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Sanity Prevailed

A temptation that had to ignored.

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Comment from For better for verse
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We have all felt tempted at some in our life, but simply must resist as the consequences can be to awful to contemplate.
This poem took me back tens of years to when I was in a similar situation which thankfully I remained strong, though God alone knows how.
This was a great poem with good flow and rhyme which conveys very well the battle one faces when faced with such a thing.
Well done.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the read and your meaningful comments.
Comment from Janilou
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Excellent poem. Such vivid descriptions! I really enjoyed reading it.

She was aware of how she could excite
Passion of Id rose up and took flight
Lips seeped sweet cherry red wine
Thoughts of her danced in my mind

My favorite lines. :-)

Nothing to correct or suggest for edits.

Well done and best of luck in the contest.
Jan

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the read and your kind words.
Comment from teols2016
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I can relate. Ladies have betwitched my thoughts the same way. One thing I noticed:

"Passion of Id rose up and took flight": shouldn't it be "idea" instead of "Id"?

Otherwise, well done.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
    Id refers to the basic desires of subconsciousness in Freud's definition of the mind. Thanks for the read and the comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a wonderful contest entry and temptation here was truly resisted! Infatuation for the teacher is an old story but your poem was fresh, well rhymed and delightful! Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the read and your kind words.
Comment from Liberty Justice
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AWESOME! FANTASTIC! How do you do such lovely verses? "Lips seeped sweet cherry red wine" could be a Hit song on the market. Why don't you google song agents and find Hollywood producer to produce and sell your song? I love way your verses rhyme with seductive compassion. Such succulent love of a fantastic lover. Just saw the competition and thumbs up launched you in a place. Take a look and after contest, tell me who you are. lol liberty justicee

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
    Wow! Thank you so much for your review and your encouragement.
reply by Liberty Justice on 15-Nov-2017
    correction: justice
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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This is a good Temptation Poem, about restraint.
So many others are about giving in.
Well done.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thank you for the read and the comments.
Comment from Wabigoon
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Sanity Prevails
Sounds to me a bit like the Moore situation in Alabama except he did not resist.

Need to fix this:
tempting adolescen(ce) girl adolescent I am sure

Thanks
Good poem, nice repeats, good luck
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017

reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thanks for the catch I will edit.