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Veronica is sent back again

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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi, Sandra

= As always, an excellent chapter, with super dialogue.
= Jeesh, I don't now how Victoria keeps track of herself, let a lone the peeps coming a going.
= I really like Gwendolyn. What a butthead, her brother was.
= Looking forward to the next chapter.

Cheers, J
*** Merry Christmas & Happy New Year! ***
(*>*) A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*>*)

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    Thank you so much, Jackie, for another wonderful review. I always enjoy reading what you think about it. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxxx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Wow! You've surely given Veronica and us a lot to think about. I do love this story. You are doing a wonderful job writing it. The emotion is alive and very strong.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
    Thank you so very much for your wonderfully enthusiastic review, my dear friend!! And all those stars, an extra big hug! I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story. Biggest hugs, Sandra xxxx
Comment from damommy
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You never disappoint me with your story. It's like being there with them, right in the middle of things. Now that Veronica's gone back to her time, let's hope she can come up with some solution to help the child. I can imagine what it must have been like in those days for an albino. It's not much easier now.

I may have told you already, one of my blind cousins married a blind man who was an albino, and my daddy worked with an albino, so I was 'introduced' to this at an early age. I never showed any reaction to them, and I came to not even noticing the difference. 8-)

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    That is so nice of you, my dear friend. Your amazing review and golden six stars are so just so beautiful. It isn't that much different today, we still hear of atrocities done to our fellow man. It's a sad world, Yvonne.

    Yes, you did tell me about your cousin, Yvonne. That was a really nice 'feel-good' story. When you are introduced to someone who is '"different" at an early age, it would become natural to you. It would be great of every child was taught that looking different is good and natural. Thank you again, my wonderful friend. :) Sandra xxxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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What a sad story she had to tell. Jacob was no where to be found when she needed him most. John suffered too because she bolted out of the church. I would have done the same. It would have infuriated me as well to see him checking the time as I was walking down the isle. It was just the nudge she needed to get out of an unwanted marriage. Poor Gwen. Well done Sandra. Nancy

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    Thank you, my dear friend. No, Gwendolyn didn't have a good like once she was of marriageable age. I would hate to live that way, and there are many cultures that do this to women today. Awful, isn't it. Thanks again, my friend. :) sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
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What a chapter Sandra! Poor Gwendolyn having to suffer through the agony of her almost wedding, the disappearance of Jacob and the life and suffering of Frances. Veronica does pick the most interesting times to travel. This of course adds suspense to the story. By being back in her own time, it still leaves questions unanswered and outcomes unknown. But it does give her chance to investigate further. Thankfully she has Mildred and James finally understands. Another great job my friend, thanks.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    Veronica has no choice in when and where she will go, but you are right, she had to do some research now with the help of Mildred and James. But, she also will get to be with her children again for a while.Thank you so much for another lovely review, Alie, I really appreciate your encouragement. :) Sandra xxx
reply by aryr on 03-Dec-2017
    Not a problem Sandra, it is great reading and very well done. You manage to balance the times easily and knowing just where to make the change. You are so welcome.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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This story is fabulous and thrilling! utterly spellbinding well done this story has everything and I can't get enough top notch work and well worth of a shiny six! Kindest regards Meia xx

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    Wow! Meia, what an amazing review, thank you so very much!! And I'm sending you a humongous hug for the golden stars, thank you!!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from rama devi
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'Well, good for you! That was really brave to leave him standing at the altar.' I chuckled,(.) 'I would have loved to have seen the look on his face. I'm sure he didn't expect that!'
Good chapter. A deep, dialog driven scene. I love how it closes with another O LORDY!

Just notice one spag:

* He heard me enter(,) and his temper exploded.

Good pacing, characterization, etc.
Fine descriptive detail. I'm always game for another added simile, though, if you find a spot!

Warm Smiles,
rd






 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    Thank you for finding those and letting me know, my friend. I've made the corrections. :)) There will loads of giggles and smiles in the next part now Veronica is home for a while. I'll make sure of it, lol. Thanks, Rama! Big hugs, Sandra xx
reply by rama devi on 03-Dec-2017
    Looking forward! :))) Huge hugs and beaming smiles, rd
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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An intriguing chapter. Well written, easy to follow.
The story is interesting and draws the reader in.
The picture of a woman in despair s the perfect match to your story.
The characters are believable.
Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    Thank you, Sharon, for your kind review, I do appreciate it. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Ulla
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Oh Sandra, this is just such another wonderful chapter. We now know what Gwendolyn went through and what she was hiding about her son. Not an easy situation at all. And now Veronica is back in her own time. Fascinating.
Only a minor thing: Joe doesn't have a chance to tell anyone = Joe didn't have a chance ...
Can't wait to reading on. A big hug. Ulla xxxx

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    Thank you so much, my wonderful friend, for the brilliant golden stars! Now Veronica has to do some research before she's whisked back again. Lots to do. When will you be posting Sally? Thanks for the input, my friend. I'll take a look at that. Big hugs! :) Sandra xxxx
reply by Ulla on 03-Dec-2017
    You know I love your story. Sally will be out within the hour. xxxx
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    I'll be waiting! :)
reply by Ulla on 03-Dec-2017
    Oh thanks my dear friend. xx
Comment from Brigitte Elko
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This part of your story did not disappoint this reader. It is well written and describes the scenes vividly. Your characters have been developed with strong personalities.
Thanks for sharing and can't wait to read more.
Have a great Sunday,
Brigitte

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2017
    Thank you so much, Brigitte, for your lovely review. I'm delighted you enjoyed this part too!! :) Sandra xxx
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