Comment from Spitfire

Exceptional

Great choice of words to suggest a menacing presence is nearby: sinister fog that stretched its eerie cloak over the water shrouded whatever lay across the shore.
Shackles could suggest an escaped prisoner, but hacksawed and search team doesn't support that idea.
Well-down.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017

Thanks for the great review. Really late in replying.. Was involved in an accident last week and am in process of getting a new vehicle. Bless my sons. They are getting me one.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired the drama you created in so few words. Your "cloak" metaphor and two different references to fog are very effective. Best wishes in the Flash Fiction contest- Joan

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017

Thanks, Joan.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

I do not know if you intend this to be the opening of a short story or novel, but it should be! You do a marvelous job setting the scene in fog as the narrator regains consciousness. A great last line makes us wonder WHO he is, HOW he escaped, and WHAT will happen next.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017

Thanks for the great review.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

So, what I get from this he/she/was an escaped prisoner. Because of the dogs in the distance and the hack-sawed shackles, I doubt the person is grateful for the search party anymore. LOL Good job. Nancy

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017

You got it. Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

U-m-m-mmmm, not a rescue team that has come after your protagonist, but more like a posse I take it.
If I were him or her, I'd start running right about now--in the water--upstream.
Blood hounds have a more difficult time tracking you if you stay in the water. It covers up your scent.
Great job in holding back "the reveal" until the very end, DALLAS. That isn't always as easy to accomplish as it looks.
Yours is an excellent flash fiction story.
Nice writing...
~Dean

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017

Thanks, Dean.

reply by Dean Kuch on 02-Nov-2017

You bet'cha! :)

Comment from Mabaker

Excellent

Here goes. I'll try and review 100 words, It read very neat and tidy, and it made sense someone was shackled and he found out when he tried to stand up.
Regards Mabaker.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017

Thanks for reviewing.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written hundred word flash fiction. Sometimes we are lost in ourselves and we are unable to see acway out of the fog that surrounded us. We can only find the way when the fog lifts.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017

Thanks for reviewing.