Comment from Oliveforlove

Excellent

I loved the part about the grandfather smithy and the sparks flying off the anvil - it gave the object a sense of coming to life. The only part I'd question is the 'falling to bits' - these are so well made that doesn't seem possible - and the 'sits' and 'bits' rhyme is weaker than any of the rest of the poem where the vocabulary is at a much higher level.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017

Thanks for a great review and interesting suggestions ..zanya

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

Well done with your Acrostic Object poem entry.
It tells a story and I love the reminiscence of grandpa the smithy.
Very nice.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017

Thanks for such an encouraging review zanya

Comment from writerjen

Excellent

I really liked this acrostic poem. Really well written, easy to follow the storyline. Descriptive language, simple but a fun read. Nice to have lasting memories from our past. Like the picture, too. Well done.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017

Great review zanya