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Veronica is sent back again

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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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So someone else was the father, a pale man with white hair. Little wonder the child was an albino. Surely after Randolph learned of her pregnancy, he had to dump her.

 Comment Written 14-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
    I know! It's disgraceful all the hanky-pankying that went on in those days, Phyllis. Goodness me, is there no decorum anywhere? It really does boggle the mind, no wonder I feel so poorly! I will let Veronica know your feelings so she can give Gwendolyn's ghost a dressing down. I'm sitting here, shaking my head, (making it hurt more) and tut-tutting. Thank you so much, my friend, for another lovely review. Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from robina1978
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Lovely artwork that complements this chapter very well. I'd seen it before, there fore must have read you before, it feels I am just jumping in. I checked your profile page, I am sorry for your position, my one is somewhat similar. I did not spot any mistakes.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
    Thank you, Ine, for reading this part, I really appreciate that. I'll put a synopsis on for the next part that will help you. The artwork was just so perfect and beautiful, I'm glad you liked it. Big hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from l.raven
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HI Sandra, YES!!!!...I found an error...WHO IS FRANCES FATHER??? LOL...you forgot to say...I spent the whole night at the ball with Gwendolyn...and The Great Pretender...and nothing ...sigh...I am already missing enough hair...I don't need to be pulling out anymore...ok...next...love your story told you...I was trying to figure out which lady I was in the picture...I think the one in the red dress...she looks like the only one there really enjoying herself...hummmmm....I always was a fun date...LOL...a great chapter sweet angel...and yes I am out of sixes...******very well written ...loveeeeeeeee you much...Linda xxoo

I would never be able to tell how sick I was by the speed of my brain...it has one speed...and I think that would be reverse...LOL...I am so sorry you are still feeling bad...please take care...know you are in my thoughts...Hi to Ian for me...God Bless you all xxoo love

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
    OMG! I did, didn't I, Linda? Darn it. OH, hang on a minute, it wasn't my fault, Gwendolyn is taking her time in telling Veronica, so it's her fault! Phew, that lets me off the hook. lol. Hey, sorry, I'm the one in the red dress, women in red have much more fun. Thank you, so much, my friend, for another of your really funny reviews. You always give me a giggle. Love you too, big hugs, Sandra xxxxx

    You take care of yourself, I know you, always putting others before you own needs. You'll be no good to anyone if you end up in hospital. And I would miss you on here. Are you listening to me???? I'm struggling, but know I'm on the mend. It just takes a little longer when you get older. It's not fair, is it? God bless you, too, my friend. xxxx
reply by l.raven on 14-Nov-2017
    Hi Sweetie, your always sooooo welcome angel...and bigger hugs back at ya...I am doing fine...things just keep popping up...and I can't seem to get a break...but I know God won't let go of me...I know what you mean about getting sick and healing...right when you think your healed....something else happens...not happy with this growing old stuff...hummmm...please take care...you are always sin my thoughts...loveeeeeeeeee you...xxoo Linda
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I could never have been a female during that time period. I probably would have been stoned to death or at least burned at the stake. LOL I am way too opinionated.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I really like this story.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
    I couldn't either, Barbara. It all looks so romantic for the upper-classes, and it was for the men, but being a woman and just 'given away' like that, no, I wouldn't have liked that. And being at the other end of the scale wasn't nice either. You ... opinionated! LOL Thank you, my friend, for your lovely review. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Oh wow you put us there in the descriptionof it all and let us feel what they are feeling. I can feel her frustration and her anger and confusi0on. Excellent

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
    Thank you, Barb! I'm delighted you got the feel of this part, there is so much more to learn. Tune in next week! LOL. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxxx
Comment from aryr
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This was very well done Sandra, it was interesting how you described Randolph in such detail. He attentive nature until he was betrothed then his silent treatment. The gossip of the staff overheard by Gwendolyne. Her frustration and anguish. And then she meets the man who will become Frances' father-which you have still left unsaid as to who he is. I know you just wanted to increase the mystery. It was so enjoyable to learn the way things were way back then. Great job. Thanks.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
    Thank you, Alie, for another of your really nice reviews. If I had a choice to come to another time, I have no idea which I would go for, each has it's awfulness, and niceness. I'm glad you liked this part, my friend, thank you. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx
reply by aryr on 14-Nov-2017
    I totally agree Sandra, in that I would be unable to decide which time period to travel to, heck even our own time is muddled. You are most welcome my friend, big hugs in return.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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Sooo, His father was an albino as well. What ever happened to him? Why would he desert her after she became pregnant? This
is going to be interesting isn't it. I am looking forward to more. Well done Sandra. Nancy

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    I don't know, I'm waiting for Veronica to find out so I can tell you lot! LOL. I've been feeling rough, have I missed any more of your story, I'll go and have a look but don't forget what I told you, if I haven't read it the first day, give me a nudge. Big hugs, my friend, and thank you for your lovely review. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Rasmine
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This is shaping up nicely. Your writing is intriguing and you stopped at such a good place! I can't wait to the next.
I found one typo:
I'd always dreamt (Grammly says it's 'dreamed') of having a loveing (loving) marriage like our parents had.
Have a good week, okay?

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Hi Rasmine, thank you so much for this lovely review. The typo, as a child at school and onwards, basically until joining FS and writing more, I always used 'dreamt' it's UK English for past tense, but going onto a grammar site, I understand that both dreamt and dreamed are now used equally in the UK. I did download Grammarly, for UK English, but it kept switching to the US version, and thats no good for me, we have so many spelling differences as I expect you've noticed. But, now I know both are acceptable in England I will use the version that keeps both sides happy. Thanks for bringing to my notice, I do like to get as many 'same' words as I can without it looking like a spelling mistake in England. Sooooo complicated at times! Thank you for you lovely review, my friend. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx
Comment from royowen
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Ah, now the plot is starting to take shape now Sandra, the mystery that held me intrigued and captive, is starting to unravel. This episode is so well written, the mostly singular dialogue is fascinating, and explains James' theory about the time, of an albino at that that time. Well done Sandra, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : I'd always dreamt of having a (loveing)...loving?

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Oh, Roy, thank you so very much for the 6 stars, that is so kind of you. And a humongous hug for finding that silly spelling mistake, I popped straight back and corrected it. Bless your lovely heart. I'm so pleased you like reading my story, I have a big grin on my face. Thank you. Another big hug. :) Sandra xxxxx
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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The picture that you've posted with this is stunning. I love it.
This is a well written chapter, it makes sense and the characters are clear even though I'm coming in part way through.
I want to read more.
Sharon

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
    Thank you so much for dropping in Sharon, I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading this part. The picture really is fabulous, isn't it. Such a romantic era. :) Sandra xx