Nose Knows
Dog Adventures72 total reviews
Comment from Thal1959
Very good, Andre. Besides, if a mountain lion confronted you, you could always throw the Chihuahua at him and run for your life while its chewing! (Yes, I don't like Chihuahuas; canine rats, I call them. Besides, I don't consider any animal a dog if you can hurt it with a Frisbee!)
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2017
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Very good, Andre. Besides, if a mountain lion confronted you, you could always throw the Chihuahua at him and run for your life while its chewing! (Yes, I don't like Chihuahuas; canine rats, I call them. Besides, I don't consider any animal a dog if you can hurt it with a Frisbee!)
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2017
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Yes, Thal1959, I was going to use a line about swinging my Chihuahua on her leash as if she was the spiked ball on a medieval mace weapon, but I dropped that line. You have a wicked sense of humor about "canine rats." Thank you for your review.
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I can't help it, Andre. There are just too many miniature pooches running around for my liking.
Comment from kahpot
An excellent rhyming poem, Wow a mountain Lion that must make you a bit wary to walk your dog, though your poem does say you trust her nose and follow her instinct, I liked this very much****kahpot P.S. good luck in your competition
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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An excellent rhyming poem, Wow a mountain Lion that must make you a bit wary to walk your dog, though your poem does say you trust her nose and follow her instinct, I liked this very much****kahpot P.S. good luck in your competition
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Kahpot, for your review and for wishing me luck in the competition. I am less wary about encountering mountain lions when I am with my dog than I am when I am walking along at dusk or dawn. I may have to stop the practice until daylight lengthens. Thanks.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Dogs have a very sensitive nose and you were right to follow her good and keen sense. How scary to know a mountain lion is so close to town! Your poem is atmospheric and a little chilling, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Dogs have a very sensitive nose and you were right to follow her good and keen sense. How scary to know a mountain lion is so close to town! Your poem is atmospheric and a little chilling, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Dolly, while the mountain lion captured in San Francisco got much of the news two Fridays ago, another mountain lion roams in my neighborhood across the Bay. Thank you for your review. I am glad I followed my keen sense.
Comment from Wabigoon
Sis--
Reads a little "clunky" to me, maybe some of the rhymes forced the better way to say it. Interesting episode to try to describe, though. We have wolves, bears where I live -- the dogs have chased bears who seem more willing to flee than fight. Porcupines on the other hand -- whew those quills can be expensive to extract!
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Sis--
Reads a little "clunky" to me, maybe some of the rhymes forced the better way to say it. Interesting episode to try to describe, though. We have wolves, bears where I live -- the dogs have chased bears who seem more willing to flee than fight. Porcupines on the other hand -- whew those quills can be expensive to extract!
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Jeff, for your review and comments on my rhymes. Even though Petrarchan sonnets are written more than Shakespearian sonnets, some reviewers were caught off guard by their unusual rhyme structure because they seldom read them here. Yes, they did require work to create. Watch out for those porcupines!
Comment from LIJ Red
My Dalmation loved to orbit around me, running like the wind, something he could do all day. One day in the National Forest wilderness area, he came to heel and
walked very quietly. A huge mob of feral hogs were ripping a grassy campsite apart like plows for bulbs and bugs. We decided to hop in the truck and ride. I think you have done an excellent Italian sonnet.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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My Dalmation loved to orbit around me, running like the wind, something he could do all day. One day in the National Forest wilderness area, he came to heel and
walked very quietly. A huge mob of feral hogs were ripping a grassy campsite apart like plows for bulbs and bugs. We decided to hop in the truck and ride. I think you have done an excellent Italian sonnet.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thank you, LIJ Red , for your review of my first Italian sonnet. I had a lot of fun writing it and reading the story of your Dalmatian.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well done, Andre, and I mean first, for allowing Mina to lead you inside! *smile*
Now, for this wonderful poem - this is most certainly not the easiest of poetry forms, yet you make it look easy. I LOVED it! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Well done, Andre, and I mean first, for allowing Mina to lead you inside! *smile*
Now, for this wonderful poem - this is most certainly not the easiest of poetry forms, yet you make it look easy. I LOVED it! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Dawn, a Petrarchan sonnet is not an easy form, but I am glad I succeeded in writing my first one. Yes, I listen to my Chihuahua when she "says" we must go back inside. Thank you for your review and for wishing me contest good luck.
Comment from doggymad
This was well written and perfectly describes the reaction of a dog on high alert.
I don't think I would be hanging around to yell at a puma, and it is good that you took your cue from Mina and turned back.
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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This was well written and perfectly describes the reaction of a dog on high alert.
I don't think I would be hanging around to yell at a puma, and it is good that you took your cue from Mina and turned back.
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Freda, I studied the Puma Conservatory website about what to do if you encounter a puma. You don't run because the animals are designed for chasing deer, a source of food. Instead, you stand your ground, face them, yell, wave your arms, throw rocks, and make yourself appear larger. Thank you for your review of my poem about my dog on high alert.
Comment from jacobpaulpatchen
What a challenging form. Very well done. I don't think the action or imagery was lost in the structure, which can happen in form confined poems. I enjoyed the tension and escalating drama. Thank you for an enjoyable poem.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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What a challenging form. Very well done. I don't think the action or imagery was lost in the structure, which can happen in form confined poems. I enjoyed the tension and escalating drama. Thank you for an enjoyable poem.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, jacobpaulpatchen, the Petrarchan sonnet is a more challenging form to write than the Shakespearian but it is well worth my effort. I am glad it captured action, tension, and drama. Thank you for your review.
Comment from RGstar
SIX STAR Award
Proud of you here, Sis Cat. Always remember to concentrate on what you are saying, what you want to tell the reader, rather than the emphasis being on the order of the long short vocals.
You see, this is what a lot of writers forget when writing sonnets or its form, they think, getting the formula correct is some kind of test or exam, and by doing so, the poem has automatic status of excellence...which is often the reason for disappointment, or some authors feel their work superior to others.
Well let me tell you, that is so far from the truth, they might not have written the form at all.
Remember the da-DUM is created as to enhance the sound, the smoothness of release, the vocals interacting, not as an exam.
When authors believe in their concept rather than the praise of difficulty, they will write better sonnets, for it is the same rule for any form. Your words, the narrative, the soul of the write, beauty and the exchange with the receiver, is what makes a great write... da-Dum enhances the output and gives a base for a better order in which you can say what you want to say, but the words have to be well chosen as if that was not in thought, for you to be able to connect.
So first, think about what you want to say, and find the da Dum in saying it...as close to how you would say it without...then you have a great chance in communicating with your listener.
Apart from "glimmered" ( past tense or past participle:) which I am not feeling in that form, where it is; 'glimmering' would have been the choice (adjective) because it is both noun and adjective. Yes, it will have three syllables, so I am not sure how it would fit in, but this is an example of getting in a word to suit the form, rather than a word natural in its induction.
There is a couple of places I sensed that, but you got through, just.
But let me tell you something, if I had a six, It would be yours, for you have taken a form that you are not used to and gave a great account, with aura and generally, good adjectives working well with your theme.
And! I still like the way you incorporate the everyday values which, for me, is your core signature.
You have developed in the art of writing poetry since you have been here, and that is good to see. Warms my soul. I like to see anyone doing well, especially those humble whose path is to do so.
Bravo.
Best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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SIX STAR Award
Proud of you here, Sis Cat. Always remember to concentrate on what you are saying, what you want to tell the reader, rather than the emphasis being on the order of the long short vocals.
You see, this is what a lot of writers forget when writing sonnets or its form, they think, getting the formula correct is some kind of test or exam, and by doing so, the poem has automatic status of excellence...which is often the reason for disappointment, or some authors feel their work superior to others.
Well let me tell you, that is so far from the truth, they might not have written the form at all.
Remember the da-DUM is created as to enhance the sound, the smoothness of release, the vocals interacting, not as an exam.
When authors believe in their concept rather than the praise of difficulty, they will write better sonnets, for it is the same rule for any form. Your words, the narrative, the soul of the write, beauty and the exchange with the receiver, is what makes a great write... da-Dum enhances the output and gives a base for a better order in which you can say what you want to say, but the words have to be well chosen as if that was not in thought, for you to be able to connect.
So first, think about what you want to say, and find the da Dum in saying it...as close to how you would say it without...then you have a great chance in communicating with your listener.
Apart from "glimmered" ( past tense or past participle:) which I am not feeling in that form, where it is; 'glimmering' would have been the choice (adjective) because it is both noun and adjective. Yes, it will have three syllables, so I am not sure how it would fit in, but this is an example of getting in a word to suit the form, rather than a word natural in its induction.
There is a couple of places I sensed that, but you got through, just.
But let me tell you something, if I had a six, It would be yours, for you have taken a form that you are not used to and gave a great account, with aura and generally, good adjectives working well with your theme.
And! I still like the way you incorporate the everyday values which, for me, is your core signature.
You have developed in the art of writing poetry since you have been here, and that is good to see. Warms my soul. I like to see anyone doing well, especially those humble whose path is to do so.
Bravo.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Oh, thank you, RG, for giving my first Petrarchan sonnet its best review. Your words are passionate and detailed, as well as knowledgeable. I am going to copy and save your review to use as a future reference as I continue exploring more rhymed forms, especially the old ones. I believe in your wisdom and experience. I changed "glimmered" to "glinting." Your review warms my heart and encourages me to write more. Thank you. Thank you. Thank you.
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You keep going my friend. You're a star
Comment from Codylee
I loved this poem! Its descriptive and detailed. It's like we were there together. The vocabulary is unique in its own. I like your range sometimes I struggle for them. But you're a master!
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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I loved this poem! Its descriptive and detailed. It's like we were there together. The vocabulary is unique in its own. I like your range sometimes I struggle for them. But you're a master!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Yes, Codylee, in reading my poem again, I love the rich, descriptive, and detailed language. I am glad you loved my poem! Thank you for your review and for calling me a word master.
