Across The Silver Flow
A tip of my hat to my ancestral homes with nostalgic love.29 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
I very much enjoyed reading your poem. I found it very nostalgic and well crafted. It was also very atmospheric. Best wishes. Jen.
I very much enjoyed reading your poem. I found it very nostalgic and well crafted. It was also very atmospheric. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
Comment from Liberty Justice
Ooh MARVELOUS! You actually wrote in iambic pentameter. I find this so tough to do. You are truly brilliant and you got to be related to Shakespere, himself. I love the way you show admiration toward a lady who throws you a kiss. Your poem is so soothing and romantic with a touch of suspense. lol liberty justice Good luck you got my thumbs up!
Ooh MARVELOUS! You actually wrote in iambic pentameter. I find this so tough to do. You are truly brilliant and you got to be related to Shakespere, himself. I love the way you show admiration toward a lady who throws you a kiss. Your poem is so soothing and romantic with a touch of suspense. lol liberty justice Good luck you got my thumbs up!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
Comment from Aplgwest
Your poem contains lovely imagery, which is enhanced by your mastery of rhyme and rhythm. My only suggestion is that you more describe the Silver Flow. I am not sure if it is a specific body of water, or a general description of silvery water. The title is capitalized but with the poem it is not, so I assume it is no a specific name. Not that it is all that important, but it made me curious.
--Elaine
Your poem contains lovely imagery, which is enhanced by your mastery of rhyme and rhythm. My only suggestion is that you more describe the Silver Flow. I am not sure if it is a specific body of water, or a general description of silvery water. The title is capitalized but with the poem it is not, so I assume it is no a specific name. Not that it is all that important, but it made me curious.
--Elaine
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
And now across the silver flow
I see her face flushed all aglow.
She sees me standing here a bit amiss(lose one s)s;
Then smiles and throws me one sweet blissful kiss.
I felt Coleridge or Shelley could have written this. Well done absolutely beautiful romance and gallant and true poetry. Kind regards Meia xx
And now across the silver flow
I see her face flushed all aglow.
She sees me standing here a bit amiss(lose one s)s;
Then smiles and throws me one sweet blissful kiss.
I felt Coleridge or Shelley could have written this. Well done absolutely beautiful romance and gallant and true poetry. Kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
Comment from RGstar
As I read through this, I wondered if real or fantasy, yet still cannot make up my mind, even after reading your notes.
Still. Descriptive with much imagination, and aura.
Good write.
Have a good day author.
RGstar
As I read through this, I wondered if real or fantasy, yet still cannot make up my mind, even after reading your notes.
Still. Descriptive with much imagination, and aura.
Good write.
Have a good day author.
RGstar
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
Comment from Nika2016
This deserves a six for its haunting beauty...I loved that she spoke a magical ancient language...I have a poem like this where she speaks to dolphins.
Will you go to my portfolio and read the poem I wrote after reading A Letter to Saigon? You do not have to review. I also have one, A Bridge to Saigon, but it is buried in portfolio on page four or something about sixty poems back..:)
This deserves a six for its haunting beauty...I loved that she spoke a magical ancient language...I have a poem like this where she speaks to dolphins.
Will you go to my portfolio and read the poem I wrote after reading A Letter to Saigon? You do not have to review. I also have one, A Bridge to Saigon, but it is buried in portfolio on page four or something about sixty poems back..:)
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A lovely poem with an artistically portrayed lass.
Very nicely done. Good rhythm, flow and rhyming.
Too bad she got away on you. A funny story to go with your poem.
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
A lovely poem with an artistically portrayed lass.
Very nicely done. Good rhythm, flow and rhyming.
Too bad she got away on you. A funny story to go with your poem.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Thank you Sharon. I had fun writing this fantasy and
transporting myself back to my ancestral home. tom
Comment from Irish Rain
I loved every line. 'She sings in Highland Gaelic, lost to me'...that is a beautiful line. I also loved your notes, and the tripping, ha ha. This is just so very lovely!! Blessings!!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
I loved every line. 'She sings in Highland Gaelic, lost to me'...that is a beautiful line. I also loved your notes, and the tripping, ha ha. This is just so very lovely!! Blessings!!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Hey Irish. I am truly happy you enjoyed this poem so much. I enjoyed writing it very much. Thanks again for the exceptional review, I am honored. tom
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It's just beautiful!!!
Comment from johnwilson
I am so glad I stumbled upon your writing! This piece, like the last I reviewed, left me spellbound and at a loss for words. You seemed to extract them from me with your words. The metaphors are beautiful and the flow is sublime. Again, your complete author notes made it easy for me to understand where you were going with the piece. These poems are publish worthy to me!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
I am so glad I stumbled upon your writing! This piece, like the last I reviewed, left me spellbound and at a loss for words. You seemed to extract them from me with your words. The metaphors are beautiful and the flow is sublime. Again, your complete author notes made it easy for me to understand where you were going with the piece. These poems are publish worthy to me!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Thank you so very much John for the great rating and very nice comments. tom
Comment from Pantygynt
To quote from a current British popular advertisement, this does exactly what it says on the tin and, in so doing, tells a charming story or should I say fable? It is great to find someone here who can establish a metrical pattern and rhyme scheme in a poem, and keep it going as a unity throughout the piece.
I noticed a typo by the way of a stray 'G' here, "To chase the[g] dreaded darkness from my night", and a missing 'S' here, "here a bit amis(s)".
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
To quote from a current British popular advertisement, this does exactly what it says on the tin and, in so doing, tells a charming story or should I say fable? It is great to find someone here who can establish a metrical pattern and rhyme scheme in a poem, and keep it going as a unity throughout the piece.
I noticed a typo by the way of a stray 'G' here, "To chase the[g] dreaded darkness from my night", and a missing 'S' here, "here a bit amis(s)".
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Thank you Pantygynt for the kind words and great review. Also I corrected that hanging 'g' and I thank you for that. tom