Comment from dmt1967

Good

This poem was very long and, in my opinion, very rambling. I didn't feel it like your other poems and the no picture style made it hard to follow. It was well written, though. Thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 05-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017

Hi dmt. Well, since we are here to judge the poem itself and not the art created by someone else in another discipling, I really don't understand your comment about 'no picture style' at all. Visual art is actually in a bit different camp than rhetorical art but no problem. As far as being 'very long' I think you might be unfamiliar with classic poetry. Dante's 'Divine Comedy', considered one of the greatest poetic works in history, is one hundred and twelve pages long. Homer's Illiad is two hundred eighty pages long. T. S. Elliot's 'Wasteland' considered by many to be the example of modernist poetry written in the twentieth century is twelve pages long. So 'long' is both subjective and relative. You found this poem rambling. Well, that's great, because the subject lady of this poem, as reflected by the poem, was obviously suffering from mental issues of varied degrees. The reference to 'lithium salts' within the poem should have alerted you to a character who has been treated for mental illness in the past. So, you have validated the veracity and intent of the poem and I thank you. By the way, above the title, it mentions this poem was written in '63' when I was hitting the 'beat' clubs of Chicago, Ill. If you are unfamiliar with beat poets like Alan Ginsberg and others, you might want to read a few of their poems to get the feel of that era. easyeverett

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Tom;
Such an intense and deep poem. I never thought about what happens to a street-walker when she becomes old. And being homeless and used would drive anyone insane.

Your words moved along with a nice rhythm and the piece broke my heart,

~patty~

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 Comment Written 05-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017

Hi Patty. I thank you very much my friend. tom