Senior League
Waiting for the big bowling alley in the sky9 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Love the image to illustrate your poem. I like to bowl, too, although haven't done it in a while. Keeping active is the important thing. Good job with your poem, well composed. I like the banter between the bowlers. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2017
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Love the image to illustrate your poem. I like to bowl, too, although haven't done it in a while. Keeping active is the important thing. Good job with your poem, well composed. I like the banter between the bowlers. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the read and the comments.
Comment from smileycloud
good poetry
a great version of YAY for the contest
I like the above ground comment
I think that your poem depicts everyday life for all who want to still get out there and be the person they have always been but a lot slower and more painful but still the same person
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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good poetry
a great version of YAY for the contest
I like the above ground comment
I think that your poem depicts everyday life for all who want to still get out there and be the person they have always been but a lot slower and more painful but still the same person
have a smiley day
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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You got it. Thanks for the read and your cogent comments. Smiley back to you.
Comment from Brigitte Elko
This is a great commentary free verse poem entry. All the rules of the prompt were followed. I believe you scored a "strike" with one. The picture is great. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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This is a great commentary free verse poem entry. All the rules of the prompt were followed. I believe you scored a "strike" with one. The picture is great. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 19-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thanks, I wish I could get more of those Xs. I usually have to settle for a spare /, if I'm lucky. Appreciate your read and review.
Comment from lyenochka
Loved the humor you used here, Harry! I especially liked the names of the teams. I don't know how much is fictional and how much is made up for the contest, but it does sound very true to life.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Loved the humor you used here, Harry! I especially liked the names of the teams. I don't know how much is fictional and how much is made up for the contest, but it does sound very true to life.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Some of both. Thanks for the read and your review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the YAY! I'm Getting Old writing prompt.
On one hand I say, good for you for keeping up the exercise and getting out there.
On the other I say, maybe your group should look at starting a cribbage club.
I know I'm not up to bowling anymore, cards is more my speed these days.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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This is a good entry for the YAY! I'm Getting Old writing prompt.
On one hand I say, good for you for keeping up the exercise and getting out there.
On the other I say, maybe your group should look at starting a cribbage club.
I know I'm not up to bowling anymore, cards is more my speed these days.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the read. The the thrill of completion still lingers
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a well-written eye-opening, realistic poem about aging. I did find the team names comical. Think I like squeaky bones the best. So what if your balls are lighter, and don't speed down the alley the way they used to, you guys are together, having fun and that's all that really matters, right? Great job on your poem.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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This is a well-written eye-opening, realistic poem about aging. I did find the team names comical. Think I like squeaky bones the best. So what if your balls are lighter, and don't speed down the alley the way they used to, you guys are together, having fun and that's all that really matters, right? Great job on your poem.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you for your read and your comments. I agree, we still have that desire to be competitive although not as fiery as it once was.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there;
Thank you for sharing this free verse poetry about aging. I liked your metaphor of the bowling alley in the sky and bowling with the angels,
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Hi there;
Thank you for sharing this free verse poetry about aging. I liked your metaphor of the bowling alley in the sky and bowling with the angels,
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the read and comments.
Comment from RodG
Well, at least the Speaker here is still able to bowl with friends and that's what counts. I like his light-hearted tone as he describes why they cheer now and what their team names are. Easy to visualize these team members sitting there as they wait their turn to lob those lighter balls.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Well, at least the Speaker here is still able to bowl with friends and that's what counts. I like his light-hearted tone as he describes why they cheer now and what their team names are. Easy to visualize these team members sitting there as they wait their turn to lob those lighter balls.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the read and the review. Your time is appreciated. Yes, about the speaker, there still is the thrill of competition. Of course, winning is better than losing.
Comment from c_lucas
Bowling is a young person's sport. There is a time when the participant know it is time to quit. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Bowling is a young person's sport. There is a time when the participant know it is time to quit. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Yes, you are right. But it is so hard to give up. Thanks for the read.
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Learn to bowl on your computer.
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Nice suggestion. Tried We bowling, but not as much fun.
