A Night In Hell On Earth
Observation of a third kind53 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
We are a plight in this world that we love so much. Leaving a nasty legacy for our children. Each generation has damned the one before.
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We are a plight in this world that we love so much. Leaving a nasty legacy for our children. Each generation has damned the one before.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You can write dismal and despair like nobody's business. I wonder if you ever write anything happy or uplifting. I don't recall any. You do dark amazingly well. There is none to take over first place. Have a good week. Karen
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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You can write dismal and despair like nobody's business. I wonder if you ever write anything happy or uplifting. I don't recall any. You do dark amazingly well. There is none to take over first place. Have a good week. Karen
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2024
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Just for you Karen. My current post "a piddle paddle poem". Take care friend. ee
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For me? Little ole' me? I declare I may swoon. I gotta go see it :-) Karen
Comment from Wendy G
A harsh and negative but realistic portrayal of man's inabilty to care and show compassion on fellow man. We will be judged for both our actions and our non-actions. There are attacks on both the religious system and the political system, most of which is justified ... and yet there are still some sparkling gems of love and care and people making a difference, in this sad world of ours. One thing is sure God sees everything, nothing goes unnoticed, and when His patience with man runs out - there will be deserved judgment for everything you mention in your powerful poem. Man wants to be independent from God? This is the result, starkly portrayed in your poem.
Wendy
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A harsh and negative but realistic portrayal of man's inabilty to care and show compassion on fellow man. We will be judged for both our actions and our non-actions. There are attacks on both the religious system and the political system, most of which is justified ... and yet there are still some sparkling gems of love and care and people making a difference, in this sad world of ours. One thing is sure God sees everything, nothing goes unnoticed, and when His patience with man runs out - there will be deserved judgment for everything you mention in your powerful poem. Man wants to be independent from God? This is the result, starkly portrayed in your poem.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
Comment from Julie Helms
This is an excellent poem with great internal rhymes, consonance and assonance throughout that give it a very readable quality.
The message is extremely pessimistic, though not unwarranted. The author sees no chance of hope or redemption. Mankind, subject to human nature, is doomed.
Fantastic description throughout.
Nicely done!
Julie
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This is an excellent poem with great internal rhymes, consonance and assonance throughout that give it a very readable quality.
The message is extremely pessimistic, though not unwarranted. The author sees no chance of hope or redemption. Mankind, subject to human nature, is doomed.
Fantastic description throughout.
Nicely done!
Julie
Comment Written 29-Apr-2024
Comment from forestport12
Powerful and memorable. So many verses explode in the mind's eye with various sense arousals employed. You could smell it, hear it, taste it, etc...
I appreciate how you create an interplay with the political and spiritual conflict. Although homeless being attributed to those who lack compassion is a universal problem, it seems there is also a pseudo self-righteousness on the left or the right at times, but this was by far one of the best I've read of yours.
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Powerful and memorable. So many verses explode in the mind's eye with various sense arousals employed. You could smell it, hear it, taste it, etc...
I appreciate how you create an interplay with the political and spiritual conflict. Although homeless being attributed to those who lack compassion is a universal problem, it seems there is also a pseudo self-righteousness on the left or the right at times, but this was by far one of the best I've read of yours.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from Esther Brown
Easy Everett is not so easy to read. I am not sure what to say about this poem. Disturbing at very least. It leaves me with a bitter taste of hopelessness for mankind. Forever doomed to maggots and self destruction. Hell on Earth. Reminds me of when "Every thought was to evil all the time" leading to the flood of Noah's time. Esther
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Easy Everett is not so easy to read. I am not sure what to say about this poem. Disturbing at very least. It leaves me with a bitter taste of hopelessness for mankind. Forever doomed to maggots and self destruction. Hell on Earth. Reminds me of when "Every thought was to evil all the time" leading to the flood of Noah's time. Esther
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Maybe men are blind to see WHEN the Second Coming will be but maybe it's already here as verse after verse describe calamity. Do unto others... was it meant to be in bad ways too?
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Maybe men are blind to see WHEN the Second Coming will be but maybe it's already here as verse after verse describe calamity. Do unto others... was it meant to be in bad ways too?
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from hullabaloo22
Wow! This is an exceptional piece of poetry. Forgive me if I'm wrong in my interpretation, but I see this as about a country ignoring its people's own needs while pumping financial resources in to other countries wars.
Even if I'm entirely wrong, it still merited the 6 stars.
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Wow! This is an exceptional piece of poetry. Forgive me if I'm wrong in my interpretation, but I see this as about a country ignoring its people's own needs while pumping financial resources in to other countries wars.
Even if I'm entirely wrong, it still merited the 6 stars.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
Oh, Everett. Where to start.
I'm still reeling from the depth, passion and truth of this piece let alone the masterful structure and integrity.
You poured your heart out onto paper reaching many more with your words. There are too many compelling words/lines/sentiments to pick out. You didn't put a pen wrong, except I will repeat this line which resonated deeply;
'No Gods come forth to verify their stands'.
Truly exceptional.
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Oh, Everett. Where to start.
I'm still reeling from the depth, passion and truth of this piece let alone the masterful structure and integrity.
You poured your heart out onto paper reaching many more with your words. There are too many compelling words/lines/sentiments to pick out. You didn't put a pen wrong, except I will repeat this line which resonated deeply;
'No Gods come forth to verify their stands'.
Truly exceptional.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
Comment from nomi338
Once upon a time, man was perfect and without flaw.
The man and his mate were seduced into breaking God's eternal law.
There now exists a battle of competing wills.
Disobedience of God's holy law leads to a consequence that kills.
One can always believe whatever one chooses to believe.
Use your intelligence to trust or distrust what your mind can conceive.
The world is in a terrible mess, God will one day fix it, I confess.
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Once upon a time, man was perfect and without flaw.
The man and his mate were seduced into breaking God's eternal law.
There now exists a battle of competing wills.
Disobedience of God's holy law leads to a consequence that kills.
One can always believe whatever one chooses to believe.
Use your intelligence to trust or distrust what your mind can conceive.
The world is in a terrible mess, God will one day fix it, I confess.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
