wet streets and gray sky
haiku42 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This haiku is quite powerful. Such emotive lines that make you read over and over and look at the picture, thinking about the man sleeping on the cardboard in the rain. Every time it rains I think of the homeless, how sad. Haiku can say is so much and deep emotion can manifest from them, Giddy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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This haiku is quite powerful. Such emotive lines that make you read over and over and look at the picture, thinking about the man sleeping on the cardboard in the rain. Every time it rains I think of the homeless, how sad. Haiku can say is so much and deep emotion can manifest from them, Giddy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much for the exceptional review, six stars, and warm words, my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the experience that inspired your poem. It is quite evocative and the vivid scene is striking and disturbing! The black and white photograph you added reinforces the mood. Sighs- Joan
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Thank you for sharing the experience that inspired your poem. It is quite evocative and the vivid scene is striking and disturbing! The black and white photograph you added reinforces the mood. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and warm words, my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Irish Rain
I know. It's everywhere. It always was and always will be. I feel heartless when I keep walking...but I can't get poor enough to save the poor, there's always more. This is lovely, blessings....
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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I know. It's everywhere. It always was and always will be. I feel heartless when I keep walking...but I can't get poor enough to save the poor, there's always more. This is lovely, blessings....
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and warm words, my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Natali Holden
Amazing way to put that into just five, seven, and five syllables. The picture you used goes well with this. Your haiku is emotive. Making me feel for that man. Good writing!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Amazing way to put that into just five, seven, and five syllables. The picture you used goes well with this. Your haiku is emotive. Making me feel for that man. Good writing!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from robyn corum
MariVal,
What a horribly sad and despondent scene! I can't imagine that kind of life -- even in yucky weather?? wow.
A painful and very observant piece. Thanks for sharing.
BTW, I'm missed you - where you been, girl?
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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MariVal,
What a horribly sad and despondent scene! I can't imagine that kind of life -- even in yucky weather?? wow.
A painful and very observant piece. Thanks for sharing.
BTW, I'm missed you - where you been, girl?
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the excellent review and kind words. I am here, I just don't write as much. I just had a grandson :)
Gypsy
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Congrats!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
You have said so much in just a few words, you've painted such a clear picture.
Well done.
And the picture that you've posted with it matches perfectly.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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You have said so much in just a few words, you've painted such a clear picture.
Well done.
And the picture that you've posted with it matches perfectly.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from zanya
Yes and how succinctly it captures the tale of homelessness, in our times, in all its dire loneliness and humiliation - as the late autumnal rain beats down
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Yes and how succinctly it captures the tale of homelessness, in our times, in all its dire loneliness and humiliation - as the late autumnal rain beats down
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Mark Valentine
I spent the morning in meetings with homeless service providers in Chicago, so this issue has been on my mind today. I'll soon be walking to the train and passing homeless people on my way. It is a population easily overlooked. Poems like this help shed light on their humanity and remind us of the need for compassion. The "wet and gray" look of the picture and the poem set the right mood for your reflection.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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I spent the morning in meetings with homeless service providers in Chicago, so this issue has been on my mind today. I'll soon be walking to the train and passing homeless people on my way. It is a population easily overlooked. Poems like this help shed light on their humanity and remind us of the need for compassion. The "wet and gray" look of the picture and the poem set the right mood for your reflection.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for sharing your observant haiku and your compassion for the homeless. Hopefully, he can get in touch with the many places which offer shelter and food. I find your use of a "Thursday afternoon" gives it a quality of what we take for granted so the homeless man's plight is more striking.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thanks for sharing your observant haiku and your compassion for the homeless. Hopefully, he can get in touch with the many places which offer shelter and food. I find your use of a "Thursday afternoon" gives it a quality of what we take for granted so the homeless man's plight is more striking.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Gypsy
All in few words along with you gloomy picture you have given us a sad vision of the way the homeless live and then to realize how fortunate we are.
Gert
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Hello Gypsy
All in few words along with you gloomy picture you have given us a sad vision of the way the homeless live and then to realize how fortunate we are.
Gert
Comment Written 09-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, I appreciate the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You are welcome Gypsy
Gert
