I am OLD and TIRED.
An Acrostic.28 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
This is a very good entry into this contest about getting old. Imoressively writtem in a very good Acrostic formatted poem. You are certainly right, we are all getting older, and its no fun.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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This is a very good entry into this contest about getting old. Imoressively writtem in a very good Acrostic formatted poem. You are certainly right, we are all getting older, and its no fun.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday.
Comment from Brigitte Elko
You followed the prompt to a tee and made this a credible entry for the contest. Aging is a difficult subject to write about because it eliminates no one. Your message is perfectly clear. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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You followed the prompt to a tee and made this a credible entry for the contest. Aging is a difficult subject to write about because it eliminates no one. Your message is perfectly clear. Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday.
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Have a safe and blessed weekend.
A very "old",
brigitte
Comment from Dutchie
Hi Ine. Yeah, welcome to the club!!! Well everything starts at seventy I think... I feel things I never felt before. Swollen feet in summer,when I turn around in bed it hurts. Not too bad, but still... I'm getting old I think.. Nice poem about getting old and the consequences of it. Fia
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Hi Ine. Yeah, welcome to the club!!! Well everything starts at seventy I think... I feel things I never felt before. Swollen feet in summer,when I turn around in bed it hurts. Not too bad, but still... I'm getting old I think.. Nice poem about getting old and the consequences of it. Fia
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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hanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.
Comment from smileycloud
yay
old is old is old is old is what your poem says I think and you have expressed that very well indeed
philosophical poetry is very interesting but difficult to cover all bases as philosophy tends to run and hide in between the pages of a text book
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here you have done a very fine job of delivering one version of old
good luck in the contest
good entry indeed
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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yay
old is old is old is old is what your poem says I think and you have expressed that very well indeed
philosophical poetry is very interesting but difficult to cover all bases as philosophy tends to run and hide in between the pages of a text book
BUT
here you have done a very fine job of delivering one version of old
good luck in the contest
good entry indeed
have a smiley day
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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hanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written acrostic poem. The acrosric worked well until the last part supposed to spell tired.
T I E D O
(T)ired is also weird
(I)t can come with several ailments
(E)verybody, no-no, can acquire one
(D)o you know why I am extremely tired? (O)verwork, illnesses- take your pick.
Eg T I R E D
(T)ired is also weird
(I)t can come with several ailments
(R)esting more and work less
(E)verybody, no-no, can acquire one
(D)o you know why I am extremely tired?
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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A very well-written acrostic poem. The acrosric worked well until the last part supposed to spell tired.
T I E D O
(T)ired is also weird
(I)t can come with several ailments
(E)verybody, no-no, can acquire one
(D)o you know why I am extremely tired? (O)verwork, illnesses- take your pick.
Eg T I R E D
(T)ired is also weird
(I)t can come with several ailments
(R)esting more and work less
(E)verybody, no-no, can acquire one
(D)o you know why I am extremely tired?
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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hanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Ine. This is a good piece of writing. It is definitely free style and the points made in each stanza are clever and written with force and conviction. Good luck. This is a beauty! xoxo Wii
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Hi Ine. This is a good piece of writing. It is definitely free style and the points made in each stanza are clever and written with force and conviction. Good luck. This is a beauty! xoxo Wii
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
What a neat acrostic and so very well done making it flow like a speech explaining the aging and what it takes with it. Very different
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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What a neat acrostic and so very well done making it flow like a speech explaining the aging and what it takes with it. Very different
Comment Written 16-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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hanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Last weekend I had a co worker tell me that she hoped I didn't live to the day of retirement. To me she's telling me I need an early death. I was shocked and stunned. She told me that there are a lot of aches and pains that come with being old. I get that but you don't tell someone you don't want them to live to retire. I put my money away, I'm saving, I may be old and tired but I want to retire. Try to stay positive and enjoy the less painful and more energy days.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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Last weekend I had a co worker tell me that she hoped I didn't live to the day of retirement. To me she's telling me I need an early death. I was shocked and stunned. She told me that there are a lot of aches and pains that come with being old. I get that but you don't tell someone you don't want them to live to retire. I put my money away, I'm saving, I may be old and tired but I want to retire. Try to stay positive and enjoy the less painful and more energy days.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely day, just before the weekend.
Comment from Irish Rain
I have days when I too, am both. Old and tired. Especially when I don't feel well. Too much hard work in my life. BUT, thank God, I'm still here, a blessing. Loved this, blessings to you!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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I have days when I too, am both. Old and tired. Especially when I don't feel well. Too much hard work in my life. BUT, thank God, I'm still here, a blessing. Loved this, blessings to you!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely day, just before the weekend.
Comment from lyenochka
Such a sad picture! The lady doesn't even have shoes in cold weather. But your poem is much more upbeat and encourages us to think how much of aging is in our minds. But while I like the clever acrostic, I wonder if the contest will allow it because it says, if it has a name, it's not "free verse."
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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Such a sad picture! The lady doesn't even have shoes in cold weather. But your poem is much more upbeat and encourages us to think how much of aging is in our minds. But while I like the clever acrostic, I wonder if the contest will allow it because it says, if it has a name, it's not "free verse."
Comment Written 16-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely day, just before the weekend.
