Head above water
Drowning in a sea I love18 total reviews
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
You have combined two of your loves with great effect Dip, romance and the ocean and it works beautifully. Love the way you compare the sea to a woman......very clever
Mitchell
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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You have combined two of your loves with great effect Dip, romance and the ocean and it works beautifully. Love the way you compare the sea to a woman......very clever
Mitchell
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thanks again Mitchell I really appreciate the time and effort you go to to read my work
dip
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Dr D,
I enjoyed your poem. I really like the comparison of the ocean to woman. You expressed your thoughts/feelings well. There is good flow & rhyme, too. It is easy for readers to visualize this 'struggle'. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Dr D,
I enjoyed your poem. I really like the comparison of the ocean to woman. You expressed your thoughts/feelings well. There is good flow & rhyme, too. It is easy for readers to visualize this 'struggle'. Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thankyou so much Jan glad you liked it. always appreciate your comments and reviews.
dip
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The sea demands respect and never take your life for granted whilst sailing or swimming on her. She has taken life without ceremony and she is formidable, I don't have the same love as you for the sea, but I am in awe of her, lovely words penned here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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The sea demands respect and never take your life for granted whilst sailing or swimming on her. She has taken life without ceremony and she is formidable, I don't have the same love as you for the sea, but I am in awe of her, lovely words penned here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thanks as always Dolly
Yeah I'm afraid it's my next passion besides my family. Poetry takes a distant third....... but is catching up lol
dip
Comment from closetpoetjester
Ooh an angry placid woman haha
Good on ya
Sounds like she's claimed you in full as you're gasping for air. Nothing like a bit of salt water to clean out the gills haha
Your Queen certainly wears the pan...oops I mean the Crown of the outfit...but tell me
Do you ride your Queen high? haha
I bet.
Hmmm...more thought needed LOL
A prisoner at her command...hmmm
Yep. She has your number.
Nicely done but you're what's called an under the thumb bit of sea man haha
Hugs P
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Ooh an angry placid woman haha
Good on ya
Sounds like she's claimed you in full as you're gasping for air. Nothing like a bit of salt water to clean out the gills haha
Your Queen certainly wears the pan...oops I mean the Crown of the outfit...but tell me
Do you ride your Queen high? haha
I bet.
Hmmm...more thought needed LOL
A prisoner at her command...hmmm
Yep. She has your number.
Nicely done but you're what's called an under the thumb bit of sea man haha
Hugs P
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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you spelt semen wrong silly lol Yep the sea is an angry/ placid woman...smooth and tranquil one minute angry and dangerous the next lol
thanks as always sweet P
xxdip
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Dip. Do you swim really well? It occurred to me that you must do. I'm sort of afraid of the currents of the ocean. Like you say she's a fickle mistress ... loved it xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Hi Dip. Do you swim really well? It occurred to me that you must do. I'm sort of afraid of the currents of the ocean. Like you say she's a fickle mistress ... loved it xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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I am a surfer more than a swimmer though I could swim to save myself. The ocean sure is a fickle place I must say Angry one minute placid and tranquil the next but always alluring
dip
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, DIP: I like the comparison of the ocean to a woman:
..she is like a woman...angry, placid, unpredictable but someone I love anyway.
I love the way you said the above, even the notes were poetic. NICE! I miss the ocean and I didn't get there this summer that just passed. If we make it to the summer of 2018 I shall enjoy your love of the ocean with you - in two separate parts of the world. You will enjoy it in Australia and I will try to find a beautiful ocean in New York to enjoy. Great poem and as usual, thank you for sharing your ocean love.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Good morning, DIP: I like the comparison of the ocean to a woman:
..she is like a woman...angry, placid, unpredictable but someone I love anyway.
I love the way you said the above, even the notes were poetic. NICE! I miss the ocean and I didn't get there this summer that just passed. If we make it to the summer of 2018 I shall enjoy your love of the ocean with you - in two separate parts of the world. You will enjoy it in Australia and I will try to find a beautiful ocean in New York to enjoy. Great poem and as usual, thank you for sharing your ocean love.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thank YOU for enjoying it. Tier I am glad you enjoy my sea poetry.
dip
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a visual swimming in the angry, placid and unpredictable but lovely ocean, keeping the head above water, drowning with Neptune's daughter and enjoy swimming; I liked.
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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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This speaks a visual swimming in the angry, placid and unpredictable but lovely ocean, keeping the head above water, drowning with Neptune's daughter and enjoy swimming; I liked.
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Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Thankyou Al. please read my author's notes for the other analogy
much appreciated
Thankyou as always for the review
dip
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Life is about struggles and keeping our heads above the water or drown without life giving air. When the troubles of life get the better of us wr feel like drowning in an ocean.
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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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A very well-written poem. Life is about struggles and keeping our heads above the water or drown without life giving air. When the troubles of life get the better of us wr feel like drowning in an ocean.
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Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
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Hmmm, you are sort of right Sandra. read my author's notes
thankyou as always
dip
