Return
A man returns to his neighborhood37 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
Full of vivid imagery. You would have to live in New York City a long time and some time ago to witness this level of depravity. A deeply moving, intellectual write. Well done, once again. Jacqueline.
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Full of vivid imagery. You would have to live in New York City a long time and some time ago to witness this level of depravity. A deeply moving, intellectual write. Well done, once again. Jacqueline.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
Comment from Poppycat
Heartbreaking and beautiful. really shows how sad and heartbreaking the world can be. I love the imagery you used, I could picture everything you were talking about with ease. It really gives a different perspective on the world, it really feels like I'm watching this through someone else's eyes. Good job, I love your work!
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Heartbreaking and beautiful. really shows how sad and heartbreaking the world can be. I love the imagery you used, I could picture everything you were talking about with ease. It really gives a different perspective on the world, it really feels like I'm watching this through someone else's eyes. Good job, I love your work!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
Comment from Lee, Undone
So dark and twisted but real and raw, I love it. It's like looking at death in the face with grace. I enjoyed reading this. As I feel my works similar. I like this style.
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So dark and twisted but real and raw, I love it. It's like looking at death in the face with grace. I enjoyed reading this. As I feel my works similar. I like this style.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow. Stunning picture of death, depression, poverty, and hopelessness. You made it palpable as you walked us through the neighborhood through the narrator's eyes. Brilliantly done.
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Wow. Stunning picture of death, depression, poverty, and hopelessness. You made it palpable as you walked us through the neighborhood through the narrator's eyes. Brilliantly done.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
Comment from Nina Sexton
Such bold adjectives worked great for imagery. I love all the detail in your work, simply bold and colorful really taking the reader's mind down the path with you. Nice work!
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Such bold adjectives worked great for imagery. I love all the detail in your work, simply bold and colorful really taking the reader's mind down the path with you. Nice work!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very descriptive poem as though we're walking through the streets of a city. Although this poem was written in 2017, it fits our war-torn city streets of today. Thank you for reposting it.
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This is a very descriptive poem as though we're walking through the streets of a city. Although this poem was written in 2017, it fits our war-torn city streets of today. Thank you for reposting it.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Your melancholy poem is filled with rich imagery. We see an area that once thrived as a centerpiece for commerce and life. It's now broken down, having disintegrated to the most basic aspects of life, maybe to return someday once things are better.
I'm not sure if this is futuristic or represents specific events, but at any rate, it really set a stage and played our emotions about what was experienced. Very sad about the mom, but quite realistic in its description,
Take care,
Rhonda
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Your melancholy poem is filled with rich imagery. We see an area that once thrived as a centerpiece for commerce and life. It's now broken down, having disintegrated to the most basic aspects of life, maybe to return someday once things are better.
I'm not sure if this is futuristic or represents specific events, but at any rate, it really set a stage and played our emotions about what was experienced. Very sad about the mom, but quite realistic in its description,
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from Paul McFarland
You have painted a pretty dismal picture, Everett. In the beginning, it seems like you are describing some war torn country overseas. How can this scene be played out in the United States? What is happening to us? Where are we? I am losing faith in our country.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2023
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You have painted a pretty dismal picture, Everett. In the beginning, it seems like you are describing some war torn country overseas. How can this scene be played out in the United States? What is happening to us? Where are we? I am losing faith in our country.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2023
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Thanks Paul. Peace be with you friend.easy
Comment from royowen
A highly descriptive free form poem, with an imaginative narrative, downbeat and rather dark, with an almost inevitable course toward an end, which almost speaks of the cost of life that some will live near the edge. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
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A highly descriptive free form poem, with an imaginative narrative, downbeat and rather dark, with an almost inevitable course toward an end, which almost speaks of the cost of life that some will live near the edge. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from Heather Knight
I have only read the first verse so far, but I want to tell you what I love the most about it is how nicely it flows The jump from line to line is seamless. Back to your poem.
Mid-way, I've decided to stop again. This is not only a poem, but also a story well told. A sad, disillusioned view of the world seen through the eyes of the main character.
Now I've taken a deep breath. That ending is spectacular.
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I have only read the first verse so far, but I want to tell you what I love the most about it is how nicely it flows The jump from line to line is seamless. Back to your poem.
Mid-way, I've decided to stop again. This is not only a poem, but also a story well told. A sad, disillusioned view of the world seen through the eyes of the main character.
Now I've taken a deep breath. That ending is spectacular.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
