Nose Knows
Dog Adventures72 total reviews
Comment from pbomar1115
The poem is skillfully written in a style I've not come across. Mostly because I not much of a poet writer. However, I am appreciating them more these days. By the way, you should be fearful of that roaming cougar. You and your dog could have an unpleasant conference. Brilliant poem.
Phillip
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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The poem is skillfully written in a style I've not come across. Mostly because I not much of a poet writer. However, I am appreciating them more these days. By the way, you should be fearful of that roaming cougar. You and your dog could have an unpleasant conference. Brilliant poem.
Phillip
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Philip, while the mountain lion seen in San Francisco was captured two weeks ago, the cougar seen within a mile of my home still roams. Thank you for your review and for wishing my dog and me safety.
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You're welcome, Sis Cat.
Phillip
Comment from rama devi
Excellent rhymes and internal rhymes and slant rhymes in this well penned work, my friend. What a walk!
I once saw a puma in the road in Northern California (a 17-mile stretch of dirt road in the hills). It's an exciting experience.
Your poem captures the details nicely.
No nits or suggestions.
Enjoyed,
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Excellent rhymes and internal rhymes and slant rhymes in this well penned work, my friend. What a walk!
I once saw a puma in the road in Northern California (a 17-mile stretch of dirt road in the hills). It's an exciting experience.
Your poem captures the details nicely.
No nits or suggestions.
Enjoyed,
Love,
rd
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Rama, for your glowing review. I am glad there are no nits or suggestions, although after your review I changed this line:
If cougars bite, defend yourself and fight.
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Don't run, but face them, yell, and boost your height.
Yes, pumas are amazing animals.
Thanks.
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That's a good edit.
Thanks for tour kind response, my friend.
Best,
rd
Comment from Angela VA
Good dog! I'm glad you followed her lead, since she obviously knew a retreat was in order. My mom's dog is not so smart - she wanted out of Mom's house to chase a bear!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Good dog! I'm glad you followed her lead, since she obviously knew a retreat was in order. My mom's dog is not so smart - she wanted out of Mom's house to chase a bear!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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What, to chase a bear! Bad dog. At least she was being protective. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Hitcher
Yea, I think you made the right decision mate, I don't see a Chihuahua saving the day and fending off a mountain lion LOL. I enjoyed your Nose knows Petrarchan sonnet ( don't believe i have tried one of them) good on ya mate... impressive! Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yea, I think you made the right decision mate, I don't see a Chihuahua saving the day and fending off a mountain lion LOL. I enjoyed your Nose knows Petrarchan sonnet ( don't believe i have tried one of them) good on ya mate... impressive! Good luck.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Hitcher, for your review. No, I don't my Chihuahua would have fended off the mountain lion. It is best I follow her lead and retreat.
Do write a Petrarchan sonnet, mate. They're fun. Cheers and thank you for wishing me the best of luck.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A good Rhyming Poem contest entry with a good and clear story.
We should always listen to the wisdom of our dogs. They have a far better knowledge of what is going on around us than we do.
Who is protecting who?
Sharon
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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A good Rhyming Poem contest entry with a good and clear story.
We should always listen to the wisdom of our dogs. They have a far better knowledge of what is going on around us than we do.
Who is protecting who?
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Sharon, my little Chihuahua protected me that night by warning me to retreat. Thank you for your review of my poem about the wisdom of dogs.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Interesting the way you try new rhyme schemes. I love your walk through the park with your dog and the amazing scent. Police say walking through city at night is dangerous, and they are right. WELL DONE. lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Interesting the way you try new rhyme schemes. I love your walk through the park with your dog and the amazing scent. Police say walking through city at night is dangerous, and they are right. WELL DONE. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Liberty Justice, for your review. Yes, I love challenging myself to write old rhymed forms of poetry. As for walking the city before dawn and after sunset, that is a challenge I may have to give up until daylight savings end. Thanks again.
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Please check mine out, also, and books. lol liberty justice
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I'm sure your little dog could smell the cougar. Good job on the style of the sonnet. Everything is in great order. Your lines flow well with a great story. This style was well-chosen to tell this adventure. You are right to follow your dog--she is smart & protective. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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I'm sure your little dog could smell the cougar. Good job on the style of the sonnet. Everything is in great order. Your lines flow well with a great story. This style was well-chosen to tell this adventure. You are right to follow your dog--she is smart & protective. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Jan, my dog is smart and protective. Thank you for your review and for saying I did a good job with my sonnet.
Comment from lauralumummu
I like this, a good story in poem form. The rhyme is cute and flow well. Dogs are amazing and so protective, they know more than us at times. I glad you listened to your little dog. All the best, Laura
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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I like this, a good story in poem form. The rhyme is cute and flow well. Dogs are amazing and so protective, they know more than us at times. I glad you listened to your little dog. All the best, Laura
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Laura, dogs know more than we do. That's why we must listen to them and follow their instincts. Thank you for your review and for wishing my poem the best.
Comment from Oliveforlove
I like the rhythm and the internal rhymes - they keep you focussed on the main ideas throughout the poem. The first stanza was full of imagery and I could feel the sense of anticipation that Mina was experiencing due to the different smells - there was also a sense of fear developing. The second part explained the events, though I liked the uncertainty more. Great job
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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I like the rhythm and the internal rhymes - they keep you focussed on the main ideas throughout the poem. The first stanza was full of imagery and I could feel the sense of anticipation that Mina was experiencing due to the different smells - there was also a sense of fear developing. The second part explained the events, though I liked the uncertainty more. Great job
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Oliveforlove, for your review and analysis of my poem.
Comment from Pantygynt
I liked this tale and felt as much dread as poor little Mina. When you are the size of a Chihuahua I reckon the world must be a scary place especially when you have a dog's ability to scent danger.
The sonnet has really good unforced metre and flows really well.
I am confused by though the term "reversed sestet". With your rhyme scheme of ccdede that would mean a normal sestet of ededcc. Now, while the Petrarchan sestet is noted for its flexibility of rhyme scheme, the one thing that must NEVER happen is a concluding rhyming couplet. The Italian form never ended in this way. There seems to me to be nothing wrong with it the way round you have it, but it certainly can't be a reversed sestet.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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I liked this tale and felt as much dread as poor little Mina. When you are the size of a Chihuahua I reckon the world must be a scary place especially when you have a dog's ability to scent danger.
The sonnet has really good unforced metre and flows really well.
I am confused by though the term "reversed sestet". With your rhyme scheme of ccdede that would mean a normal sestet of ededcc. Now, while the Petrarchan sestet is noted for its flexibility of rhyme scheme, the one thing that must NEVER happen is a concluding rhyming couplet. The Italian form never ended in this way. There seems to me to be nothing wrong with it the way round you have it, but it certainly can't be a reversed sestet.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Jim, for your review and analysis of my Petrarchan sonnet. I deleted the phrase "reversed sestet" from my author's notes. I love the flexibility of the Petrarchan sonnet. Thanks also for noting that my meter is unforced and flows well.
