Dear John
Best wishes for the future23 total reviews
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Guuuuurrrrrrllllll! You are too much. This is a great I'm sorry poem, full of imagination and creativity. It has humor and what I call a terrifically effective punch line. I truly laughed out loud when I read the ending of this Dear John letter. FUNNNNY!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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Guuuuurrrrrrllllll! You are too much. This is a great I'm sorry poem, full of imagination and creativity. It has humor and what I call a terrifically effective punch line. I truly laughed out loud when I read the ending of this Dear John letter. FUNNNNY!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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I am so pleased you enjoyed it and didn't take it seiously like some.
Comment from Liberty Justice
WOW OMG! What a shocking ending and I love that title. Amazing way you set musical rhymes to your dear john letter. It flowed with realistic straight forward tone that this is permanent. WELL DONE! lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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WOW OMG! What a shocking ending and I love that title. Amazing way you set musical rhymes to your dear john letter. It flowed with realistic straight forward tone that this is permanent. WELL DONE! lol liberty justice
Comment Written 08-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thanks a lot.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a well composed poem, sort of a "dark humor" Dear John. Uniquely and cleverly written. Art work is perfect accompaniment. Good word choices. Much luck in the contest with this well done entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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This is a well composed poem, sort of a "dark humor" Dear John. Uniquely and cleverly written. Art work is perfect accompaniment. Good word choices. Much luck in the contest with this well done entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you Marilyn
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Ouch. I can't understand the need to break this to him now, but for some reason, women always want to pile on. He must have hurt you in the past for you to want to make his last days miserable.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Ouch. I can't understand the need to break this to him now, but for some reason, women always want to pile on. He must have hurt you in the past for you to want to make his last days miserable.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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It was just a bit of fun not a true story. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jen
You revealed it all in the last line. As I read along, I was disgusted with this woman who cheated, and then came out with her confession by mail. Then, after discovering her husband was on death row, a convicted criminal to be put to death, I felt a bit sorry for her. She has to get on with her life, after all, while there's still time. And then, I went back to being disgusted with her. Why tell him? It will only hurt him more going to the gallows. Is there a "right time" to tell someone you've found another, that you're in love with someone else? I don't think so.
The line that might hurt the most for someone condemned,
"Best wishes for the future.
It must be quite hard on death row."
I've known some ruthless women in my time.
Thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Hi Jen
You revealed it all in the last line. As I read along, I was disgusted with this woman who cheated, and then came out with her confession by mail. Then, after discovering her husband was on death row, a convicted criminal to be put to death, I felt a bit sorry for her. She has to get on with her life, after all, while there's still time. And then, I went back to being disgusted with her. Why tell him? It will only hurt him more going to the gallows. Is there a "right time" to tell someone you've found another, that you're in love with someone else? I don't think so.
The line that might hurt the most for someone condemned,
"Best wishes for the future.
It must be quite hard on death row."
I've known some ruthless women in my time.
Thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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It was only a bit of fun. Thanks for reading thanks for your comments.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Jenintorre, well expressed feelings. No particular meter but the rhyme is good in abcb form. Your last line took me by surprise - almost like an afterthought. Oh dear! As he is on death row perhaps the shock of your letter might finish him off LOL LOL.
I should not laugh as you felt you must tell him which is honourable, but did he have to know if he is about to die? You followed the requirements of the contest and I wish you Good Luck. Warm regards Dorothy x
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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Hi Jenintorre, well expressed feelings. No particular meter but the rhyme is good in abcb form. Your last line took me by surprise - almost like an afterthought. Oh dear! As he is on death row perhaps the shock of your letter might finish him off LOL LOL.
I should not laugh as you felt you must tell him which is honourable, but did he have to know if he is about to die? You followed the requirements of the contest and I wish you Good Luck. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thanks. It is just a bit of nonsense.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Jenintorre
= Oh, my, what a 'HUH?" ending. Fantastic!! (*<*)
= Here, I just thought she was going to do a good ole 'Dear John'.
= You fooled us. Excellent write and entry in the contest.
= Good Luck.
= Cheers, J
= Have a good day/evening!
(*>*) Remember--A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*<*)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Hi, Jenintorre
= Oh, my, what a 'HUH?" ending. Fantastic!! (*<*)
= Here, I just thought she was going to do a good ole 'Dear John'.
= You fooled us. Excellent write and entry in the contest.
= Good Luck.
= Cheers, J
= Have a good day/evening!
(*>*) Remember--A Smile Is A Frown Upside Town (*<*)
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. So glad you enjoyed it.Jen
Comment from For better for verse
Great poem, good rhyme flows along really well and a great last line , which I did not expect.
Bit of a chuckle at wishing someone all the best for the future on death row.....still s'pose he could get a reprieve.
Great job ....well done.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Great poem, good rhyme flows along really well and a great last line , which I did not expect.
Bit of a chuckle at wishing someone all the best for the future on death row.....still s'pose he could get a reprieve.
Great job ....well done.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Many thanks.
Comment from JennaG
Oh wow! I did not see that ending coming! That was quite the surprise! This is a very clever and creative entry that will definitely catch the reader's attention, especially when they reach that last line. Great work! Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Oh wow! I did not see that ending coming! That was quite the surprise! This is a very clever and creative entry that will definitely catch the reader's attention, especially when they reach that last line. Great work! Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Many thanks for your comments. Jen
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sad poem that tells it all. Some men are not worth waiting for when they mess up your life by their actions it's better to let go and find another worthy to love.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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A very well-written sad poem that tells it all. Some men are not worth waiting for when they mess up your life by their actions it's better to let go and find another worthy to love.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Thank you.
