Comment from damommy

Excellent

You did really well for a first attempt. Since you did so well this time, next time will be even better. 8-)

It's a hard form, and we all had trouble with it, but it's fun to try something new.

I'm glad you joined us in Potlatch Poetry.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017

Thanks for the encouragement and the welcome to the potlatch group

dragonpoet

Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

wow
an extremely intricate form style I believe
I am not even going to start to desipher all the strict riles on this fusion sonnet
but
I WILL comment on the content
strong imagery and powerful messages but expressed with lovingkindness and a quiet gentleness which demands the reader feel connected to your words
very well done
have a smiley day
blessings
Lorraine

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017

Thank you for your kind words and high rating Lorraine. I am glad you liked it.
Have a nice day and Happy Holidays.

Joan

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Wow I have never read a fusion sonnet before Dragon its quite complex in rhyme scheme I must say. I must try and be adventurous and delve in other rhyme schemes instead of the standard ones Thank you for sharing.

dip

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. You're right about the complexity and I thought a regular sonnet was hard enough.

Happy Holidays.

Joan

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks Nature has no flaws but can leave us in awe, we invite our own problems in Nature, we do injustice to Nature and like animals we suffer; I like. DR ALCREATOR

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017

Thanks for the high rating and positive comments.

Happy Holidays

dp

Comment from frierajac

Excellent

I like the sentiment as you have expressed it here. For a first attempt it is Ok. I have done a couple of these and I wonder why you haven't included the format itself so a reader would have an understanding of what you are trying to attempt. You left out the rhetorical questions.

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017

Thanks for the review. I have to find a list of the rules again so I can put them
in author,s notes.

reply by frierajac on 03-Dec-2017

Try looking at poems of club members