Making Autumn Bed
contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from sfharper
Very pleasant imagistic poem about autumn. Your use of color on words adds to the experience. The switch from wither to bed is less scary than to death that it seemed to be going for, so it strengthens the poem.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Very pleasant imagistic poem about autumn. Your use of color on words adds to the experience. The switch from wither to bed is less scary than to death that it seemed to be going for, so it strengthens the poem.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the nice review, SF Harper
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You are welcome patcelaw
Comment from lyenochka
The leaves do blanket the ground! I like the colors that you used but found the yellow so much brighter than the gold. Wonder if a lighter background color would make the yellow and red pop out more. Lovely poem, Patricia!
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The leaves do blanket the ground! I like the colors that you used but found the yellow so much brighter than the gold. Wonder if a lighter background color would make the yellow and red pop out more. Lovely poem, Patricia!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the nice review, Helen.
Comment from DR DIP
Quaint little poem of observation Pat You have captured the colours synonymous with autumn perfectly. Interesting artwork accompanying your poem I like it
Thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Quaint little poem of observation Pat You have captured the colours synonymous with autumn perfectly. Interesting artwork accompanying your poem I like it
Thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the nice review, Dip.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a new way to think of Autumn. Or at least new to me.
A good 5 line poem. Well written.
Good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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This is a new way to think of Autumn. Or at least new to me.
A good 5 line poem. Well written.
Good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the nice review, Sharon.
Comment from GracieAnn
Pat,
This 5 Line Poem contest submission is well constructed and written. Strong presentation and the metaphor of a bed made of leaves is appropriate. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Pat,
This 5 Line Poem contest submission is well constructed and written. Strong presentation and the metaphor of a bed made of leaves is appropriate. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn
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Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the nice review, Gracie Ann.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Patricia ,
Again I've enjoyed reading your poem.
It was kind of hard to tell what the artwork was about.
It's wonderful that you made them from your computer.
I used to do that a long time ago but haven't done it for ages.
Kat
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Hi Patricia ,
Again I've enjoyed reading your poem.
It was kind of hard to tell what the artwork was about.
It's wonderful that you made them from your computer.
I used to do that a long time ago but haven't done it for ages.
Kat
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Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the nice review, kat.
