I am OLD and TIRED.
An Acrostic.28 total reviews
Comment from ruzu27
It is harder to get old with an illness. Thank you for sharing your ideas. I think you are right when you say "Old is when you've aged too fast" but we have to add that you take the overall age limit to compare.
For me one of your lines I like very much, "don't give in at all". I know what you mean and for me this line is most important.
Best wishes to you,
Ruth
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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It is harder to get old with an illness. Thank you for sharing your ideas. I think you are right when you say "Old is when you've aged too fast" but we have to add that you take the overall age limit to compare.
For me one of your lines I like very much, "don't give in at all". I know what you mean and for me this line is most important.
Best wishes to you,
Ruth
Comment Written 20-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great week.
Comment from writerjen
Funny acrostic. Acrostics are hard, but you seemed to do this one nicely. Unusual photo accompanying this work, not sure it is the same theme as your poem. But over all you did a great job.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Funny acrostic. Acrostics are hard, but you seemed to do this one nicely. Unusual photo accompanying this work, not sure it is the same theme as your poem. But over all you did a great job.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday.
Comment from Rasmine
I wish you all the luck in the contest.
I think it may be a bit prosey, like prose poetry; if you eliminate all the articles 'the', 'and', 'an', and so on, that may help.
I hope your husband and you are well. :)
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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I wish you all the luck in the contest.
I think it may be a bit prosey, like prose poetry; if you eliminate all the articles 'the', 'and', 'an', and so on, that may help.
I hope your husband and you are well. :)
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday.
Comment from Cedar
You have explained exactly what aging is all about. You are definitely correct when you said aging is common, there's no way around that if you're lucky enough to live into old age. Good luck Robina in the contest. Bill
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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You have explained exactly what aging is all about. You are definitely correct when you said aging is common, there's no way around that if you're lucky enough to live into old age. Good luck Robina in the contest. Bill
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Ine, this is an extremely well written poem in acrostic form. So convincingly real sounding that I am feeling sorry for you. You have worries with Robert I know. If you have to EXPLAIN your piece in author's notes, it ain't much of a piece.' Well said. However, the piece is good and I wish you luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Hi Ine, this is an extremely well written poem in acrostic form. So convincingly real sounding that I am feeling sorry for you. You have worries with Robert I know. If you have to EXPLAIN your piece in author's notes, it ain't much of a piece.' Well said. However, the piece is good and I wish you luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed weekend.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL At sixty-three and in a few months to be sixty-four, I will agree. I don't like this aging thing one little bit. My heart and brain on willing, but my body says, "you got to be kidding." I enjoyed reading your contest entry and wish you luck.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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LOL At sixty-three and in a few months to be sixty-four, I will agree. I don't like this aging thing one little bit. My heart and brain on willing, but my body says, "you got to be kidding." I enjoyed reading your contest entry and wish you luck.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed weekend.
Comment from misscookie
You captured my attention first by the photo you choose for your poem
second by the words you wrote.
I an relate to many of them.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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You captured my attention first by the photo you choose for your poem
second by the words you wrote.
I an relate to many of them.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday.
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You're very welcome, have a bless Sunday also.
until next time.
Cookie
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your acrostic poem " Iam Old and Tired". You followed the rules for this genre except for the third last line (T). You may wish to fix this beforee the close of the contest.
All the best.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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I enjoyed reading your acrostic poem " Iam Old and Tired". You followed the rules for this genre except for the third last line (T). You may wish to fix this beforee the close of the contest.
All the best.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from jenintorre
A very good free verse competition entry. Getting old certainly is no fun. I can identify with your writing, especially the tiredness. I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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A very good free verse competition entry. Getting old certainly is no fun. I can identify with your writing, especially the tiredness. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday.
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem resonated for me, because although I am seventy-four, I did not really feel old until my Peripheral Neuropathy worsened this past year. I hope you and your husband start feeling better and you get some relief from your overworking. Warm regards and best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Your poem resonated for me, because although I am seventy-four, I did not really feel old until my Peripheral Neuropathy worsened this past year. I hope you and your husband start feeling better and you get some relief from your overworking. Warm regards and best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great and blessed Sunday. I hope so, see my post today first.
