Hopeless Love
Unrequited love hurts12 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about unanswered love. Sometimes we are hopelessly in love with someone who don't even notice our existence. It is hard to be in their presence and to hide our feelings.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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A very well-written poem about unanswered love. Sometimes we are hopelessly in love with someone who don't even notice our existence. It is hard to be in their presence and to hide our feelings.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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Thank you for such a nice review. There are so many great entries in this contest, and I had a lot of fun entering it. Thanks again.
Comment from For better for verse
Great poem this, the girl really adores this guy and what a pity he doesn't feel the same way. You really convey the intensity of her passion for him, and I can't help feeling so very sorry for her.
A worthy contest entry, good luck and well done.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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Great poem this, the girl really adores this guy and what a pity he doesn't feel the same way. You really convey the intensity of her passion for him, and I can't help feeling so very sorry for her.
A worthy contest entry, good luck and well done.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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Thank you for such a great review. I really like your name...for better or verse..I wish I'd thought of it. :)
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hey there, Poet: It's great to see this much love in one poem. I mean you have really expressed a deep, deep, hopelessly in love - kind of love:
I breath in the air where his words flow freely,
and my soul is filled with precious sweetness.
My very being glows from his accidental touch,
my feelings overflow because I love him so much.
My heart beats faster when he laughs,
I shout silently, joyfully when he is happy.
My heart longs to tell him of my love,
I was reading along and then I realized that this one so loved would never know of this love. How sad! I remember only one time when I felt this way. i was in the 9th grade and a had a horribly huge crush on this boy named, Robert. All day long I used to fantasize about him and my love for him but he never noticed me. If he passed me in the school hallway. I would be blushing so hard - simply because he walked passed me. Finally he started saying hello to but that was all - never anything else, just hello. Yeah, I know - sad, right.
This is what is so great about your poem. Most people can relate to it's every word. This situation must have happened to many at at least one point in their lives.
Great job! You should do well in this contest. Oh! and I love the picture. Priceless!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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Hey there, Poet: It's great to see this much love in one poem. I mean you have really expressed a deep, deep, hopelessly in love - kind of love:
I breath in the air where his words flow freely,
and my soul is filled with precious sweetness.
My very being glows from his accidental touch,
my feelings overflow because I love him so much.
My heart beats faster when he laughs,
I shout silently, joyfully when he is happy.
My heart longs to tell him of my love,
I was reading along and then I realized that this one so loved would never know of this love. How sad! I remember only one time when I felt this way. i was in the 9th grade and a had a horribly huge crush on this boy named, Robert. All day long I used to fantasize about him and my love for him but he never noticed me. If he passed me in the school hallway. I would be blushing so hard - simply because he walked passed me. Finally he started saying hello to but that was all - never anything else, just hello. Yeah, I know - sad, right.
This is what is so great about your poem. Most people can relate to it's every word. This situation must have happened to many at at least one point in their lives.
Great job! You should do well in this contest. Oh! and I love the picture. Priceless!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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It's funny that you should say that because I wrote this poem when I was 15, in the 9th grade and in love with a basketball player named Tim who didn't know I was alive. He was tall with Sandy colored hair and was nice to everyone. I was completely smitten and even though he was always friendly, that was all there was. I'm over it now of course...or an I? Still think about him to this day. Thanks for taking the time to read my poem.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
This is so absolutely what unrequited love is like. If you could throw in some deeper language, some similes or metaphors or just get damn mad. You write so sweetly and when love isn't returned, we get angry a bit. It is well written and I like it though. You have a bit of potential hidden away and I think you need to shout it out! :)
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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This is so absolutely what unrequited love is like. If you could throw in some deeper language, some similes or metaphors or just get damn mad. You write so sweetly and when love isn't returned, we get angry a bit. It is well written and I like it though. You have a bit of potential hidden away and I think you need to shout it out! :)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, you are probably right, a little bit of anger might spice it up a bit, it's just not in my nature. Thanks for the feedback.
Comment from Irish Rain
Always so hard, that secret, unrequited love. Especially when you have to be around them. You have written this beautifully, a wonderful entry!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Always so hard, that secret, unrequited love. Especially when you have to be around them. You have written this beautifully, a wonderful entry!! Blessings...
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Thanks so much for reading my poem, I always appreciate the feedback.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sad story of a one sided love, a longing for something that cannot be changed, we can't make someone love us, a sentimental write, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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A sad story of a one sided love, a longing for something that cannot be changed, we can't make someone love us, a sentimental write, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much, i always appreciate hearing from fellow writers.
Comment from Liberty Justice
OMG SO BEAUTIFUL! Hey, no need in me entering no contest, because I've already loss. Your poem about "his kindness and his shining smile" is so lovely and tells about the love of unrequited love. Love is explained with sexy, seductive words. WELL DONE! That photo is exquisite. lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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OMG SO BEAUTIFUL! Hey, no need in me entering no contest, because I've already loss. Your poem about "his kindness and his shining smile" is so lovely and tells about the love of unrequited love. Love is explained with sexy, seductive words. WELL DONE! That photo is exquisite. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much, I value the opinion of such a talented writer like you. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
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correction: I've already lost.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I walk upon the ground he walks upon,
I breath the air he breathes, knowing I will never be a part of him.
Sharing only his friendship, his kindness and his shining smile.' I remember this feeling, in some ways I always will. A beautiful and sweet poem very good kind regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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I walk upon the ground he walks upon,
I breath the air he breathes, knowing I will never be a part of him.
Sharing only his friendship, his kindness and his shining smile.' I remember this feeling, in some ways I always will. A beautiful and sweet poem very good kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Thank you for such a nice review. I appreciate and value your opinion.
Comment from jenintorre
Well it certainly fits the contest catagory, "unrequited love". There is a bit of quite good rhyme in parts but I think it needs a bit of an edit to make it flow more smoothly.
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Well it certainly fits the contest catagory, "unrequited love". There is a bit of quite good rhyme in parts but I think it needs a bit of an edit to make it flow more smoothly.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I'm more of a free verse writer when it comes to my work, I really don't follow a certain structure or form, but I'm happy with how it turns out. I appreciate the feedback.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Oh, unrequited love is so hard. You wrote your contest entry perfectly. I can just feel for the person in this. The first part was a sweet love poem until you realize the other doesn't return it.
Good luck in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Oh, unrequited love is so hard. You wrote your contest entry perfectly. I can just feel for the person in this. The first part was a sweet love poem until you realize the other doesn't return it.
Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reading and for your kind review.
