Impressions Of Madness
A bi-polar life, English and Spanish versions.10 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
I like this impressions of Madness but I ran out of Sixers but here goes to review it had a good theme and imagery and it flowed well with no grammar issues red well adjective content was well as well scripted measures were perfect thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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I like this impressions of Madness but I ran out of Sixers but here goes to review it had a good theme and imagery and it flowed well with no grammar issues red well adjective content was well as well scripted measures were perfect thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 24-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much Ricky. Great and flattering review my friend. tom
Comment from frierajac
Somehow the advanced editor has not made the correct accent marks over
some of the Spanish words. 'montana' needs the tilde which can be found on the symbol area of advanced editor. And some other spots, etc.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Somehow the advanced editor has not made the correct accent marks over
some of the Spanish words. 'montana' needs the tilde which can be found on the symbol area of advanced editor. And some other spots, etc.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thank you frierajac. I will correct. Great review. tom
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. We cannot say someone else are naf because if their behaviour. What us normality to me, may be madness for another and vice versa.
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. We cannot say someone else are naf because if their behaviour. What us normality to me, may be madness for another and vice versa.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2017
Comment from Paul Bownas
I absolutely enjoyed the rhythm and flow of this poetry. The words that you used also pleased me greatly, as so much of modern poetry appears to contain swear words, bad language, and terrible grammar. After some of those, this was a delight, thank you!
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I absolutely enjoyed the rhythm and flow of this poetry. The words that you used also pleased me greatly, as so much of modern poetry appears to contain swear words, bad language, and terrible grammar. After some of those, this was a delight, thank you!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2017
Comment from tocurie
A chilling story to me about sinking into that state of consciousness and possibly aware of the process. Very good post. The Spanish version was a nice touch. Well done!
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A chilling story to me about sinking into that state of consciousness and possibly aware of the process. Very good post. The Spanish version was a nice touch. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
Comment from kahpot
Wow this is a wonderful poem, on a very difficult subject for some to understand, you have made me understand though, very well done and in two languages, very clever author****kahpot
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
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Wow this is a wonderful poem, on a very difficult subject for some to understand, you have made me understand though, very well done and in two languages, very clever author****kahpot
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
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Thank you kahpot. I am honored my friend. tom
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Bipolar life in dance with smoke
(translucent trend in lunacy)
is shared illusion's buried yoke;
a veil of failed transparency. ' As a bipolar sufferer this really spoke to me. A completely outstanding poem as ever.Well done this is tremendous. Kind rgeards Meia xx
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Bipolar life in dance with smoke
(translucent trend in lunacy)
is shared illusion's buried yoke;
a veil of failed transparency. ' As a bipolar sufferer this really spoke to me. A completely outstanding poem as ever.Well done this is tremendous. Kind rgeards Meia xx
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A chilling write about depression and the strong effects, we are all hanging on a thread but some cope better than others, life can crush as well as please, very clever that it is in Spanish too! Very much liked both versions, love Dolly x
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A chilling write about depression and the strong effects, we are all hanging on a thread but some cope better than others, life can crush as well as please, very clever that it is in Spanish too! Very much liked both versions, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Impressions Of Madness is a nice poem of bi-polar life.
Unless a person lives it there is no way to know what it feels like but I think that this might come close.
Well rhymed, well done.
Sharon
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Impressions Of Madness is a nice poem of bi-polar life.
Unless a person lives it there is no way to know what it feels like but I think that this might come close.
Well rhymed, well done.
Sharon
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
Comment from rama devi
NO ablo Espanol, alas, but it sounds wonderful read aloud
As usual, well timed and rhymed with fine phonetics, especially alliteration (like W in first stanza--well done!
I am confused by the parenthesis ending what seems to me to be too soon here:
Born filled with primal fear inbred
(a wingless mountain butterfly)
who waited trapped by wretched dread,
within mad vision graves, to die.
Shouldn't it be:
Born filled with primal fear inbred
(a wingless mountain butterfly
who waited, trapped by wretched dread,
within mad vision graves, to die.)
Or, perhaps no parenthesis is required at all?
Great alliteration of B here, and note one spag:
A body bent by rhythmic birth
sucked marrow out of bone and brine
as wounds leaked blood back into earth(,)
for earth gives refuge to Divine.
Superb metaphor, alliteration of F and S and fantastic rhymes:
The fragile cuts were foul and spent
but no stitch thrown seemed obvious;
its fabric labored, torn and rent
by images grown spurious.
Great rhymes and fine flow:
And this we carry to our graves
in extant bliss of ignorance.
No worry worth the time it saves
before the black of permanence.
Awesome closing AHA and superbly rhymed and delivered (and the parenthesis works well here):
Bipolar life in dance with smoke
(translucent trend in lunacy)
is shared illusion's buried yoke;
a veil of failed transparency.
Bravo. Another powerful poem that sounds great read aloud and delivers tons of substance too.
Warmly, rd
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NO ablo Espanol, alas, but it sounds wonderful read aloud
As usual, well timed and rhymed with fine phonetics, especially alliteration (like W in first stanza--well done!
I am confused by the parenthesis ending what seems to me to be too soon here:
Born filled with primal fear inbred
(a wingless mountain butterfly)
who waited trapped by wretched dread,
within mad vision graves, to die.
Shouldn't it be:
Born filled with primal fear inbred
(a wingless mountain butterfly
who waited, trapped by wretched dread,
within mad vision graves, to die.)
Or, perhaps no parenthesis is required at all?
Great alliteration of B here, and note one spag:
A body bent by rhythmic birth
sucked marrow out of bone and brine
as wounds leaked blood back into earth(,)
for earth gives refuge to Divine.
Superb metaphor, alliteration of F and S and fantastic rhymes:
The fragile cuts were foul and spent
but no stitch thrown seemed obvious;
its fabric labored, torn and rent
by images grown spurious.
Great rhymes and fine flow:
And this we carry to our graves
in extant bliss of ignorance.
No worry worth the time it saves
before the black of permanence.
Awesome closing AHA and superbly rhymed and delivered (and the parenthesis works well here):
Bipolar life in dance with smoke
(translucent trend in lunacy)
is shared illusion's buried yoke;
a veil of failed transparency.
Bravo. Another powerful poem that sounds great read aloud and delivers tons of substance too.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 21-Nov-2017
