This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Lady Gwendolyn"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I'm really confused. I thought Sir John and Gwendolyn were married. Now we find out she is his sister, yet still the mother of Francis? Incest? Sorry, maybe it's me, but this is not making sense. ?
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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I'm really confused. I thought Sir John and Gwendolyn were married. Now we find out she is his sister, yet still the mother of Francis? Incest? Sorry, maybe it's me, but this is not making sense. ?
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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It's alright, Phyllis, I get confused loads of times. Thank you for reading this part. Nothing makes sense when you don't know all the facts, but hopefully, they will come. :) Sandra xx
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Can you explain it to me? Sister or wife? You list her as wife at the bottom. And she is the boy's mother, so... I just got more confused. LOL!
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Next part. Veronica's thoughts on who is who has only been supposition so far. Hmm, I should have thought of that when I listed her as Sir Johns wife, perhaps, in hindsight, I should have just given her name, but I didn't want there to be any clues given that early in the book. I can change that now. Thanks, Phyllis. These thoughts are what I look for in reviews. :) xx
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Glad I could help. I agree. We need to know what, if anything, confuses the reader. That's the last thing you want to do. You can lose readers because of it.
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That's so true. I've stopped reading some, even stopped reading a book I borrowed from the library because of that. I've changed it now. Next part might clarify things better. :) xxxx
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Well hurry up and post it then so my brain won't be so scrambled. :)
Comment from KNim
Intriguing and well done! You drew me into the story and made me want to read from the beginning! I understand reviews are suppose to have constructive criticism, but honestly cannot think of any here. Bravo!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Intriguing and well done! You drew me into the story and made me want to read from the beginning! I understand reviews are suppose to have constructive criticism, but honestly cannot think of any here. Bravo!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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What a really lovely review! Thank you so very much. The 6 stars are equally appreciated and I thank you for those as well. I hope to see you again. Big hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from aryr
Another great chapter Sandra. I really enjoyed the suspense level that leaves me still wondering who Frances is? Why is Veronica there? What will happen to Joe and his family? And of course the future of Frances? I also think about how Veronica's family is dealing with her disappearance? You provided great details and the reading flow was great. Very well done my friend.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Another great chapter Sandra. I really enjoyed the suspense level that leaves me still wondering who Frances is? Why is Veronica there? What will happen to Joe and his family? And of course the future of Frances? I also think about how Veronica's family is dealing with her disappearance? You provided great details and the reading flow was great. Very well done my friend.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Alie, for another of your lovely reviews. It's complicated at the moment, but it will become clearer very soon. I'm glad you enjoyed this part. :) Sandra xx
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You are so very welcome Sandra, I am patient and can wait.
Comment from gramalot8
Hi. I enjoyed reading this chapter. I want to go back and reread others. Great dialect with the UK English and West Country language.... makes your story very believable. Great job and thanks for sharing this story with us.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Hi. I enjoyed reading this chapter. I want to go back and reread others. Great dialect with the UK English and West Country language.... makes your story very believable. Great job and thanks for sharing this story with us.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much, Gramalot, for taking the time to read this part of my story. And I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Big hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Sandra. I enjoyed reading this chapter of your story. I'm not a regular reader of the story but it's easy to get the gist since I've read other segments. Your writing is clear and interesting with good descriptions and detail. I did notice the discrepancy in "Francis/Frances," and wondered if I was missing something--were there two children, a boy and a girl. So I re-read it a few times. I've come to the conclusion it is "Francis," a boy. If I'm right, you may want to correct the "Frances" spelling. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Hi Sandra. I enjoyed reading this chapter of your story. I'm not a regular reader of the story but it's easy to get the gist since I've read other segments. Your writing is clear and interesting with good descriptions and detail. I did notice the discrepancy in "Francis/Frances," and wondered if I was missing something--were there two children, a boy and a girl. So I re-read it a few times. I've come to the conclusion it is "Francis," a boy. If I'm right, you may want to correct the "Frances" spelling. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for picking those errors up in Francis, Marilyn, I've made the corrections. I thought I had corrected them all but I'd only caught a few. I'm delighted that you did read this part, I know many of my friends on here will only read poetry. That's what I used to do. I'm pleased you enjoyed this part.Thanks my friend, xxx Sandra x
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Hi Sandra. You're welcome. Another thing I thought that was so charming in the chapter had to do with Francis--playing with him--hand going through hand. Mothers, especially can appreciate that.
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I'm really pleased you liked that, I had a visual in my mind with this scene. I could just imagine how a child would giggle at that. xxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Aw, now we might get something done. Lady Gwendoline is content with Meg caring for Francis. Joe has a right to be worried, His family is to be thrown out in the cold if she can't find a solution to the problem of him seeing Francis. Well done! Love it. Nancy
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Aw, now we might get something done. Lady Gwendoline is content with Meg caring for Francis. Joe has a right to be worried, His family is to be thrown out in the cold if she can't find a solution to the problem of him seeing Francis. Well done! Love it. Nancy
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Aww, thank you, dear Nancy, for all those stars! Your review is so nice, It's not looking too good for any of them at the moment. I'm going to have to have a word with them all lol. Big hugs, my friend. xxx
Comment from mmonaghan777
Very exciting on the edge of my seat kind of writing. It keeps moving at a pace I enjoy with descriptions to tell me who I'm with and where I am at all times. Can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Very exciting on the edge of my seat kind of writing. It keeps moving at a pace I enjoy with descriptions to tell me who I'm with and where I am at all times. Can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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That's so nice of you to say that, thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. xx Sandra
Comment from royowen
Wow! What a turnabout, firstly Sir John isn't married and it seems Francis' (remember with an 'i' instead of an 'e' , "Sir Francis Drake", e is the female, Sandra) you always beautifully contrasting characters, lovely warm people like Veronica and James, Joe and his son, Meg and Lady Gwendoline. Second surprise, Lady Gwendoline is now a ghost, I remember she wasn't well, well done Sandra, good taling, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Wow! What a turnabout, firstly Sir John isn't married and it seems Francis' (remember with an 'i' instead of an 'e' , "Sir Francis Drake", e is the female, Sandra) you always beautifully contrasting characters, lovely warm people like Veronica and James, Joe and his son, Meg and Lady Gwendoline. Second surprise, Lady Gwendoline is now a ghost, I remember she wasn't well, well done Sandra, good taling, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I must remember that about Frances/Francis. I'll go and change that immediately, thank you so much, my dear Roy! I think I must put a note on my screen so I don't forget it again! lol. Thank you so much, my friend, I love your reviews. Biggest hugs. :) Sandra xxxx
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Well done Sandra
Comment from Ulla
Wow, Sandra, what a development. I loved it. Poor Veronica doesn't know what to do next. How will she cope? The story is moving along in a beautiful way. I simply love it. How is she going to find the solution? Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Wow, Sandra, what a development. I loved it. Poor Veronica doesn't know what to do next. How will she cope? The story is moving along in a beautiful way. I simply love it. How is she going to find the solution? Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thank you soooo much, my wonderful friend! The six stars are so unexpected at this time in the week, you are so nice giving me one. Thank you. I'm so pleased you like it, it's so encouraging. Big hugs, :) Sandra xxxx
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As you know, I love the story. Hugs. xxxx
Comment from pbomar1115
While Veronica trying dealing with several problems, I also feel for Joe's house situation. Then one of Veronica's concerns suddenly appeared at the end of this chapter. The ghost of Gwendolyn. In the paragraph that begins with (, The Manor House was very quiet...Look the line (That brought a smile a smile) Did you mean to repeat? (a smile)
Philip
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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While Veronica trying dealing with several problems, I also feel for Joe's house situation. Then one of Veronica's concerns suddenly appeared at the end of this chapter. The ghost of Gwendolyn. In the paragraph that begins with (, The Manor House was very quiet...Look the line (That brought a smile a smile) Did you mean to repeat? (a smile)
Philip
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thank you so very much for spotting that, Phillip, I went back straight away, and it took me three reads to see what I'd done! Honestly, I think I'm having so many 'senior moments' these days! Thank you so very much for that and the lovely review. :) Sandra xxx
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Heck, Sandra. That has nothing to do with age. That comes from keeping your head to the grindstone. That means you are working very hard. Forget that senior moment, bull.
Phillip
