~ Innocent Victims ~
2-4-2 Poem20 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
I think this is a very clever microcosmic response to a problem that could be written about at considerable length. Forced into the 2-4-2 format though, you have gone straight to the heart of the matter and stated it without further embellishment. The only problem with this as far as the contest is concerned is that it relies heavily on the background being made apparent by the photo graphs. Without the pictures it it would not be so telling.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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I think this is a very clever microcosmic response to a problem that could be written about at considerable length. Forced into the 2-4-2 format though, you have gone straight to the heart of the matter and stated it without further embellishment. The only problem with this as far as the contest is concerned is that it relies heavily on the background being made apparent by the photo graphs. Without the pictures it it would not be so telling.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Hmm, very good point on the photographs pantygynt. I never thought of it that way. As usual, I wrote the piece before selecting a pic. I can say there are other entries in this contest I?ve seen where the photo tells the story. Let?s hope the judges aren?t as astute as yourself but I guess they will be. Well, one has to try. Thank you for your honest feedback. ~DD
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, DD
= Very true, and tragically so.
= Excellent write--photo is unforgettable.
= Great entry for the contest. Good Luck.
Cheers, J
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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Hi, DD
= Very true, and tragically so.
= Excellent write--photo is unforgettable.
= Great entry for the contest. Good Luck.
Cheers, J
*** Merry Christmas & Happy New Year ***
(*.*) A Smile Is Just A Smile Turned Upside-down (*.*)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
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Thank you Jax. I appreciate your comments on my 2-4-2 entry and contest wishes. Kind regards ~DD
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the 2-4-2 writing prompt.
The subject is sad and very serious. The pictures shocking. It gets your point across.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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This is a good entry for the 2-4-2 writing prompt.
The subject is sad and very serious. The pictures shocking. It gets your point across.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you Sharon. I appreciate you taking the time to review my 2-4-2 poem. Kind regards ~DD
Comment from Irish Rain
Just heartbreaking. Your 2-4-2 is a strong visual reminder of the devastation we leave behind, or that we choose to ignore. Wonderful entry!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Just heartbreaking. Your 2-4-2 is a strong visual reminder of the devastation we leave behind, or that we choose to ignore. Wonderful entry!! Blessings...
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you Irish Rain. Your comments on my 2-4-2 are very much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a powerfully written poem and together with the images really impacts the reader. Children are innocent victims of conflicts in so many ways. A horrifying situation. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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This is a powerfully written poem and together with the images really impacts the reader. Children are innocent victims of conflicts in so many ways. A horrifying situation. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you Marilyn. I appreciate your comments. It was a hard one to compile as I couldn't see the pictures through my tears. So many innocent children suffering on so many levels. ~DD
Comment from fastdigits
the choice of art work perfect for your six line poem with the commentary that it is the young who always pay the price for the mistakes of the adults.
Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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the choice of art work perfect for your six line poem with the commentary that it is the young who always pay the price for the mistakes of the adults.
Well done and good luck
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you fastdigits. I appreciate you taking the time to review my 2-4-2 poem. Kindest regards ~DD
Comment from Mistydawn
You're right so many children's suffering is often forgotten. This is a very well-written poem, with a very powerful message. Your poem fits well within the guidelines. Good luck on your contest
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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You're right so many children's suffering is often forgotten. This is a very well-written poem, with a very powerful message. Your poem fits well within the guidelines. Good luck on your contest
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you Mistydawn. I appreciate your feedback on my short 2-4-2 poem. Too many children suffering around the world for too many reasons. Man never learns. ~DD
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It's very sad, heartbreaking.
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It's very sad, heartbreaking.
Comment from RodG
This poem--plus that photo--should garner many votes in the contest from voters like me who detest such evidence of man's inhumanity to man. The innocent are always the victims.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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This poem--plus that photo--should garner many votes in the contest from voters like me who detest such evidence of man's inhumanity to man. The innocent are always the victims.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you RodG, Trying to choose a picture to go with this piece was very difficult because of all the children victims in the world that have and still are suffering. I couldn?t see through the tears. Too many children suffering for too many reasons - all out of the innocent child?s control. I appreciate your review. ~DD
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My pleasure. Good luck in the contest.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. The content is quite powerful and moving. All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. The content is quite powerful and moving. All the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
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Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you Mystic Angel for taking the time to review my short poem. I appreciate your comments. ~DD
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This is a very strong 2-4-2 for the contest and the picture you chose reminds us of all the times we have tried to forget. Very well done
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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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This is a very strong 2-4-2 for the contest and the picture you chose reminds us of all the times we have tried to forget. Very well done
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Comment Written 03-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
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Thank you Barb. Trying to choose a picture to go with this piece was very difficult because of all the children victims in the world that have and still are suffering. Too many for too many reasons - all out of the innocent child?s control. I appreciate your review. ~DD
