Speak now!
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Comment from Teri7
Dip, I think you did a really good job with the poem. It spokes volumes. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery with your words. Great job! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Dip, I think you did a really good job with the poem. It spokes volumes. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery with your words. Great job! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thanks as always Teri
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, DIP: Yes, this is another situation that most of us have lived long enough to experience. This is about a lover that learned the hard way, "You never know what you have until you lose it." They thought that they didn't want to be with a certain someone and once they left and moved on they realized that they should have stayed with the one they left. I don't think this has ever happened to me but certainly, anyone who I left they wished that I had not. (lol) Sorry but it's the truth. I never go backward. If we are done, we are done.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Good morning, DIP: Yes, this is another situation that most of us have lived long enough to experience. This is about a lover that learned the hard way, "You never know what you have until you lose it." They thought that they didn't want to be with a certain someone and once they left and moved on they realized that they should have stayed with the one they left. I don't think this has ever happened to me but certainly, anyone who I left they wished that I had not. (lol) Sorry but it's the truth. I never go backward. If we are done, we are done.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2017
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Thankyou as always Tier I am currently on a surfing holiday in the middle of the Indian ocean and haven't had the chance to post much
dip
Comment from sandy montgomery
One of the things I find endearing about you and your poetry is that you have no fear of breaking the "rules". You write boldly and for you it's all " about the message not about the method. For you it often works. It's your trademark...your style. Thank you for that because at times I get so caught up in meter and form that I lose my voice. You remind me there is a place for both. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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One of the things I find endearing about you and your poetry is that you have no fear of breaking the "rules". You write boldly and for you it's all " about the message not about the method. For you it often works. It's your trademark...your style. Thank you for that because at times I get so caught up in meter and form that I lose my voice. You remind me there is a place for both. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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Your words mean so much to me Sandy Thank you
dip
Comment from Pantygynt
When things break down betweeen two people the accusations get flung about. Can you do her reply to this? There's a challenge for you; squeeze yourself into her skin, and let's hear the other side of this particular argument.
This poem has two distinct parts and two distinct rhymeschemes. Two long line stanzas of rhyming couplets followed by five shorter line stanzas of alternate rhyme. Would you let her have the same form or something totally different to match her viewpoint?
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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When things break down betweeen two people the accusations get flung about. Can you do her reply to this? There's a challenge for you; squeeze yourself into her skin, and let's hear the other side of this particular argument.
This poem has two distinct parts and two distinct rhymeschemes. Two long line stanzas of rhyming couplets followed by five shorter line stanzas of alternate rhyme. Would you let her have the same form or something totally different to match her viewpoint?
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Thank you as always Panty. The story is they were a couple then she leaves the relationship to supposed greener pastures.
Realizes the grass isn't always greener and tries to come back but he has already moved on and takes no trouble intelling her where she went wrong.
I don't think the poem warrants her side of the story she was just a fkn bitch lol
dip
Comment from Sis Cat
I think that because the narrator of this has moved on and found another lover, he really should move on. It is too late for him now and demand, "Speak now or (remain) forever silent." A key debate is who left whom. Many former couples have this debate, trying to put the onus for the breakup on the partner who left first:
Now's not the time to rue the past
On what was once; now gone
I was the one who thought it would last
But you left!... and left me so forlorn!
As I said, because this man who found another woman is revisiting his past, he is unsettled. He should focus his energies on his present relationship than rest them on the past. As hard as it is for him, he should let it go and move on. I see no benefit of him rehashing the past.
Nevertheless, I enjoyed your poem. It would be interesting to hear the point of view of the ex-lover. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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I think that because the narrator of this has moved on and found another lover, he really should move on. It is too late for him now and demand, "Speak now or (remain) forever silent." A key debate is who left whom. Many former couples have this debate, trying to put the onus for the breakup on the partner who left first:
Now's not the time to rue the past
On what was once; now gone
I was the one who thought it would last
But you left!... and left me so forlorn!
As I said, because this man who found another woman is revisiting his past, he is unsettled. He should focus his energies on his present relationship than rest them on the past. As hard as it is for him, he should let it go and move on. I see no benefit of him rehashing the past.
Nevertheless, I enjoyed your poem. It would be interesting to hear the point of view of the ex-lover. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Andre with respect please read again carefully and you will realize she left HIM then wanted to come back but he had moved on
and tells her it's too late to crawl back into his life. Well that was the intention of the poem
Thanks as always for the review
he only found another woman after she gave him the flick
dip
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Dip, I reread and agree. Yes, he should not take her back but move on. Thanks.
