Comment from Janilou

Excellent

So I'm not the only one who has really weird dreams, huh? LOL

Great story. One suggestion for you:

"It's late husband. Tell me tomorrow, I got a headache."

It is dialogue so they can say what they want but I think it would read better if she said:

"It's late, husband. Tell me tomorrow, I have a headache."

Add a comma after the word late too. :-)

All the best.
Jan

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017

Thank you, Janilou. I'll repair that.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I thought at first you were in an earthquake! The fear of not being able to hear, but still see and smell and know that turmoil you are in may kill you, this is a vivid nightmare! Good luck with the contest, lvoe Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017

Thank you Dolly. Just something that entered into my head while I was sleeping.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'This Sentence Starts the Story' writing prompt.
The picture is kind of crazy and very colorful.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017

Thank you Sharon. I don't know what I write sometimes.

Comment from Nelle Louise

Good

Great imagery. Interesting beginning. This could develop into a good story. You
have a good imagination. Best of luck as you go forward. Nelle Louise.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017

Thanks Nelle. This is a short read. Only what I could recall from a dream.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks the nightmare about the end of the earth, many times sounds came about collapsing everything, waking up the same question came 'Did you hear that?' I like. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017

Thank you Alcreator. just a possible scenario of a future.