Those Happy Days
a quatern for the young at heart30 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Your poem makes me think of my childhood too. I remember swinging, going down the giant slide, and climbing the jungle gym. Those were the day -- hope children play this way and not on computer games or phones.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Your poem makes me think of my childhood too. I remember swinging, going down the giant slide, and climbing the jungle gym. Those were the day -- hope children play this way and not on computer games or phones.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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It pleases me to know that other YOUNGER generations can relate to "Those Happy Days." Thank you for sharing, Rasmine.
Comment from RGstar
For me, this is a winner, after reading all. Three with yours were close, but this excelled in the name of the prompt.
Of Happiness. That is what we look for in which you exude with all its simplicity.
Good luck to all the authors, but this tips it for me.
Of Happiness.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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For me, this is a winner, after reading all. Three with yours were close, but this excelled in the name of the prompt.
Of Happiness. That is what we look for in which you exude with all its simplicity.
Good luck to all the authors, but this tips it for me.
Of Happiness.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much, RGstar for your ringing endorsement of "Those Happy Days."
Comment from frierajac
A charming presentation with the illustration matching perfectly the theme and
movement of the poem. The rhyme scheme is smoother in the first quatrain.
You repeat as in refrain, which seems to give this a swinging momentum.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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A charming presentation with the illustration matching perfectly the theme and
movement of the poem. The rhyme scheme is smoother in the first quatrain.
You repeat as in refrain, which seems to give this a swinging momentum.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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I am delighted you found "Those Happy Days" to be a charming poem. You are the only reviewer thus far to mention the "swinging momentum" of the meter. I did use iambic tetrameter deliberately to mimic the motion of the children's swing.. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment from rjuselius
Awwww, This is such a sweetheart of a poem dear anonymous! It really does take you back to those ppy carefree days. Bravo my friend!
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Awwww, This is such a sweetheart of a poem dear anonymous! It really does take you back to those ppy carefree days. Bravo my friend!
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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I am so flattered you like my "sweetheart of a poem" this much, Rebekka. It was fun to reminisce and indeed the artwork was an inspiration. Thank you for your wonderful praise and that galaxy of stars.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
So far, as I scroll through the contest entires for voting, yours has been the best crafted and my favorite. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
So far, as I scroll through the contest entires for voting, yours has been the best crafted and my favorite. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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I am delighted "Those Happy Days," is your favorite in the contest, robyn. Thank you for your kind response.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah, yes.
Who could forget those halcyon days of our yesteryears?
When the biggest decisions we had to make were what games we'd like to play with our friends.
In my day, most of our time was spent outdoors.
Try getting a kid outdoors today what with PCs, X-Box and PlayStation 4.
Great entry for the Happy Poems contest.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Ah, yes.
Who could forget those halcyon days of our yesteryears?
When the biggest decisions we had to make were what games we'd like to play with our friends.
In my day, most of our time was spent outdoors.
Try getting a kid outdoors today what with PCs, X-Box and PlayStation 4.
Great entry for the Happy Poems contest.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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I truly enjoyed reminiscing when I wrote this poem, Dean, and the artwork brought back some great memories of those "halcyon days." Thank you so much for sharing.
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You're welcome.
~Dean
Comment from clsandau
I like your happy poem. It rings so true for those of us who were blessed to live through the happy times. Life was much simpler and yet we were very happy. Nice rhyming and set up of your poem. Picture truly looks like those earlier times without technology and all that goes with it. Thanks for taking us back...Good luck in the contest. Carol
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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I like your happy poem. It rings so true for those of us who were blessed to live through the happy times. Life was much simpler and yet we were very happy. Nice rhyming and set up of your poem. Picture truly looks like those earlier times without technology and all that goes with it. Thanks for taking us back...Good luck in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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You and I seem to remember those happy times in a similar way, Carol. Indeed they were simpler and we never had trouble finding things to do with other kids. Thank you so much for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from Brigitte Elko
A well written entry for the Happy Poems contest. The description of happy times gone by is well written. This post brings back many memories. Well done. The picture you chose is a perfect complement.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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A well written entry for the Happy Poems contest. The description of happy times gone by is well written. This post brings back many memories. Well done. The picture you chose is a perfect complement.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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I am so pleased my poem and the artwork brought back memories, Brigitte. That was indeed my intent. I truly appreciating your sharing "Those Happy Days" and your kind praise.
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My pleasure. Thank you for sharing.
Brigitte
Comment from sfharper
This indeed seems quite happy. The sense of fun riding a swing with friends comes out clearly. The last two lines are a little hard to read, perhaps choosing a stronger verb like "rings through me" instead of "cause to be" would help. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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This indeed seems quite happy. The sense of fun riding a swing with friends comes out clearly. The last two lines are a little hard to read, perhaps choosing a stronger verb like "rings through me" instead of "cause to be" would help. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for sharing my poem, sfharper, and for your comments. In a QUATERN the last line (refrain) of the final stanza must be the same as the first line in the first stanza, so I have no options but to keep it as is.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi MO. I really enjoyed you poem an 8 syllable meter with each line ( except the last line in stanza three 'Spent climbing, swinging, trying to fly This was a little awkward and threw out the rhythm. I would suggest be to leave off the ing in flying just put try to fly as this would keep the content but bring it back to an8 syllable flow. Loved the memories this brought back I loved the swing and slides and roundabouts as a child. A great poem though and good luck with the contest this is a happy poem Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Hi MO. I really enjoyed you poem an 8 syllable meter with each line ( except the last line in stanza three 'Spent climbing, swinging, trying to fly This was a little awkward and threw out the rhythm. I would suggest be to leave off the ing in flying just put try to fly as this would keep the content but bring it back to an8 syllable flow. Loved the memories this brought back I loved the swing and slides and roundabouts as a child. A great poem though and good luck with the contest this is a happy poem Cheers Christine
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Hi Chrissy. Thank you so much for sharing "Those Happy Days." I am delighted you enjoyed this flashback to any earlier era. I truly appreciate your also bringing to my attention the flaw in stanza three. I had not counted the syllables because where I live "trying" is slurred over into ONE syllable. I'll work on that.
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Hi MO I love the poem happy to help the other lives are flawless Good luck Cheers Christine
