Climate Change
An atypical sonnet.8 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet. Human is 90% to blame for the detoriarating sources on earth. We all run around to fix the wrong and fill our pockets with treasures that will have no value at the end.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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A very well-written sonnet. Human is 90% to blame for the detoriarating sources on earth. We all run around to fix the wrong and fill our pockets with treasures that will have no value at the end.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thank you Sandra. tom
Comment from Dean Kuch
An English or Shakespearean sonnet with a more modern or contemporary message.
Composed as most sonnets of this type are. 14 lines, written in iambic pentameter with an abab rhyme scheme, with a votla or "turn" coming in line nine.
Well done.
Here's wishing you & your family a very Happy Thanksgiving Day, Tom.
~Dean
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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An English or Shakespearean sonnet with a more modern or contemporary message.
Composed as most sonnets of this type are. 14 lines, written in iambic pentameter with an abab rhyme scheme, with a votla or "turn" coming in line nine.
Well done.
Here's wishing you & your family a very Happy Thanksgiving Day, Tom.
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thanks again my friend. tom
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about love state and the feeling at the day breaks; poet remembers the living and natural uncomforting status of living, fearful state in guilty eyes, well expressed rhyme a good sonnet produced; I liked.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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This speaks about love state and the feeling at the day breaks; poet remembers the living and natural uncomforting status of living, fearful state in guilty eyes, well expressed rhyme a good sonnet produced; I liked.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thank you ALD. Most honored. tom
Comment from robyn corum
The streams are dry, no summer buds expand,
No desert death has ever been so dead.
Easy,
I assume this poem is speaking about the utter desolation that comes after a love has failed. (I think?) It is eloquent and well-crafted. My favorite lines are pasted above. I enjoyed! Thank you!
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The streams are dry, no summer buds expand,
No desert death has ever been so dead.
Easy,
I assume this poem is speaking about the utter desolation that comes after a love has failed. (I think?) It is eloquent and well-crafted. My favorite lines are pasted above. I enjoyed! Thank you!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2017
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Man's fatal flaws are now but bitter tears
That pour in torrents from his guilty eyes;
Spurned on by memories and last goodbyes
As lovers held to love through all their fears.' A stunning sonnet well done this is beautiful written and very true, I like the abba scheme used, very clever kind regards Meia xx
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Man's fatal flaws are now but bitter tears
That pour in torrents from his guilty eyes;
Spurned on by memories and last goodbyes
As lovers held to love through all their fears.' A stunning sonnet well done this is beautiful written and very true, I like the abba scheme used, very clever kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 22-Nov-2017
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a nice poem about The End. There is a lot of feeling coming through with this one.
Nicely rhymed, good flow, nicely done.
Thank you for sharing this one with us.'
Sharon
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This is a nice poem about The End. There is a lot of feeling coming through with this one.
Nicely rhymed, good flow, nicely done.
Thank you for sharing this one with us.'
Sharon
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
Comment from royowen
I think all of us have had a hand in man's downfall, an ever spiralling downward rush, order to disorder. Beautifully written atypical sonnet, the abba rhyming is indeed unusual at this time. But you express your work extremely well, the articulate, well crafted work is so well done, blessings, Roy
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I think all of us have had a hand in man's downfall, an ever spiralling downward rush, order to disorder. Beautifully written atypical sonnet, the abba rhyming is indeed unusual at this time. But you express your work extremely well, the articulate, well crafted work is so well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
Comment from rama devi
Eloquent, as usual. Well rhymed and timed. Dawn and upon - creative slant rhyme!
Good sonnet structure too.
*optional suggestion:
For months(,) the sun has hovered overhead
Great alliteration and consonance of S in this stanza plus A and internal rhyme as well:
No haven safe where souls in sadness run
Once brutal slumber in respose had found
Awareness of the final fury wound
Around each dying ember of the sun.
POTENT LINES:
Man's fatal flaws are now but bitter tears
That pour in torrents from his guilty eyes;
Fine closing couplet:
Then final pain came forcefully upon
The raw reflection of an amber dawn.
Deeply reflective and intense!
Masterful sonnet!
Warmly, rd
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Eloquent, as usual. Well rhymed and timed. Dawn and upon - creative slant rhyme!
Good sonnet structure too.
*optional suggestion:
For months(,) the sun has hovered overhead
Great alliteration and consonance of S in this stanza plus A and internal rhyme as well:
No haven safe where souls in sadness run
Once brutal slumber in respose had found
Awareness of the final fury wound
Around each dying ember of the sun.
POTENT LINES:
Man's fatal flaws are now but bitter tears
That pour in torrents from his guilty eyes;
Fine closing couplet:
Then final pain came forcefully upon
The raw reflection of an amber dawn.
Deeply reflective and intense!
Masterful sonnet!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
