seagulls circle
4/7/6 haiku35 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Gypsy. The entire haiku speaks to me of motion--the train, the seagulls, the freedom of unknown destination. Imagination takes over on a mind trip. Nicely worded. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Hi Gypsy. The entire haiku speaks to me of motion--the train, the seagulls, the freedom of unknown destination. Imagination takes over on a mind trip. Nicely worded. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Hello, Marilyn, thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a 476 Haku about seagulls it read well and flowed well there was no grammar issues detective content was perfect as well as descriptive measures semen imagery also were excellent thanks for this
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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This is a 476 Haku about seagulls it read well and flowed well there was no grammar issues detective content was perfect as well as descriptive measures semen imagery also were excellent thanks for this
Comment Written 31-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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thank you, Ricky
Comment from Mark Schardine
Seagulls always fascinate us. They seem to prefer to stay in groups, but then some of them seem solitary, seeking a destination only they understand.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Seagulls always fascinate us. They seem to prefer to stay in groups, but then some of them seem solitary, seeking a destination only they understand.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Mark, your thoughtful and kind review is deeply appreciated. Have an awesome week.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Gypsy
A wonderful Haiku that tells such an intriguing story and sets the imagination racing with such few words, you really are a master at this form of poetry.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Hi Gypsy
A wonderful Haiku that tells such an intriguing story and sets the imagination racing with such few words, you really are a master at this form of poetry.
Mitchell
Comment Written 28-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from sandy montgomery
What a clever satori. I think this is a great haiku. This is a beautifully set poem. I love that play with it being the Amtrak station and destination. This shows how much fun haiku can be. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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What a clever satori. I think this is a great haiku. This is a beautifully set poem. I love that play with it being the Amtrak station and destination. This shows how much fun haiku can be. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Well done. And the picture is great.
It is hard to write these short poems and make them make sense. I've done a great job.
Good luck on your contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Well done. And the picture is great.
It is hard to write these short poems and make them make sense. I've done a great job.
Good luck on your contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, my friend. No contest.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-a very clever, witty and proportionate haiku that is so very descriptive and expressive in nature. These what the first two lines of your haiku express and that is a destination, and location And an action of a seagull that circling above an Amtrak station.
-The very Witty satori Kind of like personifies the seagull as a passenger of the train with a destination unknown. It gives that haiku an aha moment In one the substantially supports the conceptual theme of the haiku.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Cheers, Gypsy;
-a very clever, witty and proportionate haiku that is so very descriptive and expressive in nature. These what the first two lines of your haiku express and that is a destination, and location And an action of a seagull that circling above an Amtrak station.
-The very Witty satori Kind of like personifies the seagull as a passenger of the train with a destination unknown. It gives that haiku an aha moment In one the substantially supports the conceptual theme of the haiku.
-Thank you for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy hugs
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You're welcome Gypsy.
Alex
Comment from patcelaw
What usually happens with Amtrak is the estimated time of arrival is unknown. Seeing my daughter and her family came by train a couple of years ago and their train was 4 hours late arriving as the destination. Patricia
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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What usually happens with Amtrak is the estimated time of arrival is unknown. Seeing my daughter and her family came by train a couple of years ago and their train was 4 hours late arriving as the destination. Patricia
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from l.raven
Hi Gypsy, this brings back a lot of memories...when living in Florida we would go to the beach on the weekends...if you had one little piece of food in your hand the seagulls would stay right by you...or attack you...LOL...it was good times back then...I love you poem sweet girl...and your colors and picture are beautiful...very nicely written you...love you sweetie...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Hi Gypsy, this brings back a lot of memories...when living in Florida we would go to the beach on the weekends...if you had one little piece of food in your hand the seagulls would stay right by you...or attack you...LOL...it was good times back then...I love you poem sweet girl...and your colors and picture are beautiful...very nicely written you...love you sweetie...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, my friend. Love you,
Gypsy hugs
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love you too you...xxoo love
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Gypsy, I liked the contrasting blues in your picture. Seagulls are beautiful to see soaring above buildings. This seagull seems to me to be out of his element, away from the sea and waves, and the Amtrak station mixed with "destination unknown" is a good combining thought and idea. I hope he makes it to where he finally decides to go! Dove
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Dear Gypsy, I liked the contrasting blues in your picture. Seagulls are beautiful to see soaring above buildings. This seagull seems to me to be out of his element, away from the sea and waves, and the Amtrak station mixed with "destination unknown" is a good combining thought and idea. I hope he makes it to where he finally decides to go! Dove
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Dove Marie, Thank you very much for the thoughtful and helpful feedback, I really appreciate it.
Gypsy hugs
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Dear Gypsy, Your welcome. Dove
