A Man Becomes Such
fiction, man, injustice45 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
As a parent I know how it feels to want to defend a child with your own life and also be prepared to go to extremes to do so.
I was in a situation once where I was prepared to just that and totally surprised myself. I had no weapon though except my bare hands, but I was prepared to use them and I informed the perceived threat. Frankly, I never thought I had it in me. Funny how when the chips are down and your flesh and blood is under threat you can rise to the occasion and (wo)man up as it were.
A good write Vic
Hangar
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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As a parent I know how it feels to want to defend a child with your own life and also be prepared to go to extremes to do so.
I was in a situation once where I was prepared to just that and totally surprised myself. I had no weapon though except my bare hands, but I was prepared to use them and I informed the perceived threat. Frankly, I never thought I had it in me. Funny how when the chips are down and your flesh and blood is under threat you can rise to the occasion and (wo)man up as it were.
A good write Vic
Hangar
Comment Written 10-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2017
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Thank you my dear. My daughter is going to set me up email.
I think. I know, it's easy. I'm getting there.
Doug
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Just get her to set up a brand new one.
I already deleted the other one way long ago. Sorry.
Not that it matters. She'll sort it. Make sure it is either a gmail account or one that will take large files. Sometimes a book file needs to be compressed if too large to send.
A gmail account will let you send up to 25 MB in one go.
That's what you want
Comment from Ulla
Hi Victor, This is a wonderfully written poem that to be reflects the unsettled world if hatred we live in at the moment. Nothing seems to be right anymore. Your short sentences emphasise just that. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Hi Victor, This is a wonderfully written poem that to be reflects the unsettled world if hatred we live in at the moment. Nothing seems to be right anymore. Your short sentences emphasise just that. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you, dear.
Comment from chcbeck
Beautifully haunting, a extremely well written and well presented poem. The style has a great flow. The emotive language makes you understand the character. Great poem thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Beautifully haunting, a extremely well written and well presented poem. The style has a great flow. The emotive language makes you understand the character. Great poem thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from JanPerry
Just great. Accurate descriptions, true poetry.
This has more poetic justice than other poems put together.
The injustice in every persons life. What good people have to go through just to survive shocks me on every level.
Well said.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Just great. Accurate descriptions, true poetry.
This has more poetic justice than other poems put together.
The injustice in every persons life. What good people have to go through just to survive shocks me on every level.
Well said.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Wonderful review. Thank you.
Comment from frogbook
What a powerful and meaningful poem. It gave me goosebumps. Revenge is a strong thing and in extreme cases may seem the only way. Sometimes the right person pays.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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What a powerful and meaningful poem. It gave me goosebumps. Revenge is a strong thing and in extreme cases may seem the only way. Sometimes the right person pays.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from visionary1234
Well your timing is certainly spot on with this one, unfortunately, Victor. I like your use of short, abrupt lines - it brings home the feeling of rage barely being kept in check for the reader ... There is also a rhythm and some clever internal rhyming here which I don't remember finding in your work before - a nice addition, especially noticed when I read your piece aloud. We've all been to this place of rage ... but it's what we DO with it that counts. And why, today, do so many seem to gravitate towards evil and mindless revenge, hurting innocents? The world feels like it has only a slim grim on sanity at the moment and your piece (unfortunately) reflects that very well!
Best wishes
Sharyn
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Well your timing is certainly spot on with this one, unfortunately, Victor. I like your use of short, abrupt lines - it brings home the feeling of rage barely being kept in check for the reader ... There is also a rhythm and some clever internal rhyming here which I don't remember finding in your work before - a nice addition, especially noticed when I read your piece aloud. We've all been to this place of rage ... but it's what we DO with it that counts. And why, today, do so many seem to gravitate towards evil and mindless revenge, hurting innocents? The world feels like it has only a slim grim on sanity at the moment and your piece (unfortunately) reflects that very well!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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I thank you, and (unfortunately) agree with you.
Comment from GWinterwin
You done a good job with words to tell of a terrible past. I think anyone who would do such things or belong to the KKK is terrible beyond words. Our family is a very mixed family as I am German and Irish, my wife is American Indian and Spanish, we have four children. Our son-in-law is black, and we have a sister-in-law that's Korean. I completely agree that any white person who hates another race is a person I don't want anything to do with. Please tell me though why I never see anyone on facebook or most other places do a poem about Black Lives Matter? They are a hate group just as much as the KKK, and when they were killing white policemen just because they were white no one said anything and even now no one will speak up. Are people that afraid to speak up or does those people think it's ok to kill whites because we are white?
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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You done a good job with words to tell of a terrible past. I think anyone who would do such things or belong to the KKK is terrible beyond words. Our family is a very mixed family as I am German and Irish, my wife is American Indian and Spanish, we have four children. Our son-in-law is black, and we have a sister-in-law that's Korean. I completely agree that any white person who hates another race is a person I don't want anything to do with. Please tell me though why I never see anyone on facebook or most other places do a poem about Black Lives Matter? They are a hate group just as much as the KKK, and when they were killing white policemen just because they were white no one said anything and even now no one will speak up. Are people that afraid to speak up or does those people think it's ok to kill whites because we are white?
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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People are afraid, naturally. Evil only prevails when men of good honor will not gather to stop it. Of course, it is far easier for me to wax eloquently with words than stand up for human ethics. Period. But with enough contemplation should come enough guilt to say enow. Have we learned nothing? Cross a threshold of no return with no regrets? Oh, it's possible. Our armed forces have done it in every conflict. What is life anyway, but a terminal prognosis? Better to stand against the wind than die a little every day, eh? Sorry to paraphrase the Harley Riders.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Written proof that THINGS are still not equal and not really becoming better at this point. I thought we were on the right track and it seems we've leaped backward. Horrible. This writer conveys all that and more in the very creative piece submitted.
Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Written proof that THINGS are still not equal and not really becoming better at this point. I thought we were on the right track and it seems we've leaped backward. Horrible. This writer conveys all that and more in the very creative piece submitted.
Great job!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Wendy.
Comment from Aussie
Your poem tells the lifetime story of man's inhumanity to man. The KKK is well known in America, even drifted to my country Australia. Thanks for sharing the truth of racism. When will we all sit down and hold hands in peace?
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Your poem tells the lifetime story of man's inhumanity to man. The KKK is well known in America, even drifted to my country Australia. Thanks for sharing the truth of racism. When will we all sit down and hold hands in peace?
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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When we are in the afterlife, I'm afraid. Thank you.
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I look forward to the afterlife - I will be a whole person helping others. XX Kay.
Comment from nomi338
I wonder how many people realize how much self control it has taken over time for blacks to restrain themselves from turning the Southern United States from becoming a battlefield. You see when you realize that there is nothing you can do to prevent your own slaughter, you give in to the violence and fight to the death. I thank God that we have been able to internalize the pain of one tragic death after another as we wait for God's justice. Add to this the cases of unarmed black men being killed by police who claim that they feared for their lives as an excuse for taking our lives. It is amazing how great our capacity for restraint has grown over the years. This poem has opened floodgates of hurt feelings within me and I apologize for going on and on.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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I wonder how many people realize how much self control it has taken over time for blacks to restrain themselves from turning the Southern United States from becoming a battlefield. You see when you realize that there is nothing you can do to prevent your own slaughter, you give in to the violence and fight to the death. I thank God that we have been able to internalize the pain of one tragic death after another as we wait for God's justice. Add to this the cases of unarmed black men being killed by police who claim that they feared for their lives as an excuse for taking our lives. It is amazing how great our capacity for restraint has grown over the years. This poem has opened floodgates of hurt feelings within me and I apologize for going on and on.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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No, oh no, my friend. I talked at length with my mother after I wrote this. My essential commentary was...I don't understand how the black man has held himself back all these years. But for ALL our sakes, thank God he did.
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I thought of you, actually, when writing this piece. Mostly, because I thought it might affect you. Of course, such was my intention. I tried once already to capture this emotion, this injustice, the outrage, the burning of a man's soul. I called it the Hanging Tree. U were kind enough to review it. But, it always bothered me that I simply didn't get it right. It did not capture the intense injustice and raw rage I wanted it to. Here, is...a deeper cut. What I wanted. But, I apologize that it must also raise again those same feelings in real people.
