The Golfer
A memory never forgotten19 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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This was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
We all meet that one person who makes a huge impact on our lives for one thing or another. When you lose that person it can be hard but know that he is looking down upon you smiling. And I hope you go golfing soon
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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We all meet that one person who makes a huge impact on our lives for one thing or another. When you lose that person it can be hard but know that he is looking down upon you smiling. And I hope you go golfing soon
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much, and I golf often, admiring the trees****kahpot
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I'll ask my friends to put ball on the green
this year I'm sure my dream will come true
more friends I've planted to help me through
my friends on the course all named tree
a golfer I am Kerry Hall that's me '
Bless Kerry this wonderful poem is so well written. A virtual six from me love and regards Meia x
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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I'll ask my friends to put ball on the green
this year I'm sure my dream will come true
more friends I've planted to help me through
my friends on the course all named tree
a golfer I am Kerry Hall that's me '
Bless Kerry this wonderful poem is so well written. A virtual six from me love and regards Meia x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much, and I believe I was blessed to meet Kerry, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This was cute and a lot of fun to read. I've never really played golf to much though. I like the way you incorporated your faith into it. You talked about praying and not cursing. This was well written and well done.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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This was cute and a lot of fun to read. I've never really played golf to much though. I like the way you incorporated your faith into it. You talked about praying and not cursing. This was well written and well done.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from RGstar
As a golf fanatic, I liked the humor in this. I admired your usage of it despite by reading in your author's notes of a passing.
A little tiding up to do. If I may suggest a few changes, it might help the narrative.
"so the ball I've struck is a pleasure to play"
To make the narrative easier to understand concerning the above action, as I have seen it confusing a couple, perhaps changing that line a little;
"so the ball I've struck rebounds my way"
Yet, your whole poem needs a little tidy, so in honor of that write, if I should take this money on offer, I owe the respect to that author to improve or correct if feel just to do.
I hope you see the areas for next time.
"A golfer I am; Kerry Hall, that's me.
My friends on the course all named tree.
I've played with my friends for many long years,
prayed with them and shed some tears.
I've hit them hard and hit them low,
but cursing at friends a definite no,
as they've all been kind, in bending their way
so the ball I've struck, rebounds my way.
The course curator who planted the seeds;
Kerry Hall, that's me, so skill; who needs?
The tall, the short; the bushy ones too,
all lend a limb to guide my ball through.
The fairway it lands off my friends...tree,
as all their branches part way for me.
I swear I've seen their roots in-ground
walk proudly away when my ball's inbound.
I've seen their leaves all scattered about
to hide the balls, of others no doubt.
The petals of loved ones I've known since babes,
tomorrow I'll sweep and honor their graves.
I wish the water on the course,
could be my friend of greater force.
I would be then a golfing great,
no longer a need to hit the ball straight.
My name on a trophy not yet to be seen,
I'll ask my friends to put ball on the green.
This year I'm sure my dream will come true;
more friends I've planted to help me through.
my friends on the course all named tree.
A golfer I am...Kerry Hall, that's me."
It is strange how the pressure to read for dollars are evident here, as it is best to hop over if not reviewing or helping the work. It would not be fair for me to take money for this without really trying to review properly.
It is a story poem so needs punctuation.
I hope that help, for I enjoyed the sentiment behind it.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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As a golf fanatic, I liked the humor in this. I admired your usage of it despite by reading in your author's notes of a passing.
A little tiding up to do. If I may suggest a few changes, it might help the narrative.
"so the ball I've struck is a pleasure to play"
To make the narrative easier to understand concerning the above action, as I have seen it confusing a couple, perhaps changing that line a little;
"so the ball I've struck rebounds my way"
Yet, your whole poem needs a little tidy, so in honor of that write, if I should take this money on offer, I owe the respect to that author to improve or correct if feel just to do.
I hope you see the areas for next time.
"A golfer I am; Kerry Hall, that's me.
My friends on the course all named tree.
I've played with my friends for many long years,
prayed with them and shed some tears.
I've hit them hard and hit them low,
but cursing at friends a definite no,
as they've all been kind, in bending their way
so the ball I've struck, rebounds my way.
The course curator who planted the seeds;
Kerry Hall, that's me, so skill; who needs?
The tall, the short; the bushy ones too,
all lend a limb to guide my ball through.
The fairway it lands off my friends...tree,
as all their branches part way for me.
I swear I've seen their roots in-ground
walk proudly away when my ball's inbound.
I've seen their leaves all scattered about
to hide the balls, of others no doubt.
The petals of loved ones I've known since babes,
tomorrow I'll sweep and honor their graves.
I wish the water on the course,
could be my friend of greater force.
I would be then a golfing great,
no longer a need to hit the ball straight.
My name on a trophy not yet to be seen,
I'll ask my friends to put ball on the green.
This year I'm sure my dream will come true;
more friends I've planted to help me through.
my friends on the course all named tree.
A golfer I am...Kerry Hall, that's me."
It is strange how the pressure to read for dollars are evident here, as it is best to hop over if not reviewing or helping the work. It would not be fair for me to take money for this without really trying to review properly.
It is a story poem so needs punctuation.
I hope that help, for I enjoyed the sentiment behind it.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much indeed, I will adjust my work as your help is very good and Thank You****kahpot
Comment from Rasmine
Oh, okay. So trees were your friends on the golf course. I didn't connect that at first.
I found a typo (I think):
A golfer I am (comma) Kerry Hall that's me
my friends on the course all named tree
I'm also sorry about your friend.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Oh, okay. So trees were your friends on the golf course. I didn't connect that at first.
I found a typo (I think):
A golfer I am (comma) Kerry Hall that's me
my friends on the course all named tree
I'm also sorry about your friend.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much, and yes a few punctuation typos for me to correct I think, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story/poem. I don't know much about playing golf, but I believe you have the facts right as you were informed. It is a great story about Kerry Hall.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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A very well-written story/poem. I don't know much about playing golf, but I believe you have the facts right as you were informed. It is a great story about Kerry Hall.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Dean Kuch
Never touched a golf club in my life, kahpot. Unless you consider those putters used in put-put golf to be real golf clubs.
Everyone has hobbies they love to participate in. Mine were spelunking and sky diving, yours is golf.
Quite frankly I never saw the allure of golf. Whack a ball 300 feet, then go chasing after it and do it all over again until you get it in the hole in a specified number of tee offs. I suppose most do it as a hobby to get outdoors, to enjoy a bit of walking and nature.
Watching it on television is akin to watching grass grow.
Nice ode to your friend.
May they RIP.
~Dean
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Never touched a golf club in my life, kahpot. Unless you consider those putters used in put-put golf to be real golf clubs.
Everyone has hobbies they love to participate in. Mine were spelunking and sky diving, yours is golf.
Quite frankly I never saw the allure of golf. Whack a ball 300 feet, then go chasing after it and do it all over again until you get it in the hole in a specified number of tee offs. I suppose most do it as a hobby to get outdoors, to enjoy a bit of walking and nature.
Watching it on television is akin to watching grass grow.
Nice ode to your friend.
May they RIP.
~Dean
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Skydiving AHHH! You are a braver man than me my friend, I like golf and other such sports Darts) as my feet are on the ground, although watching it is as you say, better to play, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from jenintorre
I love your poem. It is a great tribute to your friend. It is so poignant and very well written.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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I love your poem. It is a great tribute to your friend. It is so poignant and very well written.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Dumbledor
Nice respectful verse, catching the imagery of the trees on the golf course, reminding you of a friend now passed. Some nice imagery present in the poem '' the petals of loved ones I've known since babes''. The memory of a friend, remains among the trees cared for and planted by him. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Nice respectful verse, catching the imagery of the trees on the golf course, reminding you of a friend now passed. Some nice imagery present in the poem '' the petals of loved ones I've known since babes''. The memory of a friend, remains among the trees cared for and planted by him. Nicely written.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
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Most welcome!
