New Outlook
Changed view toward the aged.36 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
This is thought-provoking, Phillip. I'm wondering what changed between the three stanzas. It sounds like you've learned to adapt to your new neighborhood of older adults and gained new ranks by going to the gym?
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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This is thought-provoking, Phillip. I'm wondering what changed between the three stanzas. It sounds like you've learned to adapt to your new neighborhood of older adults and gained new ranks by going to the gym?
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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They indirectly helped me. I've very independent and they collectively share views different mine. Thanks for reading, lyenochka.
Phillip
Comment from apky
A well written rhyme that tells a many-facetted story.
Like findinbg one's place in the community or the environment.
Like all the little conflicts that crop up between diferent generations
and their beliefs and lessons in life.
You did an excellent job here. Sorry I'm out of sixes, Phillip.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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A well written rhyme that tells a many-facetted story.
Like findinbg one's place in the community or the environment.
Like all the little conflicts that crop up between diferent generations
and their beliefs and lessons in life.
You did an excellent job here. Sorry I'm out of sixes, Phillip.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thanks a lot, apky.
Phillip
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"New Outlook", is an extremely well written and intriguing piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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"New Outlook", is an extremely well written and intriguing piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thanks a lot, duchessofdrumborg.
Phillip
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Philip, you're very welcome.
Take care and bless you, the Duchess
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Thanks, Duchess
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pbomar115, you're more than welcome,
Best wishes, bless you and take care,
the Duchess
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Thanks a lot.
Phillip
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Phillip, as always, you're very welcome.
Best wishes, bless you and take care,
the Duchess
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Thank you, Duchess.
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Phillip, you're very welcome.
Best wishes, bless you and have a wonderful weekend,
the Duchess
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Phillip, as always you're more than welcome.
Best wishes, bless you and take care,
the Duchess
Comment from sunnilicious
Dope is stupid and illegal, except now for weed in plenty places. It alters the mind and messes people up from living a clean life. I guess some neighbors you can't get away from it. I'm glad you changed your ways to strong and healthy. Great narrative story in a poem. Nice work.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Dope is stupid and illegal, except now for weed in plenty places. It alters the mind and messes people up from living a clean life. I guess some neighbors you can't get away from it. I'm glad you changed your ways to strong and healthy. Great narrative story in a poem. Nice work.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading, sunnilicious.
Phillip
Comment from GracieAnn
pbomar,
This is a well rhymed write that draws the reader in. It seems to be a heavy write at first but the last phrase juxtaposes unexpected humor. Fresh and creative. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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pbomar,
This is a well rhymed write that draws the reader in. It seems to be a heavy write at first but the last phrase juxtaposes unexpected humor. Fresh and creative. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thanks, for compliment and reading, GracieAnn.
Phillip
Comment from RGstar
I think I know what you were saying here, and I found you said it well.
For not knowing what to expect in a new environment, you were cautious, feeling that all wanted to solicit, you took a back seat...ended up in a gym of where you felt out of place because of age.
I hope I am correct in my assumption, for I am afraid whoever gave you three stars really did not understand the poem.
I found it well done, for the art of poetry is 'saying something by not actually saying it'
My quote.
Have a great evening.
RGstar
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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I think I know what you were saying here, and I found you said it well.
For not knowing what to expect in a new environment, you were cautious, feeling that all wanted to solicit, you took a back seat...ended up in a gym of where you felt out of place because of age.
I hope I am correct in my assumption, for I am afraid whoever gave you three stars really did not understand the poem.
I found it well done, for the art of poetry is 'saying something by not actually saying it'
My quote.
Have a great evening.
RGstar
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Wow. Thank you so much, RGstar.
Phillip
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm with you here, my friend. The different ages have different outlooks, but that is good. I'm a senior citizen and I go to the gym three times a week. There are many of us there. I loved your poem, my friend. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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I'm with you here, my friend. The different ages have different outlooks, but that is good. I'm a senior citizen and I go to the gym three times a week. There are many of us there. I loved your poem, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Sandra, I'm turning 66 very soon, so where do I fit in? Thanks for reading, Sandra.
Phillip
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Well, I'm in my seventies, so I would put you in the middle-age group, still a spring chicken, where I wish I was again! LOL, xxx
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I say the same about those younger me, too.
Phillip
Comment from Brigitte Elko
Thank you for sharing this great poem. The content is flawless and well thought out. I am in this category, the aged, so I can easily relate. My friend, everything you write becomes better and better. Don't put that pen away, keep it coming.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thank you for sharing this great poem. The content is flawless and well thought out. I am in this category, the aged, so I can easily relate. My friend, everything you write becomes better and better. Don't put that pen away, keep it coming.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the wonderful review, Brigitte.
Phillip
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
From a condensed viewpoint, I came to a thought
Everyone here in one form or another has been taught
To appropriately sway these aged and nearly suspended
I changed my environment. It was the gym a place I'd ascended ...excellent poem full of meaning, well done! kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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From a condensed viewpoint, I came to a thought
Everyone here in one form or another has been taught
To appropriately sway these aged and nearly suspended
I changed my environment. It was the gym a place I'd ascended ...excellent poem full of meaning, well done! kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thank you kindly for the wonderful review, Meia.
Phillip
Comment from dragonpoet
It seems the first two stanzas are saying your youth gave you hope for the future and maybe maturity to understand the senior citizen has a lot to offer the young as we have a lot to offer them.
The third stanza is a little confusing. I don't understand how the gym fits into the story.
I don't think you need the And in the second line of the poem.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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It seems the first two stanzas are saying your youth gave you hope for the future and maybe maturity to understand the senior citizen has a lot to offer the young as we have a lot to offer them.
The third stanza is a little confusing. I don't understand how the gym fits into the story.
I don't think you need the And in the second line of the poem.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thanks for your suggestion and review, dragonpoet.
Phillip
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We're here to help each other. You're welcome.
Joan
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Thanks, Joan.
Phillip
