An Extended Walk
The past is always present.5 total reviews
Comment from Janilou
This is certainly true. The past is always present. :-)
"Why did mom tell grandpa he had to leave?" Thirteen-year-old Donna threw the washcloth into the ....
Mom
Grandpa
They married, then I and your uncle Bob came along, and the rest is our family history.
Either uncle, Bob
OR
Uncle Bob
Hope that helps. All the best in the contest.
Jan
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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This is certainly true. The past is always present. :-)
"Why did mom tell grandpa he had to leave?" Thirteen-year-old Donna threw the washcloth into the ....
Mom
Grandpa
They married, then I and your uncle Bob came along, and the rest is our family history.
Either uncle, Bob
OR
Uncle Bob
Hope that helps. All the best in the contest.
Jan
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thank you. Careless on my part, most helpful on yours. Good luck with your own writings.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the This Sentence Starts The Story contest.
The picture is beautiful and a good match.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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I think this is a good entry for the This Sentence Starts The Story contest.
The picture is beautiful and a good match.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks for the praise and five stars. Good luck in your own writings.
Comment from Ricky1024
It was well written with good character representation it flowed well red well with no grammar issues at all ejective content was well represented as well Steven imagery descriptive measures were lying and perfect thanks for this talk to Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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It was well written with good character representation it flowed well red well with no grammar issues at all ejective content was well represented as well Steven imagery descriptive measures were lying and perfect thanks for this talk to Ricky 1024
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thank you for the praising words and fine rating. Good luck in your writing.
Comment from RodG
This story describing how a family deals with admitting Grandpa to a senior residence is very believable. I especially like how Donna, the younger grandchild is characterized as Grandpa's protector and, later, as the only one who truly sends what has happened. Mother's rationale for placing him there is very convincing. A really good plot twist when Grandpa immediately disappears. There is mention of Grandpa hallucinating, but the supernatural elements appear rather late in the story. How might you hint at them earlier? Otherwise, the story is well aced, the dialog is believable, and the E solution is convincing. Nice job!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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This story describing how a family deals with admitting Grandpa to a senior residence is very believable. I especially like how Donna, the younger grandchild is characterized as Grandpa's protector and, later, as the only one who truly sends what has happened. Mother's rationale for placing him there is very convincing. A really good plot twist when Grandpa immediately disappears. There is mention of Grandpa hallucinating, but the supernatural elements appear rather late in the story. How might you hint at them earlier? Otherwise, the story is well aced, the dialog is believable, and the E solution is convincing. Nice job!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Appreciate your insightful words and nice rating. Good luck in your writing efforts.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks relation keeping and family living, interactions exposed to help promote a view that there is no past all present for it is just a mere feeling; I like. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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This speaks relation keeping and family living, interactions exposed to help promote a view that there is no past all present for it is just a mere feeling; I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thank you for thoughts and nice rating. Glad you liked it. Good luck with your own writing.
