Blizzard
a tiny free verse14 total reviews
Comment from Mark Valentine
The imagery is great in this one - nothing says comfort, and more specifically, being wrapped in comfort, better than a terry cloth robe and slippers (the fact that the robe is white sets up the blizzard metaphor), and nothing contrasts with that better than being naked in a snowstorm.
I like that you get fit the "How-can-I-go-on-without-you?" feeling into your metaphor also - with a nice twist of pointing out that you only have to survive until spring.
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The imagery is great in this one - nothing says comfort, and more specifically, being wrapped in comfort, better than a terry cloth robe and slippers (the fact that the robe is white sets up the blizzard metaphor), and nothing contrasts with that better than being naked in a snowstorm.
I like that you get fit the "How-can-I-go-on-without-you?" feeling into your metaphor also - with a nice twist of pointing out that you only have to survive until spring.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from Picture this
Beautiful words of love and sentiment Dawn. The verse may be tiny, but the impact is powerful. To be exiled from one's comfort zone for the sake of losing a loved one stands to rob recovery from hope. sensitively the tragedy associated with the transition from comfort. Your sensitive use of contrast provides more valuable lessons. Diane x
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Beautiful words of love and sentiment Dawn. The verse may be tiny, but the impact is powerful. To be exiled from one's comfort zone for the sake of losing a loved one stands to rob recovery from hope. sensitively the tragedy associated with the transition from comfort. Your sensitive use of contrast provides more valuable lessons. Diane x
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
Comment from royowen
I don't think think there's much doubt about it Dawn...there's no way you'll live till spring, just think, no more sweating, or shivering, or days at the beach, days in the woods...drinking in the scene and scents...put some clothes on Dawn, are you nuts? Well done Dawn, great post! Blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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I don't think think there's much doubt about it Dawn...there's no way you'll live till spring, just think, no more sweating, or shivering, or days at the beach, days in the woods...drinking in the scene and scents...put some clothes on Dawn, are you nuts? Well done Dawn, great post! Blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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AaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! You caught me totally off guard with this review, you! HAHAHAAHAHAHA!
Thank you, my friend. (My face hurts, and my eyes are filling, but this time from laughing so hard!!!!!!!!)
This was supposed to be a sad poem! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I love you, Roy, I really do, my good and wonderful friend! Blessings to you too. XX
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Hah, hah, my mind picture saw you shivering in the cold...dressed in nothing but your indignity. Love Roy
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HAHAHAHAHA!!!
Comment from BeasPeas
I'm interpreting your poem to mean that sometimes we get lost in the overpowering personality of others, making us disappear in the assumed "bigness" of the other person (partner). I know this happened to me. It takes a long time to work self back to personhood again. Marilyn
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I'm interpreting your poem to mean that sometimes we get lost in the overpowering personality of others, making us disappear in the assumed "bigness" of the other person (partner). I know this happened to me. It takes a long time to work self back to personhood again. Marilyn
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Yes - certainly one interpretation. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you.
