Grandma's Tale
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and a great interpretation of the picture. Children seem to think we were born as old as we are today. It is not easy for them to see how we could be younger.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
A very well-written poem and a great interpretation of the picture. Children seem to think we were born as old as we are today. It is not easy for them to see how we could be younger.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thanks for your review, Sandra.
Comment from Sis Cat
Maria, I love the conversational tone of this poem between a grandmother trying to tell a story of her young love and her grandchildren's constant interruptions before the story starts. I am reminded of my own interruptions of Grandma Jennie when she told stories.
Your conversation is animated. I can imagine Grandma getting more irritated. I love the short sentences. My only problem was with these because they do not read smoothly:
And I was young
Of wrinkles free
I suggest
When I was young
And wrinkle free
Other than that, this is a fine poetic response to the challenge. Thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
Maria, I love the conversational tone of this poem between a grandmother trying to tell a story of her young love and her grandchildren's constant interruptions before the story starts. I am reminded of my own interruptions of Grandma Jennie when she told stories.
Your conversation is animated. I can imagine Grandma getting more irritated. I love the short sentences. My only problem was with these because they do not read smoothly:
And I was young
Of wrinkles free
I suggest
When I was young
And wrinkle free
Other than that, this is a fine poetic response to the challenge. Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Andre. I've added a comma after young.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written and very sweet story you have penned for the Picture This challenge my friend. It told a very sweet story. Would have love to have heard more details! Great job! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
This is a very well written and very sweet story you have penned for the Picture This challenge my friend. It told a very sweet story. Would have love to have heard more details! Great job! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Teri.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Maria: I love your poetic story. It speaks from the picture. It feels realistic also as children are very talkative this way. Thery are always speaking this way about old age. I enjoyed this time with grandmon and the children. Have a great day.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
Good morning, Maria: I love your poetic story. It speaks from the picture. It feels realistic also as children are very talkative this way. Thery are always speaking this way about old age. I enjoyed this time with grandmon and the children. Have a great day.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading, Tier.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This poem is a good entry for the PIX This challenge.
The picture is a good match for the poem.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
This poem is a good entry for the PIX This challenge.
The picture is a good match for the poem.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading, Sharon.
Comment from smileycloud
a lovely memory poem
of bravery and romance
it has it all
family time and the meeting of the old and young together like the pictured image
blessings
have a smiley day
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
a lovely memory poem
of bravery and romance
it has it all
family time and the meeting of the old and young together like the pictured image
blessings
have a smiley day
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Maria;
Thank you for sharing your interpretation of the 'Pix this' artwork. It must be so difficult for Grandma to want to share a story of her liking, and have grandchildren distracted by their own questions,
~patty~
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
Hi, Maria;
Thank you for sharing your interpretation of the 'Pix this' artwork. It must be so difficult for Grandma to want to share a story of her liking, and have grandchildren distracted by their own questions,
~patty~
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Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
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Indeed!
Thanks for reading.