Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I so behind on my responding
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
with all the sadness I see happiness and true love as the couple hold hand expressing their situation.
Cookie

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely second part of the week.

reply by misscookie on 29-Nov-2017

You're very welcome, until next time.
Cookie

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

A sweet conversation even though it's about a very hard thing. I'm sorry if this is true and that you've had trouble with the hospital. How thoughtful that the couple refuse to blame each other but both assume responsibility. What a great relationship!

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind and understanding review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from Dutchie

Exceptional

A nice conversation Ine. Communication is so important and clears out so many misunderstandings. Very wise to take the blame together. The truth is somewhere in between I think.Well done. Fia

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind and understanding review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Ine.

A great contest entry, mate, and I wish you the best of luck in it.

That must be so hard to write in dialogue only. I've never tried it, but, you've done well with it.

I'll give it a try when I get time and see if I can do it, which I doubt.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind and understanding review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Good

I am sorry, but I need to mark this one down. You need to start your sentences with capital letters and end them with punctuation. You also need to separate different people speaking with a space.

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 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely and blessed Sunday.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I liked your interpretation of the Dialogue Only prompt. I sometimes wonder how we communicate at all, especially on a global scale, since we can so easily miss-communicate or get confused as couples, who have been together for a long time. Best wishes in the contest and in taking shared responsibility- Joan

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely weekend.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Modern Times seems to be quite confusing. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good. There is very good imagery. Good job.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely weekend.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

hahahaha!

Ine,

I truly wish I knew real couples who were this easy to pacify and knew how to put a gentle end to every argument. What a nice surprise! I thought this was a great entry for the contest, but I do recommend that you punctuate the piece as it should be? With capital letters at the beginnings of sentences and periods, etc, at the ends?

Good luck!

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely weekend.

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Hi Ine, it can be so hard to watch someone you love go through this...just take one day at a time sweet girl...very well written ...you...love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely weekend.

reply by l.raven on 24-Nov-2017

sooooooooo welcome you...xxoo love ya

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Nicely done but to make it better, please divide the parts with spaces to make it easier to read and understand. It is too cluttered

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely weekend. Thanks for the tip.