Nose Knows
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Now that daylight savings time has ended, it's getting dark with I walk my dachshund. I have decided it's not safe and am trying to find another time during my day to walk Harley. It's dark when I leave in the mornings too. Oh my!!! We have had cougars in our area. I really enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Now that daylight savings time has ended, it's getting dark with I walk my dachshund. I have decided it's not safe and am trying to find another time during my day to walk Harley. It's dark when I leave in the mornings too. Oh my!!! We have had cougars in our area. I really enjoyed reading your poem. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Barbara, now that is dark before seven and after six it constrains the times I can walk alone or walk my dog in a known mountain lion range.
Thank you for giving my poem its first six star review and for wishing me good luck in the contest.
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hello Sis Cat,
Nice name! I like your sonnet under Humour Poetry. Dogs are great at sniffing out a predator, I lost five dogs and a litter to a leopard awhile back. It is heart rendering to lose them especially when they are like your family.
But why did you choose this style for a contest? No worries it is good.
Wish you the best in the contest
Sylvia
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Hello Sis Cat,
Nice name! I like your sonnet under Humour Poetry. Dogs are great at sniffing out a predator, I lost five dogs and a litter to a leopard awhile back. It is heart rendering to lose them especially when they are like your family.
But why did you choose this style for a contest? No worries it is good.
Wish you the best in the contest
Sylvia
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Sylvia, for your review. Yes, dogs are not only great at sniffing out predators, but at sniffing out poems. Once Mina got a toe hold on this poem, she took over. I chose the Petrarchan style because I wanted to challenge myself to write a different style of sonnet than the Shakespearian sonnet. I then found a rhyming contest where my poem would best fit.
Thank you for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from DR DIP
Very interesting rhyme scheme Andre, you have done a very good job of this rhyme scheme though I think it is a difficult one to use in a contest I feel
I think a more standard rhyme scheme such as AABB or ABAB or ABCB would have been more prudent for a contest but that is just me.
Good luck in the competition
dip
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Very interesting rhyme scheme Andre, you have done a very good job of this rhyme scheme though I think it is a difficult one to use in a contest I feel
I think a more standard rhyme scheme such as AABB or ABAB or ABCB would have been more prudent for a contest but that is just me.
Good luck in the competition
dip
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Dip, for your review and comments. This particular contest was open to any particular rhyme scheme while another was strictly ABAB ABAB. I am more concerned about challenging myself than at competing. The form I wrote was not new because poets have been writing Petrarchan sonnets for eight hundred years, but it was new to me. I will continue to challenge myself by writing classic forms of rhymed poems. I also hope to expand the knowledge of poets ho only know of ABAB.
Thank you also for wishing me good luck in the contest.
Comment from robyn corum
Andre,
This is a tremendously well-crafted sonnet. I love the message, too. Sometimes it seems that our domesticated animals still show those signs of wildness - eager to see what's out there in the world, though it may be to their detriment. *smile* They NEED to check things out, it seems. haha! Great job!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Andre,
This is a tremendously well-crafted sonnet. I love the message, too. Sometimes it seems that our domesticated animals still show those signs of wildness - eager to see what's out there in the world, though it may be to their detriment. *smile* They NEED to check things out, it seems. haha! Great job!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Robyn, dogs need to check things out. It's hard to stop mine when she has a nose to smell something. Thank you for your review and for calling this a well-crafted sonnet.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Sis, a very well written Petrarchan sonnet. Interesting subject, but listed as Humour puzzles me LOL. If faced with a cougar I don't think I'd be able to fight - freeze maybe. You go from puma to cougar - I read they are the same animal - I did not know that. It is an interesting story and I like that you write it as an actual experience. Good consistent rhyme and necessary for the poetry form. Good luck and Warm regards, Dorothy
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Hi Sis, a very well written Petrarchan sonnet. Interesting subject, but listed as Humour puzzles me LOL. If faced with a cougar I don't think I'd be able to fight - freeze maybe. You go from puma to cougar - I read they are the same animal - I did not know that. It is an interesting story and I like that you write it as an actual experience. Good consistent rhyme and necessary for the poetry form. Good luck and Warm regards, Dorothy
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Dorothy, for your review and comments. I have changed my poem's designation from Humour to Nature. Yes, I was surprised to learn that cougar, panther, and mountain lion are the same animal. By using an actual experience, I included factual details I would not have considered if I had made a rhymed poem up in my head: Mina, eucalyptus trees, chimney smoke, Pinole . . . By using real details, one reviewer who used to live in Pinole wrote "I know exactly the place you are writing about."
Thank you for your review.
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Hi Sis, How amazing that someone knew just where you were writing about. Also forgot to mention the clever title 'Nose Knows' - good use of homophone. Dorothy
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Thanks. My dog agrees.
Comment from Cedar
I enjoyed reading your contest entry very much. Your rhyming and meter are excellent.
However, when you mentioned a mountain lion being seen close to your home frightened me for your safety. I live in an area where there is a heavy population of these cats and they are very huge and deadly. So, be extra careful.
Good luck in the contest...Bill
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry very much. Your rhyming and meter are excellent.
However, when you mentioned a mountain lion being seen close to your home frightened me for your safety. I live in an area where there is a heavy population of these cats and they are very huge and deadly. So, be extra careful.
Good luck in the contest...Bill
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Cedar, I will have to take additional precautions because I often walk at dusk and dawn--a time mountain lions hunt. I may have to stop the nocturnal exercise until daylight savings time ends and I have more daylight in the morning and evening.
Thank you for your review and for wishing me good luck in the contest.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
I am glad you tried this new form. Your content is very interesting to me. (I don't have a dog, but I have two cats and LOVE animals in general.) You mention Pinole in the poem. Is it the Pinole adjacent to the town of Hercules? I used to live there for 5 years and taught at the school there for 15 years. I know I worried about the wild raccoons when my cat was out of doors. I am not surprised that a cougar was spotted in that locale.
Now, about your poem. The first part is excellent and I would have given it 6 stars, but the second part was a let down. If you were to rework it this would be a magnificent poem. (The line "If cougars bite defend and fight" distracts from the quality of the writing.
All in all, you have the potential for a truly GREAT POEM.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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I am glad you tried this new form. Your content is very interesting to me. (I don't have a dog, but I have two cats and LOVE animals in general.) You mention Pinole in the poem. Is it the Pinole adjacent to the town of Hercules? I used to live there for 5 years and taught at the school there for 15 years. I know I worried about the wild raccoons when my cat was out of doors. I am not surprised that a cougar was spotted in that locale.
Now, about your poem. The first part is excellent and I would have given it 6 stars, but the second part was a let down. If you were to rework it this would be a magnificent poem. (The line "If cougars bite defend and fight" distracts from the quality of the writing.
All in all, you have the potential for a truly GREAT POEM.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Nancy, it is that Pinole. I live in Hercules and the mountain lion was spotted on Pinole Ridge which borders our two cities. Thank you for your review. Most reviewers like you have found the first part to be excellent in imagery and mood. I will take a look at revising the line you noted to keep its tone to the quality of the rest of my poem.
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I am excited to know someone, via FS, who lives in Hercules. I spent my last full time teaching at Hanna Ranch Elementary, primarily 5th grade. Such happy and growing years. Bless you, dear sis cat.
Comment from Heather Knight
This made me smile because my dog always walks with her head down, smelling the ground.
The bit about the pumas is really scary...
Thanks for sharing this lovely poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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This made me smile because my dog always walks with her head down, smelling the ground.
The bit about the pumas is really scary...
Thanks for sharing this lovely poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Maria, our dogs walk with their sniffing noses to the ground. Yes, pumas are scary and are best not to be approached. Thank you for your review and for wishing me good luck in the contest.
Comment from dragonpoet
You're dog smelled the cat so he snarled. I can't see fighting a mountain lion.
I like the image you have of the dog sniffing everything around. Hopefully the puma is too far away to smell. At one time a several years ago we had signs posted to trees and street lamps to always have your dog leashed and keep small dogs and cats inside because of coyotes.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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You're dog smelled the cat so he snarled. I can't see fighting a mountain lion.
I like the image you have of the dog sniffing everything around. Hopefully the puma is too far away to smell. At one time a several years ago we had signs posted to trees and street lamps to always have your dog leashed and keep small dogs and cats inside because of coyotes.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Joan, Wile E. Coyote. I never let my dog off leash outdoors anyhow. I may carry a whistle and heavy flashlight to use as a club during our night walks. Thank you for your review and for wishing contest luck. I'll keep writing.
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My pleasure. Then why walk at night if it is so dangerous. Just let him/her out in the yard at night.
Joan
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If I had a yard, Joan, I would not even let my Chihuahua out at night. I once read an account of a pet rabbit that was attacked on the back porch. In addition to coyotes and pumas on the ground, hawks, owls, and eagles watch from the trees surrounding my home. No, Mina, you're staying inside.
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Wow, you live in a area with a lot of dangerous animals to your small dog.
Joan
Comment from Boogienights
Aren't dogs great? I really enjoyed your poem very much, it was interesting to read. We have bobcats in minnesota, my husband saw one spring up into a tree once while delivering papers. It's kind of scary to think of wild animals roaming around like that. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Aren't dogs great? I really enjoyed your poem very much, it was interesting to read. We have bobcats in minnesota, my husband saw one spring up into a tree once while delivering papers. It's kind of scary to think of wild animals roaming around like that. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Boogienights, for your review. It is scary having bobcats and mountain lions around, but we are invading their territory and not they ours. Yes, dogs are great if you listen to their skills and instinct.
