mother' and am quite vested in those writings. I find that in crisis, Man can be brought to their fullest potential. If backed into a wall we are a "force to be reckoned with" and always have been.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Well done, Kahpot. I'm a 'Military Mother' and am quite vested in those writings. I find that in crisis, Man can be brought to their fullest potential. If backed into a wall we are a "force to be reckoned with" and always have been.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much, and a force we are, Happy New Year****kahpot
Comment from LeRoy Bertsch
Very nice I like it very much. I think this is the second piece of your work that I have read and I have enjoyed both. Thank-you and keep up the good work
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Very nice I like it very much. I think this is the second piece of your work that I have read and I have enjoyed both. Thank-you and keep up the good work
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
An excellent piece on freedoms passion. YOu combined it with the acrostic and still looped it. This was a hard thing to do and you did magnificiently
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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An excellent piece on freedoms passion. YOu combined it with the acrostic and still looped it. This was a hard thing to do and you did magnificiently
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from estory
I liked the poetic elements of this piece, the repetitions evolving like waves moving on an ocean, creating those musical elements. I think you picked the right words here, especially that word 'engraved', I think that drives home the importance of the concept of freedom, of equality, of respect and dignity laid out in the constitution. All lofty ideas, soaring ambitions. But people are corrupt, they have always been corrupt, and can't live up to their ideals. In the end, we don't really these politicians. The big companies do, and their rich stockholders. That's why they get what they want, and we get passed over. It's always been that way, on this Earth, and probably will continue to be that way until Jesus comes back. estory
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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I liked the poetic elements of this piece, the repetitions evolving like waves moving on an ocean, creating those musical elements. I think you picked the right words here, especially that word 'engraved', I think that drives home the importance of the concept of freedom, of equality, of respect and dignity laid out in the constitution. All lofty ideas, soaring ambitions. But people are corrupt, they have always been corrupt, and can't live up to their ideals. In the end, we don't really these politicians. The big companies do, and their rich stockholders. That's why they get what they want, and we get passed over. It's always been that way, on this Earth, and probably will continue to be that way until Jesus comes back. estory
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you and yes to many corrupt people****kahpot
Comment from jenintorre
Hi there Kahpot
I enjoyed reading this poem. I thought it was very clever and well crafted portraying a good
Message. Best wishes Jen.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Hi there Kahpot
I enjoyed reading this poem. I thought it was very clever and well crafted portraying a good
Message. Best wishes Jen.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! This is a gem and very difficult to do! An acrostic and loop poem all in one! Ver clever and a work of art. Your poem has a moral message too, just perfect, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Wow! This is a gem and very difficult to do! An acrostic and loop poem all in one! Ver clever and a work of art. Your poem has a moral message too, just perfect, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Jordyn Gamez
I believe that you did a solid job at making it have a smooth and freedom filled meaning at the beginning but the feeling did die out after a minute.
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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017
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I believe that you did a solid job at making it have a smooth and freedom filled meaning at the beginning but the feeling did die out after a minute.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017
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Unfortunately, I would have to disagree along with 20plus others who have reviewed and think the opposite and not a 4star in sight until yours, but each to their own****kahpot
Comment from nomi338
Man, who is mortal, is not equipped for leadership. Not true leadership. The prophet Jeremiah stated at Jeremiah, chapter 10, verse 23: I well know, O Jehovah, that man's way does not belong to him. It does not belong to man who is walking even to direct his step. Man was not given the power of leadership at his creation. Man was created to learn how to follow the directions of his God and Creator. Every since he rejected that, the world has been in a terrible mess.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Man, who is mortal, is not equipped for leadership. Not true leadership. The prophet Jeremiah stated at Jeremiah, chapter 10, verse 23: I well know, O Jehovah, that man's way does not belong to him. It does not belong to man who is walking even to direct his step. Man was not given the power of leadership at his creation. Man was created to learn how to follow the directions of his God and Creator. Every since he rejected that, the world has been in a terrible mess.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I believe if more of us could be heard by those we pay to listen, Freedom might just become a real threat against war'. I quite agree. I am a pacifist and war distresses me as I just can't understand it. A bird flying high sees no boundaries. A blind person cannot tell what race a person is, if they are born blind they would not see to care, it is peoples souls not where they come from or what their colour is that matters and yet we will destroy our own world in the pursuit of riches and wealth-so sad. A beautiful and moving intelligent, well done Kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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I believe if more of us could be heard by those we pay to listen, Freedom might just become a real threat against war'. I quite agree. I am a pacifist and war distresses me as I just can't understand it. A bird flying high sees no boundaries. A blind person cannot tell what race a person is, if they are born blind they would not see to care, it is peoples souls not where they come from or what their colour is that matters and yet we will destroy our own world in the pursuit of riches and wealth-so sad. A beautiful and moving intelligent, well done Kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much, sorry for late replies and reviews, been a bit on the poor side but better now****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written thought provoking acrostic and loop combination poem. We have many rights and that is suppose to set us free. Instead we are kept captive because we fighting for more rights
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Rites (rights)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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A very well-written thought provoking acrostic and loop combination poem. We have many rights and that is suppose to set us free. Instead we are kept captive because we fighting for more rights
Typo
Rites (rights)
Comment Written 13-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
