Spectronnection / Connectrum
How everything is connected23 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
hello Badger. Epic is a word I would use with this one. I got a little bit lost by the time it was closer to the end however, as somewhere in the middle the thought process changed. I think you are a man with much in your heart and for that alone it is worth a five star rating. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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hello Badger. Epic is a word I would use with this one. I got a little bit lost by the time it was closer to the end however, as somewhere in the middle the thought process changed. I think you are a man with much in your heart and for that alone it is worth a five star rating. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you cutie I appreciate you stopping by I really appreciate your kind comments and perseverance for seeing this through from the beginning to the end. A pleasure and an honor to write with you here. Blessings, brother Badger
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. Sometimes we need to be deep in a dark pit to see that we have to get out of there in one or other way, climb and fight till you are in the light again.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. Sometimes we need to be deep in a dark pit to see that we have to get out of there in one or other way, climb and fight till you are in the light again.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind words and continued support. A pleasure and an honor to write with you here. Blessings, brother badger
Comment from visionary1234
Hey Badger - I enjoyed being privy to your wild dream/ meditation. Loved your imagery and inventive rhyming. Rhythm not especially regular but the piece worked just fine when read aloud. "Wondrous" really is a word by itself - doesn't need an apostrophe by the way. My only question on this piece would be its sheer length, which is exhausting! I think you could make your impact just as effectively by keeping just your most vivid imagery. Loved the presence of your dad throughout .. you definitely achieved your purpose of getting the message home to us though!
:)S
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Hey Badger - I enjoyed being privy to your wild dream/ meditation. Loved your imagery and inventive rhyming. Rhythm not especially regular but the piece worked just fine when read aloud. "Wondrous" really is a word by itself - doesn't need an apostrophe by the way. My only question on this piece would be its sheer length, which is exhausting! I think you could make your impact just as effectively by keeping just your most vivid imagery. Loved the presence of your dad throughout .. you definitely achieved your purpose of getting the message home to us though!
:)S
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for stopping by and for your kind comments. I appreciate your perspective. An honor and a pleasure to write with you here. Blessings, brother Badger
Comment from Nika2016
I have actually had these dreams too going as far as the green door...a place where all races gather in harmony...and my mind tells me there is so much more to explore...I enjoyed your journey.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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I have actually had these dreams too going as far as the green door...a place where all races gather in harmony...and my mind tells me there is so much more to explore...I enjoyed your journey.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you Nikki I really appreciate your perspective and the fact that I was alluding at the doors as being the members of all Races. I appreciate your perspective and kind reviews, is it pleasure and an honor to write with you here. Blessings, brother badger
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow this is an epic write and you certainly went on a journey here! You let all your emotions out and I hope you feel better, I felt I went on the journey with you, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Wow this is an epic write and you certainly went on a journey here! You let all your emotions out and I hope you feel better, I felt I went on the journey with you, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you darling as usual I really appreciate your kind comments and your perception. A pleasure and an honor to ride with you here. Blessings, brother badger
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an interesting write, filled with anomalies and contradiction. I became lost in my interpretation, so please forgive my hollow review - I gather it was intended as a soliloquy, describing an experience or experiences. The rhythm and rhyme were fluid in parts and uneven in other parts, but I do believe the work demonstrates depth, and with a few revisions, could be a splendid work...
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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In my opinion, an interesting write, filled with anomalies and contradiction. I became lost in my interpretation, so please forgive my hollow review - I gather it was intended as a soliloquy, describing an experience or experiences. The rhythm and rhyme were fluid in parts and uneven in other parts, but I do believe the work demonstrates depth, and with a few revisions, could be a splendid work...
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Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind and honest comments and continued support I appreciate it though thanks brother badger
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You are so very welcome - I was really immersed in the piece...Eve
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Thanks for your warm reply Eve. A pleasure and honor to write with you here. Blessings, Darren
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You are so very welcome, Darren, and I feel the precisely the same about writing here with you. Thank you for your gracious words...Eve
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Way too long. There is are no discernable chorus and verse sections. Maybe you should have entered this in The Lyrics Make the Song contest by Matthew Bret West. It probably would have done well there. Just my opinion.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Way too long. There is are no discernable chorus and verse sections. Maybe you should have entered this in The Lyrics Make the Song contest by Matthew Bret West. It probably would have done well there. Just my opinion.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thanks for stopping by Thomas I always appreciate your honest comments blessings brother badger
Comment from Cybertron1986
I adore the infusion of the vast scientific terminology with the creative expression of words here. For example, "perclusive" and "inflection." There are so many. I can see how you managed to create that sense of credibility to what science has already proven, which, in turn conveys credibility to the overall message. Genius!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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I adore the infusion of the vast scientific terminology with the creative expression of words here. For example, "perclusive" and "inflection." There are so many. I can see how you managed to create that sense of credibility to what science has already proven, which, in turn conveys credibility to the overall message. Genius!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
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Thanks so much cyber, author of all the reviews that I've got you are one of the ones that grassed the meeting I was attempting to convey behind this; the connection of everything the underlying scientific proof behind it connected to the Earthly and the spiritual Realms. I really appreciate your comments and they are an astute reflection that allows me to understand the deeper meaning behind my work. Blessings brother badger
PS if you like this I think you would enjoy dead air darklight which is in my portfolio. Thanks again for stopping by
Comment from Dean Kuch
Jumpin' jeezus on a Palomino Pony, Darren.
Do you think this poem was long enough?
Were you able to say in 1,483 words what could have probably be said in half that amount?
I sincerely hope so.
Ya know, a very popular poet here once told me, "When it comes to poetry, shorter is better."
This rivals Edgar Allan Poe's "The Raven" in loquaciousness.
Well, I'd already forgotten what the beginning of your poem was about by the time I reached the end.
I seem to recall lots of alliteration being used.
Some abstract, contemporary imagery conveyed as well.
Good luck with this.
~Dean
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Jumpin' jeezus on a Palomino Pony, Darren.
Do you think this poem was long enough?
Were you able to say in 1,483 words what could have probably be said in half that amount?
I sincerely hope so.
Ya know, a very popular poet here once told me, "When it comes to poetry, shorter is better."
This rivals Edgar Allan Poe's "The Raven" in loquaciousness.
Well, I'd already forgotten what the beginning of your poem was about by the time I reached the end.
I seem to recall lots of alliteration being used.
Some abstract, contemporary imagery conveyed as well.
Good luck with this.
~Dean
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much Dean. I always appreciate your honest comments and it is an honor and a pleasure to write with you here sir. I would like to have been briefed her, but for this concept I felt it necessary to include as much detail as possible . Blessings, brother badger
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Blessings to you as well, Darren.
~Dean
Comment from irishauthorme
This is the story of an incredible journey through life that all take but few notice.
Because of that failing I feel that many readers will not understand your story, nor the intent of your verses. Just as it is so hard for the average person to see(let alone understand) how all things are not only connected, but are the creation of and monitored by God. The ripples in a far pool are nonetheless felt here.
The colored doors you described represent the many different races of mankind and what better illustrates our nature than the music we produce? Further, it is the primitive rhythms to which we respond, that instinct born in us which no amount of evolving or civilizing will erode.
Finally, the certainty of reincarnation for the evolution and advancement of the soul not only brings your theme together and adds a satisfying ending, your last lines will shock and amaze some readers and make them think and wonder. For the enlightened few, questions will arise and make them read your work again, searching for answers.
This is a stupendous rendering, one which will last and be re-read many times with each reading rendering a different perspective.
Kudos!
As an after thought, you gave me the solution to a crippling problem with the opening paragraphs of my own fictional story.
irish
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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This is the story of an incredible journey through life that all take but few notice.
Because of that failing I feel that many readers will not understand your story, nor the intent of your verses. Just as it is so hard for the average person to see(let alone understand) how all things are not only connected, but are the creation of and monitored by God. The ripples in a far pool are nonetheless felt here.
The colored doors you described represent the many different races of mankind and what better illustrates our nature than the music we produce? Further, it is the primitive rhythms to which we respond, that instinct born in us which no amount of evolving or civilizing will erode.
Finally, the certainty of reincarnation for the evolution and advancement of the soul not only brings your theme together and adds a satisfying ending, your last lines will shock and amaze some readers and make them think and wonder. For the enlightened few, questions will arise and make them read your work again, searching for answers.
This is a stupendous rendering, one which will last and be re-read many times with each reading rendering a different perspective.
Kudos!
As an after thought, you gave me the solution to a crippling problem with the opening paragraphs of my own fictional story.
irish
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much Irish. The layers of your perspective help me to understand my writing even more I am very happy and pleased that I was able to inspire you with some of your work. I am very pleased with this accomplishment and will use it as a stepping stone to many more. Thank you for noticing that I mentioned the devil but I didn't mention God but he was alluded at. Blessings brother badger
