Sleep Deeply, Dear
you know what they say about a woman scorned...27 total reviews
Comment from sandy montgomery
Romance gone terribly wrong. Humor here as well as murderous mischief. Good natural rhyme. Great rhythm with no spag. Every thing flows together well. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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Romance gone terribly wrong. Humor here as well as murderous mischief. Good natural rhyme. Great rhythm with no spag. Every thing flows together well. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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LOL. Thanks, Sandy. Yep - I had fun with this one.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Wow Dawn, remind me not to get on the wrong side of you and sleep with my eyes open!
This is a very effective piece of writing and one that certainly lets the reader in to see what a woman scorned can feel and do. Excellent read and ...tips if I ever need them. ~DD
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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Wow Dawn, remind me not to get on the wrong side of you and sleep with my eyes open!
This is a very effective piece of writing and one that certainly lets the reader in to see what a woman scorned can feel and do. Excellent read and ...tips if I ever need them. ~DD
Comment Written 04-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
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LOL. :) Thank you. You're a doll.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem brings out your inner voice, Dawn. There are folks somewhere who don't even know they are the inspiration for the two 'bout-to-be-deceased folks here. "...a thousand cuts." Ouch!
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This poem brings out your inner voice, Dawn. There are folks somewhere who don't even know they are the inspiration for the two 'bout-to-be-deceased folks here. "...a thousand cuts." Ouch!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2017
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Dawn, this is a powerful poem, that makes me feel so humble. I hope I can stay on your good side. Beautifully written. So full of passion. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Wow, Dawn, this is a powerful poem, that makes me feel so humble. I hope I can stay on your good side. Beautifully written. So full of passion. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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LOL - thanks, Ulla.
Comment from GracieAnn
Dawn,
This Rhyming Poetry Contest entry depicts the depth of revenge and the pain of betrayal by the one least expected to undermine trust. The rhyme is well executed for effect. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Dawn,
This Rhyming Poetry Contest entry depicts the depth of revenge and the pain of betrayal by the one least expected to undermine trust. The rhyme is well executed for effect. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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Thanks very much, GracieAnn. Good to see you back. :)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
You might have written this for me - my ex who you were
describing - so well presented, Dawn - content, rhythm and
rhyme flowing so smoothly - all in all, most impressive, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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You might have written this for me - my ex who you were
describing - so well presented, Dawn - content, rhythm and
rhyme flowing so smoothly - all in all, most impressive, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
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That kind of person is far too common, sadly. If only we see it in them before becoming involved, but they're also great at hiding those traits, aren't they? Until they get what they want, that is...
Thanks so much, my friend.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I love the rhymes in this one Dawn. You have displayed remarkable talent in creating a very well known piece of writing and making it your own. good luck in your contest. This one rocks! xoxo Kiwi
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I love the rhymes in this one Dawn. You have displayed remarkable talent in creating a very well known piece of writing and making it your own. good luck in your contest. This one rocks! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow!
I felt a shiver just thinking of the dark intent.
The rhyming is effortless and the meaning precise and clear.
A powerful and commanding topic and worthy entry in this contest.
The language is rich and carefully chosen to achieve the maximum effect.
Good luck.
:-)Shirley
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Wow!
I felt a shiver just thinking of the dark intent.
The rhyming is effortless and the meaning precise and clear.
A powerful and commanding topic and worthy entry in this contest.
The language is rich and carefully chosen to achieve the maximum effect.
Good luck.
:-)Shirley
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
Comment from visionary1234
OOOOWWW! Remind me to stay on your good side Dawn! Love the intriguing (threatening) title ... but that could just be Halloween. Clever to riff off Elizabeth Barrett Browning, too! I had a couple of small stops in the verse below ... 'you disrespected efforts' - 'efforts' seemed a little 'empty' / neutral somehow ... I wanted an emotionally stronger choice? And 'those sins of yours alone' - I think I'd strengthen to 'those sins WERE yours alone'????
You disrespected efforts,
unless they were your own -
accused me of transgressions -
those sins of yours alone.
Just some thoughts ... hope that's okay. I'm noticing not much real meaty 'critique' on the site!
Big hugs
Sharyn
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OOOOWWW! Remind me to stay on your good side Dawn! Love the intriguing (threatening) title ... but that could just be Halloween. Clever to riff off Elizabeth Barrett Browning, too! I had a couple of small stops in the verse below ... 'you disrespected efforts' - 'efforts' seemed a little 'empty' / neutral somehow ... I wanted an emotionally stronger choice? And 'those sins of yours alone' - I think I'd strengthen to 'those sins WERE yours alone'????
You disrespected efforts,
unless they were your own -
accused me of transgressions -
those sins of yours alone.
Just some thoughts ... hope that's okay. I'm noticing not much real meaty 'critique' on the site!
Big hugs
Sharyn
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A good poem with a grim subject. Horror and Thriller achieved.
This has good rhythm and rhyme and the picture is outstanding.
Well done.
Sharon
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A good poem with a grim subject. Horror and Thriller achieved.
This has good rhythm and rhyme and the picture is outstanding.
Well done.
Sharon
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
