Two Characters
Here are two characters I am exploring for a large challenge6 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
Very complex and interesting characters with a great backstory to tell. Not being the expert I would not be the one to give advice on how to do the back story. I think you have the story in hand and will make great decision. I say trust your instincts as your writing is always well done.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Very complex and interesting characters with a great backstory to tell. Not being the expert I would not be the one to give advice on how to do the back story. I think you have the story in hand and will make great decision. I say trust your instincts as your writing is always well done.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Thank you frog. I am enjoying these characters. Exploring all sides of life.
Comment from Sasha
I enjoyed both stories. I think you have done a great job getting the reader interested in the characters. The first is obviously more uplifting. I would like to know about Silver Fox's date and if it blossomed into true love. I think writing more about the things that made the second character so depressed would help. Possibly dialogue with her husband while he was dying would help. Overall I think you have two great stories here. I definitely would want to know more about both.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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I enjoyed both stories. I think you have done a great job getting the reader interested in the characters. The first is obviously more uplifting. I would like to know about Silver Fox's date and if it blossomed into true love. I think writing more about the things that made the second character so depressed would help. Possibly dialogue with her husband while he was dying would help. Overall I think you have two great stories here. I definitely would want to know more about both.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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What a great idea, Dialogue with the husband. I will definitely add that. Thanks for a great idea.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Judy, I would suggest you start with some action, get the story moving, grab the reader's attention, and then you gradually weave in the background with flash backs.
I think you have some great material here. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Hi Judy, I would suggest you start with some action, get the story moving, grab the reader's attention, and then you gradually weave in the background with flash backs.
I think you have some great material here. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Thank you Ulla, I do start with action. Then I give back ground to the characters at different times.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You would have to consider very carefully how to frame all of this into a novel to avoid info overload.
Discipline is all you need ,boy - space after the comma from before.
They were a unique couple, his Mom, and Dad- second comma isn't necessary.
where she placed 2nd in Nationals An injury kept her from advancing - needs to be some kind of punctuation after Nationals.
Our school had none of the equipment she needed for a gymnastics team - The use of Our here threw me as it this is first person narrative and the rest felt third.
The first section is very heavily slanted with backstory. Bu that I mean that it leans heavily on the characterisation of his Mom & dad and at times it is a little unclear whose story it is. There is a lot of backstory here and if putting into a novel would have to handled very carefully so as not to read like an info dump.
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Those two years were a roller coaster - rollercoaster.
One thing I did notice is that it relies heavily on backstory for the characterisation - giving them a past and depth but it really only goes as far as giving details and some of the psychological identity. There is little to no physical characteristics present and very little told about the here and now.
The most important thing is what the story is. No one can really tell you how they would fit into a novel as there is no way of the reader knowing the plot, how the two are interconnected (if they are) and where their story is going.
It's great to have well-rounded characters but they need a story and direction. I have hundreds of character sketches on my laptop who don't have a home as the stories haven't came for them.
Just some things to consider.
GMG
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Hi there,
You would have to consider very carefully how to frame all of this into a novel to avoid info overload.
Discipline is all you need ,boy - space after the comma from before.
They were a unique couple, his Mom, and Dad- second comma isn't necessary.
where she placed 2nd in Nationals An injury kept her from advancing - needs to be some kind of punctuation after Nationals.
Our school had none of the equipment she needed for a gymnastics team - The use of Our here threw me as it this is first person narrative and the rest felt third.
The first section is very heavily slanted with backstory. Bu that I mean that it leans heavily on the characterisation of his Mom & dad and at times it is a little unclear whose story it is. There is a lot of backstory here and if putting into a novel would have to handled very carefully so as not to read like an info dump.
Coupons, DYI home improvements - DIY.
Those two years were a roller coaster - rollercoaster.
One thing I did notice is that it relies heavily on backstory for the characterisation - giving them a past and depth but it really only goes as far as giving details and some of the psychological identity. There is little to no physical characteristics present and very little told about the here and now.
The most important thing is what the story is. No one can really tell you how they would fit into a novel as there is no way of the reader knowing the plot, how the two are interconnected (if they are) and where their story is going.
It's great to have well-rounded characters but they need a story and direction. I have hundreds of character sketches on my laptop who don't have a home as the stories haven't came for them.
Just some things to consider.
GMG
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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The story is already half written. I just wanted more depth with the characters after it gets going. It is from the True Test about teachers at an inservice meeting stuck and alone for several weeks after a natural disaster. As always your reviews are so helpful
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there;
Your character development is going very well. I've been doing a lot of research and reading on the topics of your questions about writing a novel. (I'm doing the NaNoWriMo next month - just a few days away!)
Anyway, you 'show' the characters in the novel when you weave them into your storyline. Do you have a plot yet? Do you know what the goal of each character is?
The backstory is tricky, but you can either show it by weaving the details of a character's life through thoughts or how they are dealing with a current situation. It all comes down to carefully crafting the story.
Hope this helps,
~patty~
(Check out futurelearn.com - they have an excellent course on writing fiction for FREE!)
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Hi there;
Your character development is going very well. I've been doing a lot of research and reading on the topics of your questions about writing a novel. (I'm doing the NaNoWriMo next month - just a few days away!)
Anyway, you 'show' the characters in the novel when you weave them into your storyline. Do you have a plot yet? Do you know what the goal of each character is?
The backstory is tricky, but you can either show it by weaving the details of a character's life through thoughts or how they are dealing with a current situation. It all comes down to carefully crafting the story.
Hope this helps,
~patty~
(Check out futurelearn.com - they have an excellent course on writing fiction for FREE!)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Yes, it is called the true test. These are the some of the main characters. It starts with a natural disaster that isolates a school with only the teachers there for an in-service meeting
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is well done.
Your characters really come to life in two touching stories.
I liked this.
Good luck with your writing and your book to be.
Sharon
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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This is well done.
Your characters really come to life in two touching stories.
I liked this.
Good luck with your writing and your book to be.
Sharon
Comment Written 27-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017
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Thank you Sharon. I hope to share the story and then figure out how to get this knowlege out bout the characters.
